A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Changing of the Guard"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from allborn66
It is a very interesting story. This is the first chapter I have read. I found myself quickly into the plot, and I enjoyed your voice.
Barbara
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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It is a very interesting story. This is the first chapter I have read. I found myself quickly into the plot, and I enjoyed your voice.
Barbara
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I know it is difficult to start reading in the middle but most of my chapters can stand alone since they are a accumulation of individual stories. Again, thank you for your interest and kind reviw.
Comment from marion
Hi there Smurfhgirl
I felt compelled to read your biographical account of abuse although this is the only chapter I think I have read. It is well written albeit heart wrenching. Especially the relapse. It is also devastating to see the influences of Valerie's past affect the present so much. There is a lot be be answered for here.
A few small things:
temper," (suggest full stop)
"They are always the same," (missing word?) explained.
moment,(space)debating
and, and, in a (is that intentional?)
A well written account. Marion.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hi there Smurfhgirl
I felt compelled to read your biographical account of abuse although this is the only chapter I think I have read. It is well written albeit heart wrenching. Especially the relapse. It is also devastating to see the influences of Valerie's past affect the present so much. There is a lot be be answered for here.
A few small things:
temper," (suggest full stop)
"They are always the same," (missing word?) explained.
moment,(space)debating
and, and, in a (is that intentional?)
A well written account. Marion.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Thank you for you review and helpful suggestions. I sincerely appreciate them.
