The First Falling Leaf
A leaf is so proud to be the first to fall37 total reviews
Comment from Shanbreen
Pam, I like the philosophical aspects of this poem. Sometimes, it helps being the last to jump in a situation that is sure to kill us. Being the last would definitely give us more time to learn how to avoid suffering from lying at the bottom of the heap (i.e., if we are alive). We would then have the satisfaction of lying on top of the garbage heap. =) I see you have written this one in AABB style. Well written.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Pam, I like the philosophical aspects of this poem. Sometimes, it helps being the last to jump in a situation that is sure to kill us. Being the last would definitely give us more time to learn how to avoid suffering from lying at the bottom of the heap (i.e., if we are alive). We would then have the satisfaction of lying on top of the garbage heap. =) I see you have written this one in AABB style. Well written.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and excellent rating
Comment from QC Poet
It is not completely different a life cycle from many living organisms from birth to aging to returning to the earth we are living in. Very enjoyable poem to read and rate Thank you for Sharing your poem with us
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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It is not completely different a life cycle from many living organisms from birth to aging to returning to the earth we are living in. Very enjoyable poem to read and rate Thank you for Sharing your poem with us
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and generous rating
Comment from Neonewman
This is brilliantly crafted, my friend. What an excellent take on the fall of a leaf, taking pride in being the first to fall. This is beautiful, yet sad. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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This is brilliantly crafted, my friend. What an excellent take on the fall of a leaf, taking pride in being the first to fall. This is beautiful, yet sad. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you Steve for your wonderful comments and for the six shiny stars that made my day
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My pleasure, my friend.
Comment from CuriousLyricist
I love this one. Bringing a leaf to life makes for the a good cute poem, with a sense of adventure as well. There is nothing bad I can say about this poem. However there is some tiny thing that my eyes can't miss for some reason. There is an extra space in the line "The rusts and yellows join the pile." between the word rusts and and. That is all my friend great work, it's the best poem I have read on here today I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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I love this one. Bringing a leaf to life makes for the a good cute poem, with a sense of adventure as well. There is nothing bad I can say about this poem. However there is some tiny thing that my eyes can't miss for some reason. There is an extra space in the line "The rusts and yellows join the pile." between the word rusts and and. That is all my friend great work, it's the best poem I have read on here today I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for catching the little snag and also for your wonderful comments and a especially the six shining stars. It made my day.
Comment from Unclear Saria
Thought-provoking! When it comes to the half-witted race of being first, we tend to forget success soon withers, and therefore the pride- lovely thought to be shared through a poem! I particularly like your footnotes which with utter simplicity capture the essence of the poem that is nature being the first teacher of philosophy! Thank you so much for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thought-provoking! When it comes to the half-witted race of being first, we tend to forget success soon withers, and therefore the pride- lovely thought to be shared through a poem! I particularly like your footnotes which with utter simplicity capture the essence of the poem that is nature being the first teacher of philosophy! Thank you so much for sharing
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review. I appreciate you.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem really captures the leaf's journey from excitement to acceptance with a warm, personal touch. The way you describe the leaf's pride and eventual realization is both vivid and touching.
It brings a fresh perspective on something as simple as a falling leaf. I could definitely use some fall weather now. Great job!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Your poem really captures the leaf's journey from excitement to acceptance with a warm, personal touch. The way you describe the leaf's pride and eventual realization is both vivid and touching.
It brings a fresh perspective on something as simple as a falling leaf. I could definitely use some fall weather now. Great job!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review. I appreciate it, Dawn
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was such a wonderful story of wanting something in the future and not enjoying the present. The leaf was joyous until he realized, maybe it happened too quickly. The poem was wonderfully written and read smoothly. No criticism from me. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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This was such a wonderful story of wanting something in the future and not enjoying the present. The leaf was joyous until he realized, maybe it happened too quickly. The poem was wonderfully written and read smoothly. No criticism from me. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review. I appreciate you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The First Falling Leaf, presented with seven AABB-rhymed quaterns and a couplet, sing the last sad song of the dying leaf. Like a life story, it had its moment and the fling at the end of autumn. the end is, unfortunately, the end.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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This poem, The First Falling Leaf, presented with seven AABB-rhymed quaterns and a couplet, sing the last sad song of the dying leaf. Like a life story, it had its moment and the fling at the end of autumn. the end is, unfortunately, the end.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a fine review
Comment from jim vecchio
I just read your other post and now come to this personification of the falling of leaves upon Autumn's arrival. This was expertly thought out and written. It deserves, also, more than the five I currently have.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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I just read your other post and now come to this personification of the falling of leaves upon Autumn's arrival. This was expertly thought out and written. It deserves, also, more than the five I currently have.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Jim for your wonderful review and great comments. And for the virtual six stars, I thank you again.
Comment from karenina
And so it is for each of us...
Such depth here... Poignant and bittersweet!
A metaphorical tour of force.
First leave or last, we all have our journey.
What a clever approach to life and death!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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And so it is for each of us...
Such depth here... Poignant and bittersweet!
A metaphorical tour of force.
First leave or last, we all have our journey.
What a clever approach to life and death!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and kind words and for a great review
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Such a great poem!
