Lair Of The Seductress
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "What Lies Beneath Satin Boxers"Book Four Wolf Bend Series
7 total reviews
Comment from royowen
It seems they're on the scent of Lilith, but at least her victims appear to be dying happy, that's amazing, you're a good writer, always interesting always knowledgeable, a good episodes Douglas, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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It seems they're on the scent of Lilith, but at least her victims appear to be dying happy, that's amazing, you're a good writer, always interesting always knowledgeable, a good episodes Douglas, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thanks ! You are a delight, Roy!
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Bless you Douglas
Comment from Tom Horonzy
anad if there a way to build to a climax it is only fair that it comes from you, so I bid you goodnight with delight and say I'll read the follow up chapters as soon as you release them.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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anad if there a way to build to a climax it is only fair that it comes from you, so I bid you goodnight with delight and say I'll read the follow up chapters as soon as you release them.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Tom!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This should get you started my fine froggie friend.
How you keep all this banded together in your noggin is beyond me. I do shorties. Get in, kill'em off, trip over the blood and get out. Say, have you ever won for reviewing? :-) Karen
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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This should get you started my fine froggie friend.
How you keep all this banded together in your noggin is beyond me. I do shorties. Get in, kill'em off, trip over the blood and get out. Say, have you ever won for reviewing? :-) Karen
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Karen! You are a doll. I have won reviewing one time and came in 3rd another.
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Good for you. I review my heinie off, and zippo. Do you understand how it works? I read all the rules and it is clear as mud. Karen
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It runs off if those votes for reviewer of the month. I know I had over 29 the month I won and over 15 when I got third. You have to get a lot to be in the running.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It seems a real age ago since we were reading this story but you have a skill of immersing us straight back into it. And the footprint is an excellent piece of evidence, particularly in the way it's been discovered. It also provides good momentum to the investigation. I noticed 2 small edits: 1st para: a man who really like(s) him; accout(re)ments. Well done for throwing yourself back into this after a very challenging month. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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It seems a real age ago since we were reading this story but you have a skill of immersing us straight back into it. And the footprint is an excellent piece of evidence, particularly in the way it's been discovered. It also provides good momentum to the investigation. I noticed 2 small edits: 1st para: a man who really like(s) him; accout(re)ments. Well done for throwing yourself back into this after a very challenging month. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thanks! Glad you are still onboard. I think I lost a few due to the break. D
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Do you have any feedback about your March book? It should have been placed in the contest, surely!
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It is a committee vote. It says 5 to 7 more days for the decision. No idea how many people entered it, especially when dealing with non-Fanstorians. Regardless, I accomplished my goal! I think it was legible, made sense, and he?d the readers. (Even with all the on the fly grammar. Ha!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice progress. well done.
Just a coule glitches:
...a man who really like him. - likes, liked?
...found the badguys hideout. - badguys', or bad guys' (???)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Nice progress. well done.
Just a coule glitches:
...a man who really like him. - likes, liked?
...found the badguys hideout. - badguys', or bad guys' (???)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. Great catches!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm glad you're back with Greg. I missed him. I'm sure he did miss something, but I'm also sure it will come to him. I do like this story.
Why don't you two hop out and I'll take you back to the crime scene. (scene?" and I'm wondering about a comma after out but not positive.)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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I'm glad you're back with Greg. I missed him. I'm sure he did miss something, but I'm also sure it will come to him. I do like this story.
Why don't you two hop out and I'll take you back to the crime scene. (scene?" and I'm wondering about a comma after out but not positive.)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I am actually gad top be back on this book as well. Greg is more my kinda hero. Appreciate you!
Comment from Julie Helms
I have to switch gears! I had missed the beginning of this storyline, so I'm gonna focus mostly on corrections. What I see here is very well written, I'm just not likely to pick up on plot holes, etc..
four man tent (four-man)
"How's Jenny?" Harkin's extended his hand (Harkins)
and was nearly naked, except for his socks and boots. He had a pair of satin red boxers pulled down around his ankles.
(I'm adding this to my list of ways I do not want to be found dead!)
blood speckled face (blood-speckled)
fail to nab Lilith, but also generates (no comma. If you had said"...Lilith, but it also generates..." the comma would be correct)
ten feet ))out(( when they saw the legs sticking ))out((
(Reword one)
tiger stripe pattern
(tiger-stripe)
Nice!
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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I have to switch gears! I had missed the beginning of this storyline, so I'm gonna focus mostly on corrections. What I see here is very well written, I'm just not likely to pick up on plot holes, etc..
four man tent (four-man)
"How's Jenny?" Harkin's extended his hand (Harkins)
and was nearly naked, except for his socks and boots. He had a pair of satin red boxers pulled down around his ankles.
(I'm adding this to my list of ways I do not want to be found dead!)
blood speckled face (blood-speckled)
fail to nab Lilith, but also generates (no comma. If you had said"...Lilith, but it also generates..." the comma would be correct)
ten feet ))out(( when they saw the legs sticking ))out((
(Reword one)
tiger stripe pattern
(tiger-stripe)
Nice!
Julie :-)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Nice! You are such a sweet help! Thank you.