The Wonder Of It All Part 1
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is very different. The descriptions from the wombs POV when something invaded her personal space and how you wrote it all with humour. I like how the 17 year old girl is the landlord. Enjoed it Carol. Cheers
Valda
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This is very different. The descriptions from the wombs POV when something invaded her personal space and how you wrote it all with humour. I like how the 17 year old girl is the landlord. Enjoed it Carol. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 11-Jun-2025
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You keep using up all my sixes, so you get a five tonight and the six on section 2. I read about the first page and thought, I am missing something here. Then I reread it and the torpedo became something else entirely. This is the most amusing depiction of getting pregnant I have ever seen or read. Too bad she picked a slob for the father, but that little growing thing is sweet.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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You keep using up all my sixes, so you get a five tonight and the six on section 2. I read about the first page and thought, I am missing something here. Then I reread it and the torpedo became something else entirely. This is the most amusing depiction of getting pregnant I have ever seen or read. Too bad she picked a slob for the father, but that little growing thing is sweet.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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I shall take the five with a gracious thank you...and know that I love the sixes, but one can not own the market...
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
A very unique story. The descriptions that were used were splendid. How you describe a baby in the womb is accurate. She is probably super scared although she didn't act like it with her writing. I am looking forward to the second part.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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A very unique story. The descriptions that were used were splendid. How you describe a baby in the womb is accurate. She is probably super scared although she didn't act like it with her writing. I am looking forward to the second part.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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I don't know where my brain was at this morning, but this is what happens when you let it have free rein. Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. You've done a good job sharing how afraid this seventeen-year-old girl is and how the boy who is the father handled it. Your descriptions are very good.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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Thank you for sharing this with us. You've done a good job sharing how afraid this seventeen-year-old girl is and how the boy who is the father handled it. Your descriptions are very good.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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I gave my brain free reign and this is what it delivered...I guess I should ask questions more often. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sally Law
Oh, Carol! I love this! Best story ever! Very real, gritty and gutsy and super sweet. I love the baby's voice and wonderings. Beautifully written, my talented friend.
Sending you my best today as always. A definite 6 stars!
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Oh, Carol! I love this! Best story ever! Very real, gritty and gutsy and super sweet. I love the baby's voice and wonderings. Beautifully written, my talented friend.
Sending you my best today as always. A definite 6 stars!
Sal XOs
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Awesome Sally...I am so surprised and happy to see you reading one of my stories...even if it is one my imagination flipped out on... I've posted Chapter two (the ending) hope you don't miss it...Check the front page of FanStory...get the monehy girl!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I have to say I was a bit confused at first as to who the narrator was, then I bothered to go back to the beginning and saw that it was Womb. Duh! Now it's clear to me what is happening. A very interesting perspective told with your usual sense of humor.
I'll have to read part 2 now...
xo
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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I have to say I was a bit confused at first as to who the narrator was, then I bothered to go back to the beginning and saw that it was Womb. Duh! Now it's clear to me what is happening. A very interesting perspective told with your usual sense of humor.
I'll have to read part 2 now...
xo
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Nice to see you this morning, Pam. Are your classes and writing done? As for the story, the narrator is a bit strange and takes one a minute or two to get used to, but if aliens and ghosts can talk, why not? Thank you for choosing my story to read.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I think I might have made a mistake by reading this one second, but now I know how to make a baby, but my torpedo is a little less potent these days, but then I've produced two lovely girls, beautifully written. Dear Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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I think I might have made a mistake by reading this one second, but now I know how to make a baby, but my torpedo is a little less potent these days, but then I've produced two lovely girls, beautifully written. Dear Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Nowe, Roy, I posted in big letters that the other one was part 2....just teasing... I weant to thank you for taking the time to read this silly blurb....my mind was just trying to have a little fun. Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Tim Margetts
Carol, this is a triumph of voice, perspective, and emotional layering - a stunning blend of humour, vulnerability, and unflinching observation told through the most unexpected narrator imaginable. Framing this journey from the point of view of a womb could have fallen into gimmick, but you steer it instead into grace. It is wickedly funny, painfully observant, and quietly profound.
There's a slow emotional expansion that mirrors the story's physical one. What begins as wry commentary ("deformed finger"... "squiggly swimmers doing laps") gradually blooms into tenderness, sorrow, and resolve. That pivot on "I think I'm starting to care - and that's terrifying" is the story's secret heartbeat, and from there, everything deepens.
The scene in the car and clinic is beautifully, terribly done. We feel the landlord's powerlessness, the fear of choice, the weight of pressure - and yet, it's handled with such care that nothing feels preachy. You allow Heart, Brain, and Body to argue it out, mirroring the inner tumult without reducing it to a position paper. The emotional truth leads.
And then that final image: the blanket, yellow and fuzzy, held like a fragile hope. A perfect closing note for this first half.
Astonishing work. Sincere, sharp, and deeply humane. If this is Part 1, I will absolutely be first in line for Part 2.
Tim x
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Carol, this is a triumph of voice, perspective, and emotional layering - a stunning blend of humour, vulnerability, and unflinching observation told through the most unexpected narrator imaginable. Framing this journey from the point of view of a womb could have fallen into gimmick, but you steer it instead into grace. It is wickedly funny, painfully observant, and quietly profound.
There's a slow emotional expansion that mirrors the story's physical one. What begins as wry commentary ("deformed finger"... "squiggly swimmers doing laps") gradually blooms into tenderness, sorrow, and resolve. That pivot on "I think I'm starting to care - and that's terrifying" is the story's secret heartbeat, and from there, everything deepens.
The scene in the car and clinic is beautifully, terribly done. We feel the landlord's powerlessness, the fear of choice, the weight of pressure - and yet, it's handled with such care that nothing feels preachy. You allow Heart, Brain, and Body to argue it out, mirroring the inner tumult without reducing it to a position paper. The emotional truth leads.
And then that final image: the blanket, yellow and fuzzy, held like a fragile hope. A perfect closing note for this first half.
Astonishing work. Sincere, sharp, and deeply humane. If this is Part 1, I will absolutely be first in line for Part 2.
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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I was holding my breath for your review....Breathe! I was afraid you and everyone else might find it a bit over the top...which it is...but it was meant to be fun. Besides if aliens, werewolfs, and every unearthly goblin can have a voice, why not the poor womb?
Appreciate all your thoughts.....Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
And this is delightful story I have to have read the second part first before I got to the first part so I kinda knew what was coming, but you have done this with fantastic words that has just too funny. Patricia.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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And this is delightful story I have to have read the second part first before I got to the first part so I kinda knew what was coming, but you have done this with fantastic words that has just too funny. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2025
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As always, thank you, Patricia for your time and gracious thoughts. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
This is a very interesting story. You have my head spinning and I am only playing guessing games as to whats going on. Heart and Brain aren't making to much sense at the moment. Perhaps part two will give me more clarity.
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Carol,
This is a very interesting story. You have my head spinning and I am only playing guessing games as to whats going on. Heart and Brain aren't making to much sense at the moment. Perhaps part two will give me more clarity.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 07-Jun-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2025
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Hey Sis...glad you stopped by to read this crazy blurb that my imagination spit out...but it's been eight hours and you didn't read the second part. I hope you do so you get the full picture.
Smiles, Carol
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I will get to it today. I was so tired I had to go to bed
