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Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.

14 total reviews 
Comment from prettybluebirds
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I think I missed some of your story. I was quite sick with pneumonia for over a month and didn't do any reviewing for some time. The story is excellent.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Oh my goodness, I'm so sorry you were sick. I'm glad you're better and back!! Thanks for going ahead and reviewing. I appreciate your time!!
    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Rhonda, this is another fine chapter and I so enjoy the story. The characters are all coming to life. But what we have now learned is that Echo and Hannah are in great danger. What now?
I have no six to give this chapter as it so deserves. Hugs, and happy Easter, Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Hi Ulla,
    Thank you for the lovely review, and I understand on the sixes. This one was posted rather late in the week.
    Echo and Hannah are in great danger, and the next chapter will be about them.
    Hugs,
    Rhonda
reply by Ulla on 29-Mar-2024
    I'm looking forward to it. Happy Easter, Rhonda to you and yours. Hugs, Ulla
Comment from Ric Myworld
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I don't usually tag along in the middle of a story after I've missed numerous chapters, but I certainly enjoy your writing and lines that paint pictures and leave thoughts like, "a mouth full of Amazonian ants." :-) Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Hi Ric. I so very much appreciate your jumping on board in the middle. It is helpful to get a different perspective that way. You are doing what few do and it is most appreciated!!
    Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
Exceptional
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Hello Rhoda,
The complex world of the Greek gods just got a bit more complicated.
Hermes remains in character, a bit more than a mere messenger, deceptive
and cunning, but also persuasive and diplomatic. (alas not so with Apollo)
Love the interplay of language (also part of Hermes many gifts)
It looks like Adam will have a chance to complete his 'godhood trial', though becoming Hermes apprentice might not be all it's cracked up to be.
And Theo will have to confront Nix's twin sons, without losing himself in the process.
Marvelous chapter, my friend.
Best wishes to all (including Adam and Theo)
Robert

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Hi Robert,
    Thank you so much for the six stars and for the marvelous review.
    I'm glad you noticed the characteristics of Hermes. I am trying to follow his character traits. He's a prankster, but then some take him to be.
    Apollo has his reasons, and is not entirely out of the picture.
    Thank you from Adam and Theo as well, lol.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from nomi338
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Some people who are blessed with certain skills and powerful abilities do not use them until circumstances demand them. Bystanders are amazed when these gift emerge. I suspect this will prove to be the case with young Adam. I eagerly await the next set of developments in this exciting saga.
Theo has received excellent advice, he must not allow himself to be distracted from his primary mission by the diversionary actions of his family's enemies.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Hi, you're right about Adam and how he has gifts he didn't realize he had until forced to use them. And, yes, Theo needed a reality check on leadership and focus, lol. I appreciate your review and comments.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Begin Again
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Marvelous weaving of the story, Rhonda. If Theo hopes to be a ruler he will understand how difficult some decisions are, such as letting Adam search for Echo instead of him going instead. He has far greater challenges at the moment. It was a great read.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Hi Carol,
    Thanks for your wonderful review and for comments about the story. Yes, Theo has to learn about leadership. One thing is training for it, and a whole other thing to live it out.
    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
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I liked your dialogue and the maturing of Adam as he seems to grow in confidence in what he must do. Hermes isn't quite trustworthy so we just have to believe him when he says that the Sirens' taking Echo and Hannah is just a distraction from Theo's mission. Hope that's true!

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    Hi Helen!
    Thank you for your review of this chapter. It means a lot to me. Adam is trying to grow up. He hasn't really needed to until this point.
    Thanks again,
    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is interesting as Theo forces himself to allow his brother to go rescue Echo, Hannah, and the others. His duty is clear, and he does it as proof that he can become a ruler like his father.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
    Hi Carol! Thanks so much for your lovely review! Yes, Theo stands on his resolve, with a little help from the older and wiser Hermes.
    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Exceptional
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Excellent! Your story is amazing, Rhonda, it makes me want to start again. But I have a few things to do first.

I'm glad Adam has turned up trumps and it determined to rescue Echo and everyone else. Now Theo must seek out the sons of Nyx. Let's hope they will help him. Lots happening, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
    Hi Sandra, thanks for the lovely review. The mid-week 6 is always great.

    I appreciate your comments as well!! Adam was a sleeper. He lived under his brother's shadow too long. Now he has his own chance.

    Theo will find those brothers, but the gift?? Will he have the courage to give it?

    Warm hugs, my friend,
    Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Exceptional
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On returning and seeing his cousin Hermes eating food, Hermes asks Theo what transpired, Theo tells him he had to bribe Mageie to tell of any weakness in Hades armour. Then he finds out that the Echo, Hannah and Philip have gone, so he has to rescue them. Well done Rhonda, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
    Hi Roy,
    Thank you so much for the six stars, my friend! I also appreciate the detailed comments that hit on the important points.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
reply by royowen on 26-Mar-2024
    Well Earned Rhonda