Dmitri's Extraordinary Fate
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow, Dmitri is quite a man. Recuperating is hard. When I had a bad ear infection as a child I was in bed for two weeks and when I started walking ago my equilibrium was out of place... I wonder how long it will take Dmitry to recuperate.
Helping Elena was a good incentive to walk, and even run to help Elena!
They are developing a strong relationship
Well done, Tony, you are a wonderful story teller.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2025
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Wow, Dmitri is quite a man. Recuperating is hard. When I had a bad ear infection as a child I was in bed for two weeks and when I started walking ago my equilibrium was out of place... I wonder how long it will take Dmitry to recuperate.
Helping Elena was a good incentive to walk, and even run to help Elena!
They are developing a strong relationship
Well done, Tony, you are a wonderful story teller.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2025
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Many thanks, Gypsy. So glad you are still enjoying this. Dmitri may need to slow down a bit!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a gentle, emotional story, describing the gradual development of a relationship between two people struggling through memories of the loss of a loved one. Through vivid descriptions of the house and nature, you weave in the tenderness and concern the characters feel toward each other. I liked this description of Elena. "He looked at her tenderly, noticing the fine lines around her eyes and the tiredness, but behind it, he could also see her resilience. She might have been worn, but not worn down."
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2025
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This is a gentle, emotional story, describing the gradual development of a relationship between two people struggling through memories of the loss of a loved one. Through vivid descriptions of the house and nature, you weave in the tenderness and concern the characters feel toward each other. I liked this description of Elena. "He looked at her tenderly, noticing the fine lines around her eyes and the tiredness, but behind it, he could also see her resilience. She might have been worn, but not worn down."
Comment Written 07-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2025
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Thanks very much, Lorraine, for your continued support and your nice review. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautifully written chapter and I am so happy to see you back on the site. This seems as another amazing novel. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2025
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Beautifully written chapter and I am so happy to see you back on the site. This seems as another amazing novel. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2025
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Great to hear from you, Iza. I hope you're keeping well. Many thanks for your response to this chapter and for the sixth star. Very kind of you. All the best, Tony.
Comment from nomi338
It is refreshing to witness the rehabilitation of one who is battling to recover their strength and resilience. The great thing about great literature is its ability to instruct and inspire while entertaining.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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It is refreshing to witness the rehabilitation of one who is battling to recover their strength and resilience. The great thing about great literature is its ability to instruct and inspire while entertaining.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Thank you very much for your response to this chapter. I like your last remark. It is equally true of teaching, I think. All good wishes, Tony.
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I myself am living proof of that statement.
Comment from Amelie Johns
I remain tightly drawn into this beautiful story. I love how you describe the natural surroundings in explicit detail and the surges in emotion at certain points. Even in mundane moments like when Dmitri is walking down the path toward the lake or washing the dishes, one can almost feel his strain and the effort required to put one foot in front of the other. My favourite line in this Chapter is: 'the parlour exposed to the street like a doll's house whose front had been wrenched open'. That is a such an amazing way to describe the aftermath. The relationship between Dmitri and Elena keeps building and now there has been a shift in the dynamic where she also needs him. To date, his trauma has paralysed him and locked the old Dmitri away. At times, a present trigger retraumatises him but today Elena's fall reminded him of how he cared for his sister. This has triggered him in a positive way. He snaps into action. There is also this silent understanding between them - they know they need each other and while they cannot replace the loved ones they lost, they can fill part of that void. I am so looking forward to more and I wish I had a six for every Chapter!
Best wishes,
Amelie
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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I remain tightly drawn into this beautiful story. I love how you describe the natural surroundings in explicit detail and the surges in emotion at certain points. Even in mundane moments like when Dmitri is walking down the path toward the lake or washing the dishes, one can almost feel his strain and the effort required to put one foot in front of the other. My favourite line in this Chapter is: 'the parlour exposed to the street like a doll's house whose front had been wrenched open'. That is a such an amazing way to describe the aftermath. The relationship between Dmitri and Elena keeps building and now there has been a shift in the dynamic where she also needs him. To date, his trauma has paralysed him and locked the old Dmitri away. At times, a present trigger retraumatises him but today Elena's fall reminded him of how he cared for his sister. This has triggered him in a positive way. He snaps into action. There is also this silent understanding between them - they know they need each other and while they cannot replace the loved ones they lost, they can fill part of that void. I am so looking forward to more and I wish I had a six for every Chapter!
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 06-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Another hugely supportive review, Amelie. I'm so grateful for your support and interest. Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, Dmitri is a superman. How long was he convalescing? I would think he would have had to relearn how to move but he was able to hike and even sprint to help Elena. He has developed a deep connection with Elena as she cared for him. And his portrait of her son was perfect. What a great gift!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Wow, Dmitri is a superman. How long was he convalescing? I would think he would have had to relearn how to move but he was able to hike and even sprint to help Elena. He has developed a deep connection with Elena as she cared for him. And his portrait of her son was perfect. What a great gift!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Yes, Barbara also pointed that out! I'm not sure if you reviewed the older version, before I supplied the poor lad with a walking stick and made him huff and puff a bit more? I made the amendments earlier today.
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Yes, I always bring up your posts right away but I don't always get to reviewing them until later because of life interrupting and I may not get to longer works until later. So yes, it was your original post. Glad you changed it for the realism.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely visual description of the path along the edge of the pine forest, Tony.
Dmitri found a lovely spot to lose himself in his drawing.
And then the carer and patient swap roles and that scene is a lovely ending to a great chapter.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Lovely visual description of the path along the edge of the pine forest, Tony.
Dmitri found a lovely spot to lose himself in his drawing.
And then the carer and patient swap roles and that scene is a lovely ending to a great chapter.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 06-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Thanks very much, Valda, for your kind words and the sixth star. Most generous of you. Glad you're still enjoying this. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Julie G1
This tale continues to unfold as the writer weaves the interactions of the central characters with their baggage. The reading audience is engaged in developing an understanding of chance and human motivations, driving survivors.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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This tale continues to unfold as the writer weaves the interactions of the central characters with their baggage. The reading audience is engaged in developing an understanding of chance and human motivations, driving survivors.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Thanks very much, Julie, for your response to this chapter. Much appreciated. I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rama devi
Delightfully detailed, you bring the nature scenes to life so vividly. Super well paced and polished work, my friend. I applaud how you weave the natural imagery and the inner emotional landscapes so they are intertwined like macrame, especially here:
The earthy citrus aroma of the ripening nuts reminded her of yet another job that would need to be done soon. She sighed. She hadn't even touched the orchard, and the plum trees were heavy with fruit. Autumn was merciless. Always more to do, and never enough hours.
And also the deep POV and substantially deep characterization in spots like this:
He looked at her tenderly, noticing the fine lines around her eyes and the tiredness, but behind it, he could also see her resilience.
My only suggestion is to reconsider the punctuation in this sentence:
The wolves had awakened a primal instinct in him; the realisation that, if he wanted to survive mentally, he could no longer lie idle.
Maybe use a dash instead of a semicolon:
The wolves had awakened a primal instinct in him--the realisation that, if he wanted to survive mentally, he could no longer lie idle.
Top notch writing, as usual from you.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Delightfully detailed, you bring the nature scenes to life so vividly. Super well paced and polished work, my friend. I applaud how you weave the natural imagery and the inner emotional landscapes so they are intertwined like macrame, especially here:
The earthy citrus aroma of the ripening nuts reminded her of yet another job that would need to be done soon. She sighed. She hadn't even touched the orchard, and the plum trees were heavy with fruit. Autumn was merciless. Always more to do, and never enough hours.
And also the deep POV and substantially deep characterization in spots like this:
He looked at her tenderly, noticing the fine lines around her eyes and the tiredness, but behind it, he could also see her resilience.
My only suggestion is to reconsider the punctuation in this sentence:
The wolves had awakened a primal instinct in him; the realisation that, if he wanted to survive mentally, he could no longer lie idle.
Maybe use a dash instead of a semicolon:
The wolves had awakened a primal instinct in him--the realisation that, if he wanted to survive mentally, he could no longer lie idle.
Top notch writing, as usual from you.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 05-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2025
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Thanks again for your kind words and encouragement, RD - not forgetting to mention the lovely sixth star! Greatly appreciated. Thanks, too, for the suggestion. I've now replaced the semicolon with an emdash.
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Thanks for your gracious response, my friend, and I'm glad you liked the suggestion.
Comment from Ronny Guy
This is a good story. Hope you have other chapters posted. This sort of reminded me of the movie Cabin by the Lake. Only there's no body in your story killing people and burying them under the lake. Good story once again.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2025
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This is a good story. Hope you have other chapters posted. This sort of reminded me of the movie Cabin by the Lake. Only there's no body in your story killing people and burying them under the lake. Good story once again.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2025
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2025
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Thanks, Ronny. No bodies by the lake, but a few left on the battlefield. The first four chapters are already posted and in my portfolio. I appreciate your review. All the best, Tony
