Life in an Hourglass
Written after the loss of my son.50 total reviews
Comment from Nicki.B
Hey Richard, this is a beautiful tribute poem for the devastating loss of your son. I'm terribly sorry for your loss. You have really expressed here from your heart and soul the hurt and pain you feel. And I loved how you used the hourglass to depict time.
Life is so precious and so is the time we have, and you clearly have many wonderful memories of your son and that's wonderful.
Congratulations on your first milestone post and welcome to fanstory!
Stanza 3 - perhaps should read 'the' should have beens. ?
Well done, happy writing
Best Wishes
Nicki x
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Hey Richard, this is a beautiful tribute poem for the devastating loss of your son. I'm terribly sorry for your loss. You have really expressed here from your heart and soul the hurt and pain you feel. And I loved how you used the hourglass to depict time.
Life is so precious and so is the time we have, and you clearly have many wonderful memories of your son and that's wonderful.
Congratulations on your first milestone post and welcome to fanstory!
Stanza 3 - perhaps should read 'the' should have beens. ?
Well done, happy writing
Best Wishes
Nicki x
Comment Written 15-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much. I will be putting more Poems, I've wrote over the years matter of fact. I wrote one last night. As I just realized today was Father's Day but I think it's too late to enter in the contest as I probably wouldn't get the promotion needed and it cost a lot of money to promote all the time. But thank you once again
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Yes it is, if you review poems and prose to build up your member dollars through the week it helps with promoting your own work!
Best of luck, look forward to seeing more of your writing!
Nicki
Comment from Janet Foor
Welcome to FanStory and I'm so sorry for your loss.
This is a well written and heartfelt poem. Very nice rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Welcome to FanStory and I'm so sorry for your loss.
This is a well written and heartfelt poem. Very nice rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much. And I will be entering more contest as I have many poems. I rode over the years. I have one I. Wrote last not a matter of fact as I didn't realize. Today was Father's Day until then. I think it's too late to enter this contest. Because I wouldn't get the promotion and it cost a lot of money to keep promoting. I don't really know how to use this promoting thing to get free promotions. And there's not a number to call, but thank you.
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You're welcome. One way to get extra promotion value is "click on read" and then the "up next". You may not get much cash but you could get and extra "pump" value which amounts to $2.95, I think.
Good luck and keep writing and posting.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written rhyming poem for the contest. It is also a very well written piece as your first post here on story. I think you have a lot of potential as a writer and I would encourage you to keep writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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This is a very well written rhyming poem for the contest. It is also a very well written piece as your first post here on story. I think you have a lot of potential as a writer and I would encourage you to keep writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Thank you. And I will be putting more of my poems on here. I've wrote over the years I. Wrote one last night. But I don't think I would get the promotion in this contest so I'll be waiting for another one so that maybe I can get free promotions because I spend a lot of money promoting that 1 raising it up. But thank you again for your kind words and your encouragement.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Congratulations on your First Milestone, and a warm welcome to the Fanstory family. My sincere condolences for the loss of your son. This poem vividly tackles the themes of loss, memory and the passage of time in such a tone that your readers can relate. Well done, dear Richard
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Congratulations on your First Milestone, and a warm welcome to the Fanstory family. My sincere condolences for the loss of your son. This poem vividly tackles the themes of loss, memory and the passage of time in such a tone that your readers can relate. Well done, dear Richard
Comment Written 14-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Thank you very much for your kind words, your encouragement.
I'm just recognizing my work. I have many poems that I will be adding 2 different contest not affect. I wrote one last night at the realizing. Today would be father's day and I wouldn't be with Wesley But I don't want to enter it because there's not much time and it wouldn't get promoted. And I spent so much money promoting the first one I don't really know how to use the Plats form 2 get free promotions yet. I don't know how to do the reviews or any of that. And there's not a number To call to find out so it's gonna take me some time to learn this so I can get this done for minimal dollars. Thank you again.
Comment from lancellot
This is a very solid piece. I think will resonate well with the FanStory demographic. They can appreciate the idea of times gone past and understand every line. Good rhymes and near rhymes too. I would suggest looking at that first stanza again, and switch out that last fast, if possible.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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This is a very solid piece. I think will resonate well with the FanStory demographic. They can appreciate the idea of times gone past and understand every line. Good rhymes and near rhymes too. I would suggest looking at that first stanza again, and switch out that last fast, if possible.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2025
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Thank you for your response. And I will be putting more palms on here in the near future. I'm just learning this platform but not able to figure out how to promote my stuff at no cost. And the first one cost me quite a bit of money to get promoted. I don't know how to do the. Reviews to get free dollars. Etc, you have any advice for that? I would greatly appreciate it. Thank you for your kind words and I will be adding more poems soon
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Sure thing. Click the the Read it button on the Up Next section on the front page. Reading and reviewing other members posts will earn you FanStory dollars. The Q&A section under the Community tab can help you with reviewing.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I feel for you. It's so very sad to lose a young son in his prime. Your rhyming poem is full of emotion that made me want to cry. I like the alliterations and metaphors you are using here, too.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2025
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I feel for you. It's so very sad to lose a young son in his prime. Your rhyming poem is full of emotion that made me want to cry. I like the alliterations and metaphors you are using here, too.
Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much and I will be bringing more palms that I've wrote over the years to this platform to see how well they do and hopefully publish some phone book
Comment from evilynne
That is a sad poem of grief and loss, well expressed and sorrowful. I send condolences on your loss; may he rest in peace. Best of luck in the contest. Evi
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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That is a sad poem of grief and loss, well expressed and sorrowful. I send condolences on your loss; may he rest in peace. Best of luck in the contest. Evi
Comment Written 13-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much and please note I will be putting more the poems of over the years on here as well soon
Comment from godlucifer
your own enemy is your own pain. your lost,anger,and pain faded into a enemy state of mind. sorry to hear about the lost of your son. your poem was well constructed. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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your own enemy is your own pain. your lost,anger,and pain faded into a enemy state of mind. sorry to hear about the lost of your son. your poem was well constructed. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 13-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Please note I will be placing more poems that I have wrote over the years on this platform and thank you for your kind words
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi there and Welcome to FanStory. Your writing really stands out and uses a lot of wonderful descriptions to set this verse apart. Well done on telling a fine story within the lines of these rhyming quatrains. I enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Hi there and Welcome to FanStory. Your writing really stands out and uses a lot of wonderful descriptions to set this verse apart. Well done on telling a fine story within the lines of these rhyming quatrains. I enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
Comment Written 13-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you and I have many more poems that I'll be putting in here that I wrote over the years
Comment from June Sargent
What a touching tribute to your son! I cannot imagine the pain you and your family have had to endure, but know that your sweet memories will give you strength to go on until you all meet again. Meanwhile, please keep writing your own songs of hope and love.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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What a touching tribute to your son! I cannot imagine the pain you and your family have had to endure, but know that your sweet memories will give you strength to go on until you all meet again. Meanwhile, please keep writing your own songs of hope and love.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2025
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Thank you so much and I will be putting more poems on here that I wrote over the years just so you know
