A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Blisters and a Really Big Fight"Autobiography of abuse
13 total reviews
Comment from medicnate
Nice that the infection went away. We hope the other infection went away in the taxi, but looks like he will probably return.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Nice that the infection went away. We hope the other infection went away in the taxi, but looks like he will probably return.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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No, not yet. Thanks for the continued interest.
Comment from Lois Delaney
I find it odd the doctor did not check your vaginal area for more symptoms. Today, I think the doctor would be able to check for any sign of child abuse. How sad. What kind of disease did he bring to all of you? God, all awful!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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I find it odd the doctor did not check your vaginal area for more symptoms. Today, I think the doctor would be able to check for any sign of child abuse. How sad. What kind of disease did he bring to all of you? God, all awful!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Actually I have no doubt he knew what had happened, but back then Doctors preferred to stay out of what they called "family problems". Also, like most adults at that time he probably figured it wasn't any of his business. Thanks for reading so much. I appreciate your comments and high rating.
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
Wow, that's a big fight and horrible blisters. I wish the best of luck to you in your venture. I also hope this issue gets resolved fast. Have a wonderful Valentine's Day tomorrow and I hope to read more.
Best Regards,
Rachel
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Wow, that's a big fight and horrible blisters. I wish the best of luck to you in your venture. I also hope this issue gets resolved fast. Have a wonderful Valentine's Day tomorrow and I hope to read more.
Best Regards,
Rachel
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your opinion and kind word of encouragement. Happy Valentine's Day to you too.
Comment from Firefly54
A single typo, "that withing a few days," should be within. This is very cleanly edited. Nothing excess to requirements, nothing missing, always clear. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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A single typo, "that withing a few days," should be within. This is very cleanly edited. Nothing excess to requirements, nothing missing, always clear. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thanks. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Again, riviting work. Just a couple of typos:
In the second opening sentence the word "soon" is used twice. Omit one reference.
In the 2nd paragraph, the word "rapped" should be "wrapped."
Otherwise, an excellently composed and heart-wrenching story.
Seraph ~
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Again, riviting work. Just a couple of typos:
In the second opening sentence the word "soon" is used twice. Omit one reference.
In the 2nd paragraph, the word "rapped" should be "wrapped."
Otherwise, an excellently composed and heart-wrenching story.
Seraph ~
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your attention to detail.
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Again, thank you for your critique. I appreciate your diligence and appreciate your reading my book.
Comment from WRITER1
Another excellent chapter, keep going I think this needs to be out in the open where people can see it. I know it's easier to stick one's head in the sand, but it's so wrong.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Another excellent chapter, keep going I think this needs to be out in the open where people can see it. I know it's easier to stick one's head in the sand, but it's so wrong.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. Your comments are truly apreciated.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh my gods. It is quite obvious that you have in fact a sexually transmitted disease - as has your poor mother. You write so well. Your imagery is vivid as usual. It must have been painful to recall all this and write it down, but you've been so brave. Keep going. All the best to you. Kat
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Oh my gods. It is quite obvious that you have in fact a sexually transmitted disease - as has your poor mother. You write so well. Your imagery is vivid as usual. It must have been painful to recall all this and write it down, but you've been so brave. Keep going. All the best to you. Kat
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your opinion and hope you continue with the stoy.
Comment from jodeecee
I had started a note for after I finished reading and my computer ate it alive! UGH! anyway, it said something about, the first few chapters of the book seem to need to tie into the main stores theme of missing time and the abuse, they are great renditions of your memories and it is an auto biography, so forgive me if I am assuming, but for instance tie in the events with missing time, take either an item found some place odd, or (?) to bring it together, real moments out of time frame perhaps? or a bit of bending to fit fiction in, maybe. This is a powerful book, and journal for you. and I thing you have a great ability to put your past into believable and enjoyable wordage, it sparkles. I believe this is worth putting in the extra effort, to make it flow. as a reader, it interests me to hear about finding things out of place, or waking into a different time, without remembering what transpired, it also has 'innumerable' ways to go with it, you can just about go anywhere. 'creative open book' so to speak. like have a fight with Teresa over something of hers, that leads you out to play with your friend, you know what I mean, I'm, sure. this is an awesome piece of work. engaging, a worthwhile read.
"Shirley,/space/settle down, /Y/you are overreacting.
don't give a damn/,/ if it is for the rest of your pathetic life!"
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I had started a note for after I finished reading and my computer ate it alive! UGH! anyway, it said something about, the first few chapters of the book seem to need to tie into the main stores theme of missing time and the abuse, they are great renditions of your memories and it is an auto biography, so forgive me if I am assuming, but for instance tie in the events with missing time, take either an item found some place odd, or (?) to bring it together, real moments out of time frame perhaps? or a bit of bending to fit fiction in, maybe. This is a powerful book, and journal for you. and I thing you have a great ability to put your past into believable and enjoyable wordage, it sparkles. I believe this is worth putting in the extra effort, to make it flow. as a reader, it interests me to hear about finding things out of place, or waking into a different time, without remembering what transpired, it also has 'innumerable' ways to go with it, you can just about go anywhere. 'creative open book' so to speak. like have a fight with Teresa over something of hers, that leads you out to play with your friend, you know what I mean, I'm, sure. this is an awesome piece of work. engaging, a worthwhile read.
"Shirley,/space/settle down, /Y/you are overreacting.
don't give a damn/,/ if it is for the rest of your pathetic life!"
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Yes, they are real events. I didn't offer explanations for this because as a child, I didn't uderstand their significanc. I tie them in later when I am older and learn what they were, why they occurred and why they ocurred. I will look over these chapters again to see if I can do someting to tie them in better with the earlier chapters. I sinerely appreciate your suggestions ad thanky you for your kind review.
Comment from storyman29
Hi smurpgirl
I kept clenching my fists as I read on. When I was growing up, in those days nothing was ever heard or written about your situation.
Nowadays, it seems to be very prevalent. However, I'm convince that those same situations have always existed, but brush under the rug.
Best regards - storyman29
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Hi smurpgirl
I kept clenching my fists as I read on. When I was growing up, in those days nothing was ever heard or written about your situation.
Nowadays, it seems to be very prevalent. However, I'm convince that those same situations have always existed, but brush under the rug.
Best regards - storyman29
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Yes, I agree. In the past the method of dealing with the issue was to simply ignore it and most definitely not talk about it. However, in my book I later make it clear I did not subscribe to the "Silence is Golden" philosophy.
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Yes, I understand perfectly
storyman29
Comment from laurelp
Man, the stupidity of people. Very well written chapters. I really don't know what to say about the contents of the piece, other than I wish it were not a true story.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Man, the stupidity of people. Very well written chapters. I really don't know what to say about the contents of the piece, other than I wish it were not a true story.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your comments. Don't misunderstand this but your comment that you wished wthis were not a true story made me chuckle because I too wish it weren't true. Again, thank you for your review.
