Home for Christmas
A simple Christmas story.22 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
It's only Wednesday; for SURE I should still have one measly six left for this indescribably beautiful piece...and yet, I do not.
Eean, this is stunning in every way imaginable. No wonder it won the Christmas story contest. If it hadn't, there would have been no reason for me to continue as a member here. I missed seeing this (literally) when it originally posted because that's when I had to stop all screen time. But I'm so glad I've seen it now because to have missed out on this would have been nothing short of criminal.
You are so majorly tender (sorry; I know you hate that anyone knows that about you...) and I feel so lucky to have met and gotten to know you this year. Looking forward to many more heart-warming tales from that talented writer's brain of yours.
xoxoxo
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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It's only Wednesday; for SURE I should still have one measly six left for this indescribably beautiful piece...and yet, I do not.
Eean, this is stunning in every way imaginable. No wonder it won the Christmas story contest. If it hadn't, there would have been no reason for me to continue as a member here. I missed seeing this (literally) when it originally posted because that's when I had to stop all screen time. But I'm so glad I've seen it now because to have missed out on this would have been nothing short of criminal.
You are so majorly tender (sorry; I know you hate that anyone knows that about you...) and I feel so lucky to have met and gotten to know you this year. Looking forward to many more heart-warming tales from that talented writer's brain of yours.
xoxoxo
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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Dear God, now I had never written it. Thanks for being part of my inspiration. I love a true and innocent muse. I like you a little too, though. Thanks.
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It's so fun to watch twits think they're being hilarious. It's my favorite form of entertainment.
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You should see the goofy look on my face. You would think I was being pleased by something.
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You better hope our face doesn't freeze like that, Mister!!
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It did. The lady at the Starbucks was more than frightened. She felt violated and I was just ordering coffee. Sometimes you just feel creepy.
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You do, maybe. Me? Never.
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Only if I am called one. Granted, I am different. People just need to toughen up. Myself included. But, to be visibly flustered and blush just because I said hello? Granted, I am the only Irish/Greek god in the world. NOT.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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I'm shocked. I'm happy, but, I'm shocked. You guys are the best.
Comment from evilynne
That is a wonderful poignant Christmas story. I was sorry when it ended, I think that your muse will provide you with more inspiration! Best of luck in the contest and wishes for a Merry Christmas! Evi
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2024
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That is a wonderful poignant Christmas story. I was sorry when it ended, I think that your muse will provide you with more inspiration! Best of luck in the contest and wishes for a Merry Christmas! Evi
Comment Written 24-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh so this is the beginning of the story? Can you add the new part to this since this has the link to the Christmas contest? Otherwise, this ends rather abruptly. Best wishes in the contest.
Oh, and I didn't understand: "He beaks down to nothing " This is an expression I don't know "beaks down".
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Oh so this is the beginning of the story? Can you add the new part to this since this has the link to the Christmas contest? Otherwise, this ends rather abruptly. Best wishes in the contest.
Oh, and I didn't understand: "He beaks down to nothing " This is an expression I don't know "beaks down".
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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No, I have tried. It keeps saying that it can't be added. I actually messaged Tom, the man, before I started. He said I could.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
What an amazing story Eean. I cannot wait for the second part as this little boy has me intrigued. Heck, he has me worried sick, knowing that his mama is sick from the bottle. It almost made me cry, as anyone who knows me knows that I am all about children. They are my reason I exist. Ok, I am exaggerating, but if you read my stuff it is mostly about kids. This one is amazing and I love where it is going. Even if it wasn't a contest entry it would make a wonderful chapter book.
But I am certain it will be a great Christmas ending when you write the second part. I absolutely love it and if I had another six star to give out, you would have it. All of mine are gone or promised out already. Please accept my virtual six.
The barkeep better learn that when you are a bartender you need to put up with things you don't like. People sure seemed grouchy at the poor guy. But anyway, I love this about the boy and I am certain when it comes it will be six star worthy. Thanks for this wonderful writing!! You are so good you almost made me forget what I came here for.
I just wanted to tell you that yesterday I posted a December calendar and poem telling what December was all about. Something different for me. Your name just happens to be on the calendar and in the poem. But in a couple weeks I will be writing your own poem and I am so excited as you share it with Jesus. Don't worry you aren't going to get that kind of praise. Haha. However, I will be nice. LOL.
So if you want to check mine out, it is up to you and I will contact you when it is time to give me some info about yourself.
Once more, I sure enjoyed this story and I am anxious for the finale.
Love, Debi
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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What an amazing story Eean. I cannot wait for the second part as this little boy has me intrigued. Heck, he has me worried sick, knowing that his mama is sick from the bottle. It almost made me cry, as anyone who knows me knows that I am all about children. They are my reason I exist. Ok, I am exaggerating, but if you read my stuff it is mostly about kids. This one is amazing and I love where it is going. Even if it wasn't a contest entry it would make a wonderful chapter book.
But I am certain it will be a great Christmas ending when you write the second part. I absolutely love it and if I had another six star to give out, you would have it. All of mine are gone or promised out already. Please accept my virtual six.
The barkeep better learn that when you are a bartender you need to put up with things you don't like. People sure seemed grouchy at the poor guy. But anyway, I love this about the boy and I am certain when it comes it will be six star worthy. Thanks for this wonderful writing!! You are so good you almost made me forget what I came here for.
I just wanted to tell you that yesterday I posted a December calendar and poem telling what December was all about. Something different for me. Your name just happens to be on the calendar and in the poem. But in a couple weeks I will be writing your own poem and I am so excited as you share it with Jesus. Don't worry you aren't going to get that kind of praise. Haha. However, I will be nice. LOL.
So if you want to check mine out, it is up to you and I will contact you when it is time to give me some info about yourself.
Once more, I sure enjoyed this story and I am anxious for the finale.
Love, Debi
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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You have heard the phrase "way out there", haven't you? Well, that stops way short of where your heart is. It's way out there. Good luck with trying to make up something even remotely close to who I am, but, I'm flattered as a Christian Brother to be considered. Remember, I do have a dark side. I was a kid once too. Thanks for the review.
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It doesn't much matter to me if you have a dark side. Most of us do, as we all have something that has happened in this life. I'm proud to call you friend no matter what. I never have been into judging others but what ever you want to share with people, they always appreciate getting to know their fellow writers better. Thanks and If I haven't fanned you I will do that to make sure I don't miss the next part of your story. Thanks so much, my friend. Love, Debi
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god bless.
Comment from Senyai
Hi Eean B,
Wow, this is a great start to a fine story you've written so far. The little pajama boy and the inebriated salesman make a good match by their plagued circumstances. I'm intrigued to find out how the boy with an alcoholic mother and a lonely salesman interact in this Christmas story
I look forward to part 2 :-)
Senyai
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Hi Eean B,
Wow, this is a great start to a fine story you've written so far. The little pajama boy and the inebriated salesman make a good match by their plagued circumstances. I'm intrigued to find out how the boy with an alcoholic mother and a lonely salesman interact in this Christmas story
I look forward to part 2 :-)
Senyai
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Lana Marie
I had so many thoughts and feelings running through my head while reading this. So good job keeping me wanting to finish reading this. I could feel the main characters loneliness turn into purpose as the story continued towards the end.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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I had so many thoughts and feelings running through my head while reading this. So good job keeping me wanting to finish reading this. I could feel the main characters loneliness turn into purpose as the story continued towards the end.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from CM Kelly
Pretty good story. I just joined FanStory a few weeks ago, not much of a writer and even less of a reviewer. But, I see some similarities in your style to mine, which provides me with some encouragement. My only comment is that you have a typo in the following sentence, "He beaks down to nothing and I am truly on my way there also."
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Pretty good story. I just joined FanStory a few weeks ago, not much of a writer and even less of a reviewer. But, I see some similarities in your style to mine, which provides me with some encouragement. My only comment is that you have a typo in the following sentence, "He beaks down to nothing and I am truly on my way there also."
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you. It's funny, I have Grammarly and I have more typo problems than without. I'll read you soon.
Comment from BethShelby
Your story is interesting and fine as far as it goes but it doesn't sound finished. There are a lot of loose ends and to be a successful Christmas story you need a happy or at least an emotional ending. I hope you continue it. You can have up to 5000 works.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Your story is interesting and fine as far as it goes but it doesn't sound finished. There are a lot of loose ends and to be a successful Christmas story you need a happy or at least an emotional ending. I hope you continue it. You can have up to 5000 works.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Tom said I could enter it in two sections. I guess I should have put that in the notes. I will now that it's too late. lol
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Well, I hope Tom checked with the contest committee because sometimes don't think they communicate with Tom. I don't always get the straight scoop when I ask a question. I would say you do need to mention it is a continuing story.
Comment from Sanku
Oh God are there really situations like that ,Drunk mother not having anything to eat and the son is stealing the bread for her ..What future does that boy have?
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Oh God are there really situations like that ,Drunk mother not having anything to eat and the son is stealing the bread for her ..What future does that boy have?
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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There are worse stories coming from my little city alone. Two parents starved their two-year-old to death while keeping her locked up in her room. Do you really not know that this is a flawed world? I want YOUR life. Sorry if I sound condescending or rude, it's a really touchy subject. GOD BLESS YOU.
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Iknow it is a flawed world .In india we hear a lot about children troubling their parents They think parents are living only for them and the silly parents often are pawns in their game . They demand two
wheelers and smartphones often blackmailing them ...Yes it is a flawed world..
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Wow. It is flawed, but no so different.
