The Day My Life Changed
1,400 words. Another Rabbit, Allen, and Roy adventure.15 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Mike,
Hello.
This is a sad story of abuse suffered at the hands of a parent. It's difficult emotionally to read, but it is well-written.
It's good to see you again on Fanstory, Mike.
Health and happiness,
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Mike,
Hello.
This is a sad story of abuse suffered at the hands of a parent. It's difficult emotionally to read, but it is well-written.
It's good to see you again on Fanstory, Mike.
Health and happiness,
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hi, Cindy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
I'm all outta sixes, or this would get one ! Yeah I am almost 70,so I remember getting a humiliating swat on my behind, but very rarely, and I can say there was a good reason!
But wow, what you endured! What a fantastic writer you are! Kudos to you for authoring this story!
Maddy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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I'm all outta sixes, or this would get one ! Yeah I am almost 70,so I remember getting a humiliating swat on my behind, but very rarely, and I can say there was a good reason!
But wow, what you endured! What a fantastic writer you are! Kudos to you for authoring this story!
Maddy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Hi, Maddy. Thank you for your kind words and thoughts of a six. It's deeply appreciated! Look for the next chapter either today or tomorrow.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from GoWiSt
"Another Rabbit, Allen, and Roy adventure." This title reminds me of Hohn Updike's 'Rabbit' series.
"stolen two of his Father's cigarettes but neglected to get any matches." Ha! Classic early youth blunder.
Geez, mother of the frickin' century, Rabbit's mom is. Wonder what hell she might have gone through growing up to make her turn out that way. Poor Rabbit. I feel for him.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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"Another Rabbit, Allen, and Roy adventure." This title reminds me of Hohn Updike's 'Rabbit' series.
"stolen two of his Father's cigarettes but neglected to get any matches." Ha! Classic early youth blunder.
Geez, mother of the frickin' century, Rabbit's mom is. Wonder what hell she might have gone through growing up to make her turn out that way. Poor Rabbit. I feel for him.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Wendy G
It's unbelievable abuse - and it was far too common. Your mother was out of control, and it's a wonder she didn't kill you. Some things have changed for the better these days, and it's good that parents are no longer free to do such things. Your story was heartbreaking, and very moving, and I appreciate your having the courage to write it and share it.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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It's unbelievable abuse - and it was far too common. Your mother was out of control, and it's a wonder she didn't kill you. Some things have changed for the better these days, and it's good that parents are no longer free to do such things. Your story was heartbreaking, and very moving, and I appreciate your having the courage to write it and share it.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hi, Wendy. It was amazing how this flowed from my fingers. It took four hours of less. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from joann r romei
This broke my heart, times were different, and I felt the emotional pain described as well as the physical pain, writing and reading are an escape for some. I look forward to more of your stories.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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This broke my heart, times were different, and I felt the emotional pain described as well as the physical pain, writing and reading are an escape for some. I look forward to more of your stories.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hi, Joann. Thank you for your kind words and shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
This was a pretty intense scene here. The mother beating her own child like that was tough to read. The helplessness of the kid who just wants to read and dream and hope really comes through in the dialogue and the scene setting. I thought you dove into that and hammered home the excruciating pain of it. estory
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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This was a pretty intense scene here. The mother beating her own child like that was tough to read. The helplessness of the kid who just wants to read and dream and hope really comes through in the dialogue and the scene setting. I thought you dove into that and hammered home the excruciating pain of it. estory
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hello, my friend.Thank you for you amazing review of a difficult story and for shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great and God bless.
mike
Comment from Begin Again
I don't believe I have the right words to express how heartbreaking and moving your story is. As I read it, I wanted to scream, cry and simply pray none of it was true. Say I am emotional, I don't care, because a small boy's life was changed and boyhood was stolen. thank you for sharing.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I don't believe I have the right words to express how heartbreaking and moving your story is. As I read it, I wanted to scream, cry and simply pray none of it was true. Say I am emotional, I don't care, because a small boy's life was changed and boyhood was stolen. thank you for sharing.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hello, my friend. I'm amazed at the different responses to this story. It stirred some emotions. Thank you for your kind words! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Liz O'Neill
We have a cautionary tale facing us. One that probably many of us could identify with. "Roy had stolen two of his Father's cigarettes but neglected to get any matches." good concept: "Slowly, I start pedaling home. There's no use to rush to a beating" this is a mystery to me and probably to many readers why did he get in trouble? "Allen explains, "Your Mom was having coffee with your Grandma when Mrs. Forrest walked in, thanking them for all you did with her Grandson. Including all of the books you read together. They both saw the rage build in your Mom's eyes." Times have changed.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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We have a cautionary tale facing us. One that probably many of us could identify with. "Roy had stolen two of his Father's cigarettes but neglected to get any matches." good concept: "Slowly, I start pedaling home. There's no use to rush to a beating" this is a mystery to me and probably to many readers why did he get in trouble? "Allen explains, "Your Mom was having coffee with your Grandma when Mrs. Forrest walked in, thanking them for all you did with her Grandson. Including all of the books you read together. They both saw the rage build in your Mom's eyes." Times have changed.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hi, Liz. I'm amazed at the different responses to this story. It stirred some emotions. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Thank you for sharing that bit of information about the different emotions
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What an incredible read! I'm still heart-broken by the punishment Michael received (you spelled it Mich(ea)l, I'm not sure if that was intentional). I can't imagine how degrading and damaging this kind of treatment must have been. Your story, probably because it's based in truth, is very powerfully expressed with good structure, pace and dialogue. In short, an excellent and compelling read. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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What an incredible read! I'm still heart-broken by the punishment Michael received (you spelled it Mich(ea)l, I'm not sure if that was intentional). I can't imagine how degrading and damaging this kind of treatment must have been. Your story, probably because it's based in truth, is very powerfully expressed with good structure, pace and dialogue. In short, an excellent and compelling read. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hi, Debbie. I'm amazed at the responses to this story. It touched some emotions. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from LJbutterfly
I am also from an era when the saying was, "Spare the rod. Spoil the child." But I never experienced anything like what you described. A beating is considered child abuse, but destroying something a child loves is beyond abuse. I would be interested in reading how you survived your childhood.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I am also from an era when the saying was, "Spare the rod. Spoil the child." But I never experienced anything like what you described. A beating is considered child abuse, but destroying something a child loves is beyond abuse. I would be interested in reading how you survived your childhood.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hello, my friend. I'm amazed at the responses to this piece. It brought out some emotions. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless