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keeping hope alive....

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Comment from mcdaniel1299
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That was a very beautiful poem. I can visualize your words in my minds eye. It is very well written.
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    cool! thanx! :-)
Comment from luna
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pix, how about instead of starting line two with "a", making it "lullaby in a rainbow" instead? Just a thought. Great haiku, picture.

Thanks for sharing,

Jen *smile*

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    i put "lullaby in rainbow" so it would kinda sound like a musical composistion - know what i mean? thanx lots! :-)
Comment from ledford
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Great job:-) Such a tranquil, yet beautiful poem!

I love the last line ... "sun whispers goodnight"

What a fantastic picture, too!

Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    hehe thanx! :-)
Comment from honeytree
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glowing in the sky
a lullaby in rainbow
sun whispers goodnight.

Singing some
where over the rainbow
blue birds fly
why can't I
honeytree

Art work superb and your words

glowing in the sky
a lullaby in rainbow
sun whispers goodnight..

"The music heard
soft voice whispers
goodnight.'

I loved your words so much

Honeytree.

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    lol thanx much! :-)
Comment from Josipher32
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Hey, you never promote. Is this a haigu(or whatever that word is) or haiku?

Anyhew, I like the way you put the words in the picture. I like the personification of the sun. Perfect 5/7/5 format.

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    i guess technically it would be a haiga - but i wrote the haiku first and then searched for a pic for it lol
Comment from bigmoondogg2004
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That was very simple yet extremely creative. Not to mention that the picture that you chose to represent it was perfect. Great work.

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    thanx lots! :-)
Comment from jsturgeon
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Awesom piece of poetry. Well written and to the point. You painted a beautiful picture in three short sentences. I liked the artwork as well. Overall, great job. Jeff Sturgeon

 Comment Written 07-May-2008

reply by the author on 07-May-2008
    thanx! :-)
Comment from Ginniegozali
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hi there,
I like this whispering haiku very much,
although untill now,
i still don't get it what is haiku really means.
a nice poem and picture you have.
thanks for sharing.^^

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

reply by the author on 06-May-2008
    haiku is like a snapshot of nature
    thanx lots! :-)
Comment from writerjen
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Nice rhymic sounding haiku. You followed the requirements well. I liked the rhythm almost like a song. Nice picturesque language. Well done.

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

reply by the author on 06-May-2008
    thank you so much!

    oh and YOU are my 25th review!

    :-)

Comment from littleoleme
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This is something to be proud of. It is a beautiful presentation!! Every about it is attractive. You did very well with this one.

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

reply by the author on 06-May-2008
    thank you so much! :-)