I Ran (Me in a nut~shell)
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Comment from Twomoon
lovin peace, this is sooooooo beautiful and full of powerful words..the movement and song you are singing lifted me up..I found myself running beside you and slowing down in the end..beautiful, beautiful, piece of poetry..one of the best for you and on this site in the past week..truly a masterpiece thought out from your soul..your expression of your you was delivered with passion and I embraced it..thank you..wish I had a 6 for this incredible awakening, my dear friend..much love twomoon
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2008
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lovin peace, this is sooooooo beautiful and full of powerful words..the movement and song you are singing lifted me up..I found myself running beside you and slowing down in the end..beautiful, beautiful, piece of poetry..one of the best for you and on this site in the past week..truly a masterpiece thought out from your soul..your expression of your you was delivered with passion and I embraced it..thank you..wish I had a 6 for this incredible awakening, my dear friend..much love twomoon
Comment Written 03-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2008
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What wonderful things to say and with such beauty i teared up...this one was so personal too...wow thank you...Many Blessings...Barb...L&P*
Comment from smiles_with_sunshine
>>>L>o>v>'>n>>P>e>a>c>e>>>
I really love the way you set this poem up...the repeated "I ran"..."I ran, yes"..."I ran slower"...and finally the..."Today
I no longer need To run"...........Another poem worthy of six stars! Love you, Trish
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2008
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>>>L>o>v>'>n>>P>e>a>c>e>>>
I really love the way you set this poem up...the repeated "I ran"..."I ran, yes"..."I ran slower"...and finally the..."Today
I no longer need To run"...........Another poem worthy of six stars! Love you, Trish
Comment Written 03-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2008
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Thank you dear friend and for the beautiful stars...so happy you liked this...love and God Bless...Barb...L&P*
Comment from Judian James
Bravo! This was a very powerful piece to read. You overcame great obstacles and made it! I commend you. I thought the short "I ran" lines to "I no longer need to run" were most effective. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Bravo! This was a very powerful piece to read. You overcame great obstacles and made it! I commend you. I thought the short "I ran" lines to "I no longer need to run" were most effective. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Thank you so much Judian for the high compliment Blessings...L&P*
Comment from VICTIMEYES
you set the poem up nicely with the theme of it all a,d the reason for running but ultimately ends and telling the reader ... you no longer need to run, nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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you set the poem up nicely with the theme of it all a,d the reason for running but ultimately ends and telling the reader ... you no longer need to run, nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Thank you dual...Blessings...L&P*
Comment from smokyeye
Excellent work as always. Your messag was descriptive and clear and the subject is noteworthy. The only thing is each one or two word phrases has "ran" in it except for the one "if possible" at the beginning
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Excellent work as always. Your messag was descriptive and clear and the subject is noteworthy. The only thing is each one or two word phrases has "ran" in it except for the one "if possible" at the beginning
Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Thank you so much for your encouraging words smoky...I get a visual of a cigarette dangling from the mouth of a man playing piono, from your name...Like Hogy... LOL...Blessings...L&P*
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I added I ran to the first line.
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Your visual of me couldn't be farther from reality. The truth is I got my name after a makeup technique used to enhance my eyes. I chose the name because the eyes are the window to the soul and when I think of writing I think of getting into one's soul.
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Thank you for the explanation...i didn't mean to offend...it was just a visual that came to me...all i do know is you are a great reviewer and i missed that...Blessings...L&P*
Comment from GerryMacNeil
The poem turns a heart-wrenching story into an upward, triumphant surge. The sense of "movement after struggle" is so encouraging to me. There is one spelling error, fatal in a poem: "embrase" should be "embrace".
Your notes make me want to encourage you to try out prose, narrative prose relating and describing your experiences. I think you might be surprised at what it would do for you.
The only other thing, my dear sister in spirit, is that I would ask you to look again at the last line in your notes. Somehow it seems to me that YOUR love was the uncondtional part of that relationship. There are probably, no certainly! circumstances I do not know and cannot understand, but I feel you have been hurt as well as enriched by this relationship. Gerry xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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The poem turns a heart-wrenching story into an upward, triumphant surge. The sense of "movement after struggle" is so encouraging to me. There is one spelling error, fatal in a poem: "embrase" should be "embrace".
Your notes make me want to encourage you to try out prose, narrative prose relating and describing your experiences. I think you might be surprised at what it would do for you.
The only other thing, my dear sister in spirit, is that I would ask you to look again at the last line in your notes. Somehow it seems to me that YOUR love was the uncondtional part of that relationship. There are probably, no certainly! circumstances I do not know and cannot understand, but I feel you have been hurt as well as enriched by this relationship. Gerry xxoo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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I have it spelled with a c then changed it LOl...it is coreccted thanks sis...yes there was pain, but itsn't that true of all of life? Blessings sweet lady...Barb...L&P*
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You know, Barb, I used to think all life involved pain, too, but there is a Life without that nonsense and yucky stuff--which I know you know! That's the one I'm going for! LOL Love you, my sister de facto! Gerry
Comment from sandramarie
This is a heart rending, and heart wrenching write, Barb. It's so nice to hear that you have found peace and love in your life now.
Hugs,
Sandy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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This is a heart rending, and heart wrenching write, Barb. It's so nice to hear that you have found peace and love in your life now.
Hugs,
Sandy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Thank you Sandy...Blessings dear lady...Barb
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi L&P,
I am so glad you have found God's amazing grace I told you, you and I had a lot in common. I can relate, as a child I too, became a victim of the abuse and I tried to run. I spent years running and then realized I had to face those demons head on. Like you, with much hard work, I finally made it. Let's have a toast, to two sister's who no longer have to run! Thank you so much for sharing your poem of the winner who has won the race. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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Hi L&P,
I am so glad you have found God's amazing grace I told you, you and I had a lot in common. I can relate, as a child I too, became a victim of the abuse and I tried to run. I spent years running and then realized I had to face those demons head on. Like you, with much hard work, I finally made it. Let's have a toast, to two sister's who no longer have to run! Thank you so much for sharing your poem of the winner who has won the race. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2008
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It was with me all along gal...So happy you could stop running too sis...to us...we are Blessed...Barb...L&P*
Comment from T.S.J.
Abuse should never be in our world. Look at what it does to little children, It only serves to make them big children with many problems.Why would one chose this, to do this is evil,and not wise. Thank You for drawing attention to this massive problem. T.S.J.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2008
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Abuse should never be in our world. Look at what it does to little children, It only serves to make them big children with many problems.Why would one chose this, to do this is evil,and not wise. Thank You for drawing attention to this massive problem. T.S.J.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2008
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Thank you T.S.J so true. Not all are able to overcome...Blessings...L&P*
Comment from Kaze
Your poem tells a long sad tale of abuse and fear, trying to escape and run from that endless cycle. I'm glad you were finally able to break free and find peace.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2008
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Your poem tells a long sad tale of abuse and fear, trying to escape and run from that endless cycle. I'm glad you were finally able to break free and find peace.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2008
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Thank you Kaze for your kind words...so am I...Blessings...I am Blessed...L&P*
