The Breeding Colony
Aliens try to establish a human colony31 total reviews
Comment from R. K. Alan
Hi Snodlander, just thought I would peruse the scifi offerings, as that is my genre at the moment, and I found your piece. I loved the interesting twist at the end. As intelligent as the aliens may be, they failed to grasp the male/female thing we have going on... loved it. Ray aka Krylon
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Hi Snodlander, just thought I would peruse the scifi offerings, as that is my genre at the moment, and I found your piece. I loved the interesting twist at the end. As intelligent as the aliens may be, they failed to grasp the male/female thing we have going on... loved it. Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from MaureenC
Thank you Snodlander, this is an hilarious take on 'alien abduction'. I find everything in it well done. Dialogue, description and characterization.
I love the final part when the 'humans' wake up.
Really good
Mauseyc
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009
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Thank you Snodlander, this is an hilarious take on 'alien abduction'. I find everything in it well done. Dialogue, description and characterization.
I love the final part when the 'humans' wake up.
Really good
Mauseyc
Comment Written 08-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from Rain Chapman
This is really funny! I enjoyed it so much I read it to my family so they could have a chuckle too. Your work is creative and I didn't see anything to change. Great job!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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This is really funny! I enjoyed it so much I read it to my family so they could have a chuckle too. Your work is creative and I didn't see anything to change. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Than k you. I'm flattered.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is bautiful. You stretched your creative imaginatination to a great length to arrive at this wonderful story. I found it exciting and enlightening. kudos
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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This is bautiful. You stretched your creative imaginatination to a great length to arrive at this wonderful story. I found it exciting and enlightening. kudos
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Thanks. Glad you liked it
Comment from chaswriter
snodlander - I enjoy your brand of humor and the ending twist is a good one. If you don't understand a species reproductive cycle then you may not get the results you want. Well written and thanks for the laugh.
One suggestion:
We can only assume that very early () in the evolution of their planet(,) this mutation provided an evolutionary advantage, though what that might have been is beyond me."
Charlie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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snodlander - I enjoy your brand of humor and the ending twist is a good one. If you don't understand a species reproductive cycle then you may not get the results you want. Well written and thanks for the laugh.
One suggestion:
We can only assume that very early () in the evolution of their planet(,) this mutation provided an evolutionary advantage, though what that might have been is beyond me."
Charlie
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it
Comment from laurelp
Very funny. All males. Oh well, no reproduction in that group. Very well written, I found no errors except by the aliens. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Very funny. All males. Oh well, no reproduction in that group. Very well written, I found no errors except by the aliens. Nicely done.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Thank you. Glad you liked it
Comment from RobinMarie
I was hoping there would be all of one sex. Hilarious. Great story, I had to let my roommate read it because I literally laughed aloud... so did she.
I didn't see any spag and I loved the premise.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I was hoping there would be all of one sex. Hilarious. Great story, I had to let my roommate read it because I literally laughed aloud... so did she.
I didn't see any spag and I loved the premise.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Excellent. Thanks for the review and the generous score. Glad you found it funny
Comment from Annelisa
This was fun! The dialogue was smooth and entertaining. It took me a few moments to get the punchline, my fault-not yours;) But I got itand had a good laugh. Annelisa
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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This was fun! The dialogue was smooth and entertaining. It took me a few moments to get the punchline, my fault-not yours;) But I got itand had a good laugh. Annelisa
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Thanks. Glad you liked it
Comment from nightraine1956
Very unique story. This was fun to read and the conversation with the aliens kept my attention. I didn't quite get the ending, but I am sure I missed something. Good work.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Very unique story. This was fun to read and the conversation with the aliens kept my attention. I didn't quite get the ending, but I am sure I missed something. Good work.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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The five humans selected to breed all had guy's names. The aliens didn't quite grasp the concept of sex. Sorry if it was a bit obscure.
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Well duh! My bad. I enjoyed it even if I had a brain fart.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Splendid science fiction piece. A bit of advice -- whatever they do, do not let them capture Nadya Suleman. She could over-populate the colony in our lifetime. Not to mention burst the "it takes two" theory!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Splendid science fiction piece. A bit of advice -- whatever they do, do not let them capture Nadya Suleman. She could over-populate the colony in our lifetime. Not to mention burst the "it takes two" theory!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Is she the single mum of octuplets? How would she cope without her mum and sponsorship? I think we're safe.
Thanks for the review. Glad you liked it
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Yep, she is the Octo-mom. Her parents may desert and turn the house over to mommie and 14 kids. She seems to be doing o.k. financially with all her personal appearances. Not sure who will be minding the kids while she is appearing before all the cameras. I think the girl is only 33 with 14 kids and no husband. Keep her away from your five guys who are starting the new civilization. She still has several years to bear children and your five guys might end up baby sitters.
