A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Dumb Questions"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from medicnate
Another very good chapter. I like the mini history lesson. Sad that she couldn't even ask her father a question. I was limited to 10 questions per day, hehe.
It is not exactly clear when Temujin Kahn was born.(,)"
Great job.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Another very good chapter. I like the mini history lesson. Sad that she couldn't even ask her father a question. I was limited to 10 questions per day, hehe.
It is not exactly clear when Temujin Kahn was born.(,)"
Great job.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Thanks. I sincerely appreciate your comments. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Lois Delaney
Belittling is another form of abuse. Making you feel stupid, and ugly when in reality you were beautiful. I can't understand your sister not noticing something was terribly wrong.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Belittling is another form of abuse. Making you feel stupid, and ugly when in reality you were beautiful. I can't understand your sister not noticing something was terribly wrong.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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She was too wrapped up in her own world to notice anything other than herself. There was only one years difference in our ages but I was taller and everyone though we were twins. She really didn't like this...probably felt like she didn't have her own identity.
Comment from jodeecee
I couldn't comprehend how he could remember so many dates, people and/,/ events
This was the only thing I could pick out in this chapter!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I couldn't comprehend how he could remember so many dates, people and/,/ events
This was the only thing I could pick out in this chapter!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you for the time you take to review my work.
Comment from adewpearl
I stopped asking questions - what a powerful statement - I do adult literacy tutoring - one of my students, in his 50's, told me his teacher back in grade school told him he was stupid and would never learn to read because he was slow.
And he stopped trying to read. It's amazing the power of an adult's cruel words on a child's psyche and self esteem.
You are really excellent at understanding how psychology works in interpersonal relationships. You also understand how one child can be the favorite and the other one suffers for it - the part about the father's helping with the sister's project and the narrator's windmill not working is powerful. Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I stopped asking questions - what a powerful statement - I do adult literacy tutoring - one of my students, in his 50's, told me his teacher back in grade school told him he was stupid and would never learn to read because he was slow.
And he stopped trying to read. It's amazing the power of an adult's cruel words on a child's psyche and self esteem.
You are really excellent at understanding how psychology works in interpersonal relationships. You also understand how one child can be the favorite and the other one suffers for it - the part about the father's helping with the sister's project and the narrator's windmill not working is powerful. Brooke
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind words,
Comment from jojosug
Again you've captured this child's conflict perfectly. Love and hate in equal measure. Your writing is simple but effective and clearly conveys the message you want to get across.
Jo
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Again you've captured this child's conflict perfectly. Love and hate in equal measure. Your writing is simple but effective and clearly conveys the message you want to get across.
Jo
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I am pleased you see what I am trying to convey. Again, thank you.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Smurph, the voices in this are so exceedingly authentic. Really well written story with palpable emotion. The honesty is amazing--prompting the reader to "feel" for Valerie. Only one little typo did I spy:
Daddy shook [h]is head.
The contrasts in this particular section are amazing.
Great work. Seraph
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Smurph, the voices in this are so exceedingly authentic. Really well written story with palpable emotion. The honesty is amazing--prompting the reader to "feel" for Valerie. Only one little typo did I spy:
Daddy shook [h]is head.
The contrasts in this particular section are amazing.
Great work. Seraph
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Thanks. I am pleased you liked it. Thanks for the correction...
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Boy, do I know how that feels! I felt continually ugly and stupid (and all the rest of the negative things you are brainwashed into feeling when abused). I really identify with you in this chapter. Sometimes it helps to have written it down. Your writing is descriptive and informative, you tell it how it is without begging for pity. Great stuff. Keep going. Kat
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Boy, do I know how that feels! I felt continually ugly and stupid (and all the rest of the negative things you are brainwashed into feeling when abused). I really identify with you in this chapter. Sometimes it helps to have written it down. Your writing is descriptive and informative, you tell it how it is without begging for pity. Great stuff. Keep going. Kat
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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I really appreciate both your comments and opinion. Thanks for the support.
Comment from Soulester
Dear Smurphgirl,
This is the first of your chapters that I have read, and I will definitely read more. This is already a polished work. I detect no spags. Having taught some sexually abused children, I must say her feelings and learning problems ring very true and your recounting of it is a very compelling read. I say this is perfect just as it is.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Dear Smurphgirl,
This is the first of your chapters that I have read, and I will definitely read more. This is already a polished work. I detect no spags. Having taught some sexually abused children, I must say her feelings and learning problems ring very true and your recounting of it is a very compelling read. I say this is perfect just as it is.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Thank you so very much. I sincerely appreciate your comments.Y^hsn
Comment from badaner
(Short but necessary chapter that shows Valerie's continued emotional deterioration and low self-esteem.)
I agree: You have taken the reader below the surface; deep into the tortured mind of the child, to fully comprehend all aspects of the horrifying merry-go-round of abuse she suffered.
It also serves to remind us of how 'normal' abusers appear to those around them.
Another well written chapter in which I didn't notice any SPaG.
badaner x
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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(Short but necessary chapter that shows Valerie's continued emotional deterioration and low self-esteem.)
I agree: You have taken the reader below the surface; deep into the tortured mind of the child, to fully comprehend all aspects of the horrifying merry-go-round of abuse she suffered.
It also serves to remind us of how 'normal' abusers appear to those around them.
Another well written chapter in which I didn't notice any SPaG.
badaner x
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate you undersanding the point of the chapte.
Comment from laurelp
Well written as always. You show the confusion of the relationship between your father and Valerie as compared to
your relationship. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Well written as always. You show the confusion of the relationship between your father and Valerie as compared to
your relationship. Nicely written.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Thank you. That was my intent.
