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You Had No Right!

prompt entry for the inner child

22 total reviews 
Comment from jlsavell
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Teri7, this must have been very hard for you to share. This poem shouts and the ending is more than I could have done and said. It shows your beautiful heart..jimi

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my sweet friend. Hugs, Teri
Comment from c_lucas
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The problem with child abuse is that the child is unable to defend against. It doesn't end when the child grows up and leaves home. The memories will be there for life. Very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thanks Charlie. Hugs, Teri
reply by c_lucas on 29-Jan-2009
    You're welcome, Teri. Charlie
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    hugs
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Teri Nice to see you letting out you inner feelings done very well It must of been very hard to write your poem and a abuse from your dad.

The best to you in the contest
How are you doing I haven't heard from you?
Love
Gert

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Good days and bad ones. I try to play it off that I don't miss my Jon but I do miss him so much. Some days I feel so betrayed by him. Stupid huh? How are you doing? Love you, Teri
Comment from dportwood
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Oh Teri,

This saddens me so much. You're a wonderful person with a truly big heart to have forgiven.

I like the quatrain format and the aabb rhyming pattern.
Nice and good luck in the contest.

Duane

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my sweet friend. Hugs, Teri
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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You have expressed your thoughts and feelings strongly in this Poem it must have been hard to share reliving these terrible times a good contest entry my friend regards Fuller

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my friend. Hugs, Teri
Comment from rmdelta
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trust me, it wasn't the military that caused him to mess up in this way, teri. he was already messed up, probably most of his life if he did this to you. Probably, it started long before you ever came along.

I doubt seriously there was any 'peace to be made in Heaven,' because this was something God cannot forgive, I believe. I don't presume to know God's mind, but your father's actions allow him to meet someone other than God.

Sorry, I have no sympathy for him whatsoever. I hope he got exactly what he deserved.

Reggie

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
    Reggie, I felt the same way for a long time. Something did happen to him in the Navy. He had eight nervous break downs. So I know he was not always that way. But I got the blunt of it. Thanks for the review. Hugs, Teri
Comment from Bryana
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How sad my dear friend. The very person that should take care of you is the abuser.

I'm glad you can't remember all, but is it motivated forgetting? Maybe it is.

Your entry is excellent, I wish you luck.

Hugs, Ana

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
    Thank you my sweet friend. You need to email me your address so I can send you a birthday card. I would love to do that. My email is T7titanlady@aol.com. Love you, Teri
Comment from earthlybeing
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Such a sad and horrid thing to suffer through. I just did a poem about the face of evil about a neighbor whose grandchildren 4 and 7 where molested by a close family friend. The four year old was raped. Just how can some do this I will never understand. I am so sorry for your pain but I thank God you are okay and were able to forgive so you could heal. Thanks, Jeanette

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
    Thanks Jeanette. I could never hurt my sons or any of my family members. But I love my friends too. Hugs, Teri
Comment from VICTIMEYES
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the poem is really a sad one and probably somewhat true remembering the old person he was and hoping that he will be made new.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
    Thank you Kevin. This is very true. Hugs, Teri
Comment from MissXFactor
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This was difficult to judge due to the content. Honestly speaking I felt you pushed forth the image of abuse, and it held strong throughout.

The only bit of advice I can offer, is that "Lonely was I every way I would go" required a re-read 3 times over ;) I just feel that line can possibly be re-tooled

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 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
    Thank you. Teri