Charming
an essence poem11 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
You did a fine job with this one, my friend. I really enjoyed it, and the artwork, too! Look at all those smiles.
Ah, relatives. What a bunch, eh? My uncles and aunts are all gone, and I rarely see my brother and sister, or cousins for that matter. I've lost 2 cousins on my father's side. But not one on my mother's side. We're getting up there, though. There are seven of us now in our 70's, me being the oldest of the lot at 74. (My brother passed away from complications of Alzheimer's in July of 2020 at 60 years of age.)
When we disarm ourselves (at a family reunion, for example), it literally means that the very nature, character, and personality of our relatives makes us drop our weapons! We see them from a different angle, if only for a few hours. We might come away with new respect for them (or a few of them, at least). But it has to come from us. We have the power to extend an olive branch and say, "I refuse to fight". Better to make peace, calm tempers, and soothe spirits. This is what is needed over there in the Middle East. Maybe even right here in the United States and Canada with all this talk from your new President of tariff threats at the border. We are neighbors, for Pete's sake! We need to cooperate, join hands and walk through the doors of love and compassion together.
Nicely penned, Bill! I wish you "Good Luck!" in the contest. This should be a contender.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Hi Bill,
You did a fine job with this one, my friend. I really enjoyed it, and the artwork, too! Look at all those smiles.
Ah, relatives. What a bunch, eh? My uncles and aunts are all gone, and I rarely see my brother and sister, or cousins for that matter. I've lost 2 cousins on my father's side. But not one on my mother's side. We're getting up there, though. There are seven of us now in our 70's, me being the oldest of the lot at 74. (My brother passed away from complications of Alzheimer's in July of 2020 at 60 years of age.)
When we disarm ourselves (at a family reunion, for example), it literally means that the very nature, character, and personality of our relatives makes us drop our weapons! We see them from a different angle, if only for a few hours. We might come away with new respect for them (or a few of them, at least). But it has to come from us. We have the power to extend an olive branch and say, "I refuse to fight". Better to make peace, calm tempers, and soothe spirits. This is what is needed over there in the Middle East. Maybe even right here in the United States and Canada with all this talk from your new President of tariff threats at the border. We are neighbors, for Pete's sake! We need to cooperate, join hands and walk through the doors of love and compassion together.
Nicely penned, Bill! I wish you "Good Luck!" in the contest. This should be a contender.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Kimbob. I have relatives on my wife's side who would charm a bee out of honey, and ones on my family's side who would cause trees to uproot and move away.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like you have some happy and attractive relatives here Bill and I am glad to hear it as not all mine are as accommodating, he he he, I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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It sounds like you have some happy and attractive relatives here Bill and I am glad to hear it as not all mine are as accommodating, he he he, I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Dolly. My wife's relatives are great, while mine are mostly -- not.
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Ha ha ha, glad your wife has a lovely family x x x
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This one's very clever because it can be taken two ways: Either: your relatives are disarming, positive people, or they disarm people of all their positive attributes. This is absolutely perfect. I have to hand it to you, Bill! VERY, very good work here! xoxo
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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This one's very clever because it can be taken two ways: Either: your relatives are disarming, positive people, or they disarm people of all their positive attributes. This is absolutely perfect. I have to hand it to you, Bill! VERY, very good work here! xoxo
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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I never knowed I was so good. : )
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Yeah, right...
Comment from Sugarray77
I like this short one for the contest, Bill. Good job on the near rhyme at the end of your phrases.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Melissa
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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I like this short one for the contest, Bill. Good job on the near rhyme at the end of your phrases.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Melissa
Comment from nomi338
Great. I had forgotten somewhat how much my relatives care about me. That is until the recent firestorm that has erupted here in Southern California. I have enjoyed a rash of concerned phone call from various relative all expressing concern about my welfare.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Great. I had forgotten somewhat how much my relatives care about me. That is until the recent firestorm that has erupted here in Southern California. I have enjoyed a rash of concerned phone call from various relative all expressing concern about my welfare.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Nice to know they're there.
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Absolutely. And I know a big old macho guy like you would never admit it, I know that you are also concerned about your boy. Am I right or am I right?
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I hope you're safe and in good spirits.
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I hope you're safe and in good spirits, Nolan.
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Totally, I do not even smell like smoke. Fortunately and happily we are not that close to danger yet. Thanks for asking.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
this is different than the Essence poem I saw. What are the rules for this one please? Good job on your entry for the two line poem contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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this is different than the Essence poem I saw. What are the rules for this one please? Good job on your entry for the two line poem contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Here's the example:
Mysterious night dream
Elicits a fright scream
First line center words rhyme with second line center and both end rhymes sound alike.
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thanks much
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent 2 lines poem for the 2 line contest. Good composition and theme. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for participating in the haiku club.
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Excellent 2 lines poem for the 2 line contest. Good composition and theme. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for participating in the haiku club.
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from judiverse
Excellent artwork choice. Syllable count in both lines is the required six. I like the charming and disarming rhyme. Not sure about positives and relatives rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Excellent artwork choice. Syllable count in both lines is the required six. I like the charming and disarming rhyme. Not sure about positives and relatives rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Judi.
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You're welcome. Enjoy those relatives in the new year. judi
Comment from patcelaw
It can often be that many of our relatives are charming, but it also can be that they are not so charming sometimes and you have to deal with the problems of living with them. Patricia.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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It can often be that many of our relatives are charming, but it also can be that they are not so charming sometimes and you have to deal with the problems of living with them. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Uncharming relatives? Arrg!
Comment from Sally Law
I have quite a few of these myself. But we love them. What can we do? They're family. Wonderful poem, my friend.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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I have quite a few of these myself. But we love them. What can we do? They're family. Wonderful poem, my friend.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Sally
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You're welcome! :))
