The Checkup
A frightening dental experience42 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
"I started getting nervous, but what really caught my eye
Were sutures and the bandages that she had standing by.
A stethoscope and oxygen, defibrillator, too.
I wondered what condition I'd be in when she was through."
AAAaaHAHAHA!!!
"But this time would be different; I could tell right from the start,
From all the stainless steel that she had laid out on her cart.
I offered up a sheepish grin and tried to break the ice
By mentioning her body piercings really looked quite nice."
This HAS to win!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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"I started getting nervous, but what really caught my eye
Were sutures and the bandages that she had standing by.
A stethoscope and oxygen, defibrillator, too.
I wondered what condition I'd be in when she was through."
AAAaaHAHAHA!!!
"But this time would be different; I could tell right from the start,
From all the stainless steel that she had laid out on her cart.
I offered up a sheepish grin and tried to break the ice
By mentioning her body piercings really looked quite nice."
This HAS to win!!!!!!!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thanks for the great review, Dawn, but no win.
Comment from pookietoo
Of course your poem deserves six stars. All of the poems you write deserve six stars. When I read you lived in Littleton, I thought you meant Littleton, Colorado. I hope to hear from you soon. Have a happy Christmas season.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Of course your poem deserves six stars. All of the poems you write deserve six stars. When I read you lived in Littleton, I thought you meant Littleton, Colorado. I hope to hear from you soon. Have a happy Christmas season.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thanks for the review, Darla. Good to hear from you. Hope your Christmas is a good one.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Share a Story in a poem contest. Oh man. Your story took me on a bit of a ride. lol I wasn't sure whether to be horrified or to laugh. but the ending verified that for me. It was definitely meant to make me laugh lol Good job. Fun read.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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An excellent entry for the Share a Story in a poem contest. Oh man. Your story took me on a bit of a ride. lol I wasn't sure whether to be horrified or to laugh. but the ending verified that for me. It was definitely meant to make me laugh lol Good job. Fun read.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Marilyn. This is one of the few humorous dental experiences.
Comment from Natureschild
This poem is an engaging and humorous piece with vivid imagery and a clear narrative. The exaggerated scenarios evoke laughter and a touch of sympathy for the narrator.
Good luck, Terry
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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This poem is an engaging and humorous piece with vivid imagery and a clear narrative. The exaggerated scenarios evoke laughter and a touch of sympathy for the narrator.
Good luck, Terry
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Terry. I have written similar poems about my dentist and my chiropractor. Luckily, they both have a good sense of humor.
Comment from Katiemae1977
This is a really, really great poem Paul. Your rhymes and meter are flawless and make for an easy read. Your storyline moves well and is compelling. You had me riveted until the end.
Best of luck in the contest and I hope you do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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This is a really, really great poem Paul. Your rhymes and meter are flawless and make for an easy read. Your storyline moves well and is compelling. You had me riveted until the end.
Best of luck in the contest and I hope you do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Katiemae. Speaking of riveted, she had a rivet gun on her tray. Luckily, she didn't have to use it on me. I can't imagine what it is used for.
Comment from Colorado Owl
You did an excellent job of resurrecting one of my worst nightmares! Your description makes me cringe and want to cancel my next dental appointment. (Thank you?)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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You did an excellent job of resurrecting one of my worst nightmares! Your description makes me cringe and want to cancel my next dental appointment. (Thank you?)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Colorado. Didn't mean to make you cringe, but I cringed when writing this poem.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Paul, I know it wasn't a fun experience...but
it made me smile just picturing your foot over
your head...but I'm so glad you survived the whole
ordeal...and you made it home safe...
I remember telling jokes to my dentist when I went...
we were always in competition to see who would tell
the funniest joke...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and I love your picture...
very well written...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Hi Paul, I know it wasn't a fun experience...but
it made me smile just picturing your foot over
your head...but I'm so glad you survived the whole
ordeal...and you made it home safe...
I remember telling jokes to my dentist when I went...
we were always in competition to see who would tell
the funniest joke...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and I love your picture...
very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Linda. As you can see, this hygienist didn't have a sense of humor.
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your so welcome Paul...LOL...love xxoo
Comment from forestport12
Mouth to ear," Yea, I love that one. I could see you doing this live at a comedy club. So much to identify with, but its those exaggerations, like putting the chair back as far as it would go and before that seeing her robed up with a bit of blood on her. But then again, they may not be dramatic license. And then the part where you are asked a question but are unable to answer. I can identify with that! love the clever rhymes. Not all put up big money deserve an exceptional. This earned it.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Mouth to ear," Yea, I love that one. I could see you doing this live at a comedy club. So much to identify with, but its those exaggerations, like putting the chair back as far as it would go and before that seeing her robed up with a bit of blood on her. But then again, they may not be dramatic license. And then the part where you are asked a question but are unable to answer. I can identify with that! love the clever rhymes. Not all put up big money deserve an exceptional. This earned it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Forest. I use to have a dentist who would always ask me all kinds 0of questions when he had his hands in my mouth.
Comment from Janet Foor
Dental experiences can be scary. Mine happened on a trip to Scotland. A tooth became abscessed so I was in miserable pain. Finding a dentist was not easy and then when we did, it was like going back in time to a more primitive place. Everything was cold white porcelain. But unlike your experience, no frightening bloodstains.
Great story in a poem Paul.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Dental experiences can be scary. Mine happened on a trip to Scotland. A tooth became abscessed so I was in miserable pain. Finding a dentist was not easy and then when we did, it was like going back in time to a more primitive place. Everything was cold white porcelain. But unlike your experience, no frightening bloodstains.
Great story in a poem Paul.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Janet. Did you run into any of my relatives in Scotland?
Comment from Neonewman
As soon as I noticed someone else's blood on her gown, I would have been out of there. Two years ago, I had to have all of my teeth removed. My body rejected the numbing agents, and I felt the whole experience. I'm done with the dentist forever.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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As soon as I noticed someone else's blood on her gown, I would have been out of there. Two years ago, I had to have all of my teeth removed. My body rejected the numbing agents, and I felt the whole experience. I'm done with the dentist forever.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Having all your teeth out is a tough way to avoid future dental appointments.
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Yes! But it was inevitable.
