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A Leaf on the Wind

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Autobiography of abuse

18 total reviews 
Comment from medicnate
Exceptional
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Very good chapter. I could feel the terror that she felt as she realized she could have a baby inside of her. I am anxious and scared to read on.

~medicnate~

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2009


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
    Thanks. When looking back I found it both amazing and sad how I was left to answers my own questions...my fear of looking stupid prevente me from seaking advice and knowledge.
Comment from Lois Delaney
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Again, a great reason to get this out in the open. Allow your self room to heal by telling and writing the story. Writing is good therapy, and you are a great writer. This story every woman should read, so that they watch their daughters more carefully.


inside me filled me with remove the comma after filled

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your kind review and words of encouagement. This is one of the reasons I decided to write this book. I wanted people to understnad the long term damage abuse has on its victim and the difficult, but possible, road to recovery. Again, thank you for your encouragement.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
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A very interesting story to read. I really enjoyed this story from the angle of the little girl's innocence. The irresponsible behaviour of some adults is also well depicted here. kudos.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
    Thank you. I appreciate your comments and thank you for your high review.
Comment from Terror2s
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Well, I could picture the main character panicked abou this. Of course, since I have not read from the beginning I wasn't really sure of her age. 11 or so? Terror

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
    Close, I was ten. Thanks for the high review.
Comment from jodeecee
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Great job! your writing never looses the reality of the mindset of the age you were, I think that is a talent many adults don't have.
No matter how much I wanted Daddy to stop, there was no way I was going to tell /M/mom.
knowing it was inside me/,/ filled me with constant fear and apprehension. When the baby did start to grow, everyone would know my secret /Repeat from para. above- and everyone would hate me/. I knew it was just a matter of time.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
    Thank you. I appreciate your attention to detail.
Comment from adewpearl
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Again, you understand the thoughts of your character so well - children that age often are this naive about sex and reproduction when they have not been informed - and that she had no idea she might get pregnant from the incest is completely believable - and now she is terrified a baby will come. Not having read earlier chapters, I don't know if she menstruates yet for the worries to be founded, but that doesn't matter. To her, the fears are real - one can feel her terror of being rejected and blamed for things that are not in her control at all. I feel like reaching out and comforting this poor child, not to mention rescuing her from this incestuous bastard! Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
    Than you for you comments. No, she has not menstrated yet...
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
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Well, I really enjoyed reading your book. Is all of this really true? Did your Dad really do this to you? That's just sick. I would have told someone right away. Just curious though. Did you wind up telling your mom about it? Because that's wrong. He should never have touched you like that. I'm glad to know my dad doesn't do that to me. I can't wait to read what happens next. Best of luck to you in your venture. Come judgement day, your Dad will seriously have to answer to God for this. Take care.

Rachel

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
    Yes is it all true. It started in the late 40's and there was simply no one to go to. Problems, as so many called it, were family issues and not fodder for open discussion. Life was different back then. You'll have to red the reast to find out abaoaut my mother.....
Comment from EricMentzer
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This is a very sad story. It is horrible to think that there are people out there who will do such horrible things to children as Valerie's father did. Children are to be cherished not abused. I hope that your story gets out to other people who may know someone or who are themselves in the position that Valerie finds herself. You have written a truly compelling story.

God Bless,
Eric

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
    Thank you for your kind words
Comment from laurelp
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The horrors of that story only sadden me. I am glad you are doing so much better now. But the thought of having your childhood stolen from you only angers me against your father and mother even more. I can't believe she didn't know. Somewhere deep inside she had to have an idea of what was happening. She was too weak or whatever to do anything. Sorry, I just had to vent.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
    Vent away! I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
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Oh gods. The terrible things you had to bear. This story just becomes more heart-rending with every chapter. You have written this chapter exceptionally well; the reader gets a feel for the fear and self-disgust this poor child endures every day of her life. I am so glad you found a friend! All blessings to you.
Kat

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2009


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
    Thank you. As I have said, mixed in the the bad are many good moments that carried me through the tough times.