Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

What a gripping story! I enjoyed it! The way you built the tension kept me hooked from the very first line. The eerie atmosphere, coupled with Serena's paranoia, was perfect. The characters felt real and relatable. That wasn't a good thing because that made their fear all the more real! haha The twist at the end was unexpected. Fantastic work!

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024

Thank you for your lovely feedback. I'm new to Fan Story and was unsure how it would be received or how best to promote it. This is one of many stories I have and hope to find avenues to submit them in the future.

Comment from Erika Whittle

Excellent

I don't normally read this genre but this was pretty good at drawing in the reader. I was kind of hoping that Alan would be possessed or something at the end. Not going lie, I won't touch a Ouija board just in case some crazy shit like this happens! Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024

Thank you for your great feedback. I'm glad I managed to hook you but not scare you too much. I have a variety of styles that I write but lean towards horror and to humour. A funny combination. As a new writer to this community I hope to contribute more as soon as I learn how things work here.

reply by Erika Whittle on 14-Jul-2024

I'm new too!