Precious Gems: An Anthology
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Shadow"A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works
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Comment from Zakarism
The poet has the burden to deliver a message. He is loaded with the inspired work of art and he is helpless, restless and unfulfilled keeping it dormant.
He tells the world that he has the facilities to live peacefully and happily within himself, without looking outwards.
It is a perfect work of encouragement and inspiration.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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The poet has the burden to deliver a message. He is loaded with the inspired work of art and he is helpless, restless and unfulfilled keeping it dormant.
He tells the world that he has the facilities to live peacefully and happily within himself, without looking outwards.
It is a perfect work of encouragement and inspiration.
Comment Written 12-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you!
Comment from bard owl
This is a very introspective, thought-provoking poem that makes me stop and consider my dark side. Have you heard of a doppelganger, the name some give to our dark side twin? That is what your poem reminded me of. Excellent imagery in this one with that dark, recurring image of darkness. Excellent. Blessings,Linda
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008
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This is a very introspective, thought-provoking poem that makes me stop and consider my dark side. Have you heard of a doppelganger, the name some give to our dark side twin? That is what your poem reminded me of. Excellent imagery in this one with that dark, recurring image of darkness. Excellent. Blessings,Linda
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008
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I sure have heard the doppelganger. I believe that legend states if one were to be confronted with their doppelganger, that means imminent physical death!
I'm glad you liked this bard owl; and I thank you for your thoughtful comments and your insights. Blessings back to you Linda xoxoxxoxo
Comment from Polly_Pisces
I know my life is intertwined
With his own barren, blackened mind
The mansions of my soul and heart
Display his sombre works of art -Oh my, this an amazing verse. I absolutely love the will-o'-the-wisp feel yer got goin' on here girl.
Damn, that very cool Poem.
Take care,
Polly
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008
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I know my life is intertwined
With his own barren, blackened mind
The mansions of my soul and heart
Display his sombre works of art -Oh my, this an amazing verse. I absolutely love the will-o'-the-wisp feel yer got goin' on here girl.
Damn, that very cool Poem.
Take care,
Polly
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008
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Wow, thanks so very much for the 6 Polly! but your comments are what's made my day! From someone whose poetry is among the best I've seen on here, I take your words as very high praise indeed. I hope you're taking care my Polly-Pisces-Friend, and thank you from the bottom of me heart for such a wonderful review. xoxoxoxo
Comment from mywrite
This poem is beyond a six star rating! You are amazing and I wish I had this kind of talent. But I don't =P I really admire this and thank you for sharing.. I agree by the way. You are truly talented and I am truly jealous!!!! Awesome-ness! hehe. I hope you realize how talented you are- which is why I'm a huge fan!! If you ever do a book, please let me know! I would buy a copy right away! Take care,
-Katie
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008
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This poem is beyond a six star rating! You are amazing and I wish I had this kind of talent. But I don't =P I really admire this and thank you for sharing.. I agree by the way. You are truly talented and I am truly jealous!!!! Awesome-ness! hehe. I hope you realize how talented you are- which is why I'm a huge fan!! If you ever do a book, please let me know! I would buy a copy right away! Take care,
-Katie
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008
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Oh dear. Me head is now measuring 6ft wide by 4ft long and counting.....
Your comments are truly uplifting and make a person want to keep going. I am planning to do a book, but at the moment, the poetry is helping to fine-tune the old writing skills (they'd been in mothballs for a bit before joining here). So, one day...
Again, I thank you from the bottom of my heart for your comments and encouragement. Your warmth and support are very much appreciated xoxoxxoo
Comment from jshep
This is an extremely deep, thoughtful and well written poem. Very different from your usual. You have done an amazing job of wrapping the darkside around the reader. For me your author's notes did not mesh with the poem. I think because you state "When he has left his presence lingers, which tells me the person is not embracing the light as deeply as the darkness. Just my thoughts. Found not a single error or anything I would recommend changing. Excellent job on this poem.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2008
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This is an extremely deep, thoughtful and well written poem. Very different from your usual. You have done an amazing job of wrapping the darkside around the reader. For me your author's notes did not mesh with the poem. I think because you state "When he has left his presence lingers, which tells me the person is not embracing the light as deeply as the darkness. Just my thoughts. Found not a single error or anything I would recommend changing. Excellent job on this poem.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2008
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Thank you jshep! And I can see what you mean from your comment about the notes and that particular line. I think though, that we all react to things differently, and I know for me that once I've been through a dark time, once the light returns, a bit of that sombre tone remains. I believe that is what a lot of us suffer from - this expectation of dark times even when we're in the middle of something much better. HOpefully myself and others who feel this way, will learn to equally accept both states, and that way bring balance...Hopefully!! Thank you agian for a thoughtful review - it's always heartening to hear other opinions, particularly when they're put across sensitively, as yours has been. xoxoxoxo
Comment from starman
Yes, it's good to be wary of the shadows in our mind, but then, there' s nothing to far if you know what negativity causes them in the first place.
Very good and very eloquent. Loved it.
:)s
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
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Yes, it's good to be wary of the shadows in our mind, but then, there' s nothing to far if you know what negativity causes them in the first place.
Very good and very eloquent. Loved it.
:)s
Comment Written 13-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
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thank you so much starman. I love that word "eloquent"; it's like "exquisite", and I always love to see this! I appreicate your reivew and comments; they are encouraging and thoughtful. Thank you again, so very much xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from amada
I loved your poem, and the rhyme is great as well. I am one of those you talk about, scared of shadows, darkness, doubts. Your poem is an inspiration.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
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I loved your poem, and the rhyme is great as well. I am one of those you talk about, scared of shadows, darkness, doubts. Your poem is an inspiration.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
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Hopefully these words may bring some comfort to you amada. I thank you for a great review, and my thoughts are with you as you work through your fear. And it's normal to be afraid of that darkness. I think we've all seen loads of movies, etc, about how far the dark side can affect a person, to the point where they become capable of shocking crime. But, I do believe that those people have never expressed their fear, or acknowledged it was even there, so it accumulates until it literally explodes.
That's my theory at least! And I'd best stop philosophising or I'll bore you to tears. Again, thank you for a wonderful review and best of luck! xoxoxoxo
Comment from Walter L. Jones
The words grow in each line, writing about the reach for, always triggers our passion, dark side, more the side least explored, your voice in this poem is easy on the ears and the images created stick in the mind.. Walt
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
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The words grow in each line, writing about the reach for, always triggers our passion, dark side, more the side least explored, your voice in this poem is easy on the ears and the images created stick in the mind.. Walt
Comment Written 13-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2008
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Thank you so veyr much Walter. I am very happy to receive a 6-star from you, but I find your comments to be the clincher! I like that description of being "easy on the ears". I do see what you mean there. Some poems (probably some of mine for goodness' sake) just seem to jangle in the "ears" as one reads. They can still be good poems, but just ... jangle. I thank you for describing my poem this way, and your overall review and comments are very much appreciated xoxoxxoo
Comment from poetry_geek
Amazing! This is truly one of the best poems I have ever read. I love how you say "We've all been afraid accepting our dark side." in your poem. Incredible. I love this poem and I think that part of that is because I wish to be able to write something similar to this. Another thing you do well is using words to describe images. For me it's easy to see everything your describing. You transition from one thing to another really well. I love this poem! Please, write more like these! ;-)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2008
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Amazing! This is truly one of the best poems I have ever read. I love how you say "We've all been afraid accepting our dark side." in your poem. Incredible. I love this poem and I think that part of that is because I wish to be able to write something similar to this. Another thing you do well is using words to describe images. For me it's easy to see everything your describing. You transition from one thing to another really well. I love this poem! Please, write more like these! ;-)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2008
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Well, I'll sure try to write more like this poetry_geek! I don't want to imply that people should read my portfolio, but there are a few others similar to this in there if one day you have the time and are interested enough.
I'm humbled that you liked this so much, and appreciate every little gem of a word you used in yor review. I feel like cleaning out my oven now....THANK YOU SO MUCH! xoxoxxoo
Comment from Winslow
Dear Lady,
Darkness comes and obscures the light, do we all have an evil side? A balance achieved so you say, I think we should work to keep him away.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2008
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Dear Lady,
Darkness comes and obscures the light, do we all have an evil side? A balance achieved so you say, I think we should work to keep him away.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 12-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2008
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Yes to a degree I agree with you Winslow. I feel though that the more we fear something, the bigger and stronger it becomes. If we are able to accept the light and dark side as passing phases in their own way, we'll achieve more balance within ourselves.
At least that is my philosophy, as naive as it may be! And I thank you for feeling the way you do about this, but still appreciating my poem. That speaks volumes to me! Bless you! xoxoxoxo
