Life in an Hourglass
Written after the loss of my son.50 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very lovely poem you have penned about your precious son that left this earth way too soon. Your last stanza said it all. One day you will get to see him again! May God bless and give you strength each day as you remember the good times you have with him. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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This is a very lovely poem you have penned about your precious son that left this earth way too soon. Your last stanza said it all. One day you will get to see him again! May God bless and give you strength each day as you remember the good times you have with him. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 13-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you and yes I will be able to see him again. Also know that I will be putting more poems on here that I wrote over the years I hope they're just as good
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I look forward to reading more of your work! Blessings, Teri
Comment from Benny Beeharry
This is sad. Very sad indeed. Sometime we ask ourselves why are we human and why we are made to re bear things which we cannot forget, why the pain lingers and why we cannot delete it as we would like to. There is no answer unless we blame God for making us like this. But we cannot , can we.
So we need to be strong enough to grapple with and shoulder our load and move on.
God bless
Benny
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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This is sad. Very sad indeed. Sometime we ask ourselves why are we human and why we are made to re bear things which we cannot forget, why the pain lingers and why we cannot delete it as we would like to. There is no answer unless we blame God for making us like this. But we cannot , can we.
So we need to be strong enough to grapple with and shoulder our load and move on.
God bless
Benny
Comment Written 12-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you
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Please note I will be placing more of the poems that I've wrote over the years here soon
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Thanks.
Benny
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad and touching poem and I am so sorry for your loss. It must be very hard to lose a child and it is unexpected. Your poem is heartfelt and emotional, thank you for sharing your honest thoughts, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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This is a sad and touching poem and I am so sorry for your loss. It must be very hard to lose a child and it is unexpected. Your poem is heartfelt and emotional, thank you for sharing your honest thoughts, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you
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Please no I will be placing more of the poems that I've wrote over the years on this platform here shortly
Comment from Barry Penfold
Congratulations on your first post. I enjoyed reading your poem despite it being such a sad topic. Thanks for sharing and I hope it goes well in the contest. Keep writing. ( I believe the spelling "too" is the correct usage in the first stanza). Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Congratulations on your first post. I enjoyed reading your poem despite it being such a sad topic. Thanks for sharing and I hope it goes well in the contest. Keep writing. ( I believe the spelling "too" is the correct usage in the first stanza). Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment Written 11-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you and made corrections. I will be bringing more poems that I've wrote over the years on here soon
Comment from Tom Horonzy
A heart-filled welcome to the forum you sought, and thank you for sharing a most courageous retort. Sorry for the loss, Your words are remarkably well written when your heart must be somewhat fractured.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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A heart-filled welcome to the forum you sought, and thank you for sharing a most courageous retort. Sorry for the loss, Your words are remarkably well written when your heart must be somewhat fractured.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you. I will bring more poems I've wrote over the years very soon.
Comment from harmony13
What a beautiful Tribute to your Son, Wesley. The author's words are
heartfelt, meaningful, sad, descriptive and creative. I found the poem
filled with good memories of the past and also questioned myself about
"why does time go so fast". The author addresses many of the ups and
downs of life with feelings and emotions. The author in the last stanza
as stated, "in the last 3 lines" reveals a sense of hope.
With Sincere Condolences to you and your family, Maria
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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What a beautiful Tribute to your Son, Wesley. The author's words are
heartfelt, meaningful, sad, descriptive and creative. I found the poem
filled with good memories of the past and also questioned myself about
"why does time go so fast". The author addresses many of the ups and
downs of life with feelings and emotions. The author in the last stanza
as stated, "in the last 3 lines" reveals a sense of hope.
With Sincere Condolences to you and your family, Maria
Comment Written 11-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you . I will be bringing more poems that I wrote on here soon.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent heartfelt poem about losing your son. I'm sorry for your loss. May he rest in peace, and you find comfort and peace.
You expressed grief so well that it's easy to feel it in our hearts. I can't imagine how painful it must be. I have three children.
Well done!
"Like *sands (sand) in *a (an) hourglass,
A clock (is) ticking way *to (too) fast.
Today, tomorrow, forever,
A life *tooken (taken) way to fast."
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Excellent heartfelt poem about losing your son. I'm sorry for your loss. May he rest in peace, and you find comfort and peace.
You expressed grief so well that it's easy to feel it in our hearts. I can't imagine how painful it must be. I have three children.
Well done!
"Like *sands (sand) in *a (an) hourglass,
A clock (is) ticking way *to (too) fast.
Today, tomorrow, forever,
A life *tooken (taken) way to fast."
Comment Written 11-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much I've made the corrections and will be bringing/adding more phones I've rode over the years very soon
Comment from dragonpoet
Welcome to FanStory
Thiss is ice rhyming tribute to a person who was much loved and will be missed. We all hope to see our friends and family members in heaven when our times come.
I found a few errors. Open should be taken Should of should be should haves, expressions should be impressions.
Good luck with the contest.
Keep writing and stay ay healthy.
Enjoy the rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Welcome to FanStory
Thiss is ice rhyming tribute to a person who was much loved and will be missed. We all hope to see our friends and family members in heaven when our times come.
I found a few errors. Open should be taken Should of should be should haves, expressions should be impressions.
Good luck with the contest.
Keep writing and stay ay healthy.
Enjoy the rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much I made a couple corrections and will be bringing more poems that are wrote over the years through this platform pretty soon Thank you
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You are most kindly welcome, Richard.
I will look for your poems.
Joan
Comment from Ulla
First of all I want to express my deep felt condolences for your loss. To lose a child, regardless of age, would bring me to my knees. Your poem is beautifully written.
Tooken should be taken. Welcome to FanStory, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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First of all I want to express my deep felt condolences for your loss. To lose a child, regardless of age, would bring me to my knees. Your poem is beautifully written.
Tooken should be taken. Welcome to FanStory, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you and please know I will be bringing more poams that Ive wrote over the years Thank you
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A powerful and moving poem about the lost of a son. I like the following lines the best
he why's, the what-ifs,
This should of's, and could have beens.
The depression, grief and shame,
When will it come to an end.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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A powerful and moving poem about the lost of a son. I like the following lines the best
he why's, the what-ifs,
This should of's, and could have beens.
The depression, grief and shame,
When will it come to an end.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much and please know I will be bringing more poems to this platform very soon that I wrote over the years
