Act Of Endurance
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem often feels like poetic rap (only much cleaner) with some internal rhymes scattered around in every third or fourth line on average. The theme seems to be how what should exist in society seems to get broken or violated more often than we would want. I guess the musing on "Things sighted in the night sky high up" goes to show that the speaker would like to know what it means to have a more eternal perspective. There is kind of a stream-of-consciousness style to the language as well.
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This poem often feels like poetic rap (only much cleaner) with some internal rhymes scattered around in every third or fourth line on average. The theme seems to be how what should exist in society seems to get broken or violated more often than we would want. I guess the musing on "Things sighted in the night sky high up" goes to show that the speaker would like to know what it means to have a more eternal perspective. There is kind of a stream-of-consciousness style to the language as well.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing has such a unique style! The way you describe the different moments - like the pain of a broken tooth - really shows your experience. I felt like you were capturing the complexity of life in small but powerful scenes. Keep expressing yourself like this, your voice really comes through strong!
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Your writing has such a unique style! The way you describe the different moments - like the pain of a broken tooth - really shows your experience. I felt like you were capturing the complexity of life in small but powerful scenes. Keep expressing yourself like this, your voice really comes through strong!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, TPAC
I think much of this is repeated. What can I say? There is a lot wrong. I need to find out from you if you want me to ignore it or give you suggestions for improvement. I will do as you wish
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I went to high school, bent facts, then, graduated me in two years, it past affairs, history, present account not alive; not even mentioned: detailing that fallen event."
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Hi, TPAC
I think much of this is repeated. What can I say? There is a lot wrong. I need to find out from you if you want me to ignore it or give you suggestions for improvement. I will do as you wish
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I went to high school, bent facts, then, graduated me in two years, it past affairs, history, present account not alive; not even mentioned: detailing that fallen event."
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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I see your point, my aimed intent, trying to convey its present: absent. Any help is appreciated. Thanks for your interests: and super rate despite.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
Our concerns to, about tiny things that we face, periods with dealt bad, entanglements, feeling doubts, prevailing, cases it is, which exist; seek ace for its real: to surface truth.
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Our concerns to, about tiny things that we face, periods with dealt bad, entanglements, feeling doubts, prevailing, cases it is, which exist; seek ace for its real: to surface truth.
Strong
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Just puzzled about these freak occurrences, which occurred throughout my life: hair raising experiences. Thanking you for your great rate.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your poem is written strangely. It wanders around from one subject to another. I can understand what you are trying to convey, but I found it quite different. I'm sure that was your intent. Nice work.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Your poem is written strangely. It wanders around from one subject to another. I can understand what you are trying to convey, but I found it quite different. I'm sure that was your intent. Nice work.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Being not norm, is great, yet to feel the actual intent is more appealing. Thanking you for your kind rate: despite.
