Guided by Faith
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Barbara,
I loved this chapter - the tension you created between Emma and Seth was palpable, and I love how you portrayed his inner turmoil - I'd better hurry and marry this girl.
I didn't find any glaring grammatical errors, and I love the flow...
Looking forward to more,
~Mustang~
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Hi Barbara,
I loved this chapter - the tension you created between Emma and Seth was palpable, and I love how you portrayed his inner turmoil - I'd better hurry and marry this girl.
I didn't find any glaring grammatical errors, and I love the flow...
Looking forward to more,
~Mustang~
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Pam (respa)
A very nice image and story to go with it. You capture a lot of emotions in this chapter, from everyone still trying to make their way to what has to be done, and still reeling from Keith's death. The breakfast scene was a good way to begin.
I think Emma is still trying to sort things out, and Seth's idea about canoeing made her feel left out of the business others were going to be reviewing. Emotions run so high after a tragic event and you show that well.
Things get worked out, and Seth and Emma share very special moments together, the first time they have really talked about what is next is their relationship and how they feel. I wonder if Ronnie Calhoun will ever go away? He is obnoxious and more. I would have gotten a restraining order put on him.
It took more time for Emma to settle down, but then they could be themselves and express their true feelings for one another and share a kiss. A good development in their relationship.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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A very nice image and story to go with it. You capture a lot of emotions in this chapter, from everyone still trying to make their way to what has to be done, and still reeling from Keith's death. The breakfast scene was a good way to begin.
I think Emma is still trying to sort things out, and Seth's idea about canoeing made her feel left out of the business others were going to be reviewing. Emotions run so high after a tragic event and you show that well.
Things get worked out, and Seth and Emma share very special moments together, the first time they have really talked about what is next is their relationship and how they feel. I wonder if Ronnie Calhoun will ever go away? He is obnoxious and more. I would have gotten a restraining order put on him.
It took more time for Emma to settle down, but then they could be themselves and express their true feelings for one another and share a kiss. A good development in their relationship.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
Ah at last, the fruiting of the tree, the ripening of the relationship into another phase, the pre proposal stage? This is where becomes aware of her own feelings, and, of course the male is more or less aware of His by necessity is normal, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Ah at last, the fruiting of the tree, the ripening of the relationship into another phase, the pre proposal stage? This is where becomes aware of her own feelings, and, of course the male is more or less aware of His by necessity is normal, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Emma is beginning to understand.
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I think so,
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Perhaps the sentence "Susan and Seth turned when they heard her footsteps" should read Susan and Seth turned when they heard Emma's footsteps. Would personalize who the footsteps belong to.
In the sentence "and then asked Susan can we borrow the canoe today" not sure the word "then" is necessary. The sentence tends to read clearer without that word included.
Susan, Seth and others coddle Emma constantly as if she is a mere child unable to do much for herself.
Even she admits feeling that way when she said, "I feel like I'm being treated with kid gloves, like I'm a child."
Perhaps they need to lighten up and back off the coddling a mite to allow Emma's character some room to mature. Sometimes, she comes across a tad stagnant.
Seth never did answer how he thinks about Emma, not until the storyline, and Ronnie's accusations, forced him to. This hesitation on Seth's part created a major and unnecessary problem between him and Emma.
Another example of coddling Emma occurs in her not being told about being an heiress. Perhaps something like that should not have been hidden from Emma, not wait until she turns 25 years old to clue her in.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Perhaps the sentence "Susan and Seth turned when they heard her footsteps" should read Susan and Seth turned when they heard Emma's footsteps. Would personalize who the footsteps belong to.
In the sentence "and then asked Susan can we borrow the canoe today" not sure the word "then" is necessary. The sentence tends to read clearer without that word included.
Susan, Seth and others coddle Emma constantly as if she is a mere child unable to do much for herself.
Even she admits feeling that way when she said, "I feel like I'm being treated with kid gloves, like I'm a child."
Perhaps they need to lighten up and back off the coddling a mite to allow Emma's character some room to mature. Sometimes, she comes across a tad stagnant.
Seth never did answer how he thinks about Emma, not until the storyline, and Ronnie's accusations, forced him to. This hesitation on Seth's part created a major and unnecessary problem between him and Emma.
Another example of coddling Emma occurs in her not being told about being an heiress. Perhaps something like that should not have been hidden from Emma, not wait until she turns 25 years old to clue her in.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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I corrected the sentence. It does read better. Legally they couldn't tell Emma because of the way the will was stated. Thank you for the kind and detailed review.
Comment from forestport12
Still juicing the story up with the idea of how he needs to get after her with marriage? I'm seeing a touch of Hemingway in the WAY you used the dialogue without tags, empty white pages, which make us feel as though we are swept up in the moment. You're dialogue reminded me of what a creative writing teacher once asked the class. "Have you ever noticed when having a discussion with someone, most of your dialogue are not complete sentences? keeping it real. Also from your notes, I get that you must be working off a firm outline. What's your take on that? Do you feel it gives your chapters more pop and power?
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Still juicing the story up with the idea of how he needs to get after her with marriage? I'm seeing a touch of Hemingway in the WAY you used the dialogue without tags, empty white pages, which make us feel as though we are swept up in the moment. You're dialogue reminded me of what a creative writing teacher once asked the class. "Have you ever noticed when having a discussion with someone, most of your dialogue are not complete sentences? keeping it real. Also from your notes, I get that you must be working off a firm outline. What's your take on that? Do you feel it gives your chapters more pop and power?
Comment Written 28-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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I do. I schedule everything out. I'm ADD and it's one of the aids, I've learned to use over time, or I'd never get anything completed. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Goodness knows how I missed last weeks chapter, but I've read it now and caught up. When I read the end of the last chapter, I knew I didn't remember it. Sorry, Barb. And I'm out of 6s now. This was a brilliant chapter, and handled very well. I think the wedding will be sooner than Emma thought! Lol. I'm looking forward to that. Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Goodness knows how I missed last weeks chapter, but I've read it now and caught up. When I read the end of the last chapter, I knew I didn't remember it. Sorry, Barb. And I'm out of 6s now. This was a brilliant chapter, and handled very well. I think the wedding will be sooner than Emma thought! Lol. I'm looking forward to that. Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I understand how things happen.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very nicely written. I like that they FINALLY KISSED!! I've been waiting on that. Lol. I really do like Seth. He's so level headed and a thinker. Ronnie Calhoun, on the other hand, makes me want to drop kick him. Enjoyed this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Very nicely written. I like that they FINALLY KISSED!! I've been waiting on that. Lol. I really do like Seth. He's so level headed and a thinker. Ronnie Calhoun, on the other hand, makes me want to drop kick him. Enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Seth handles Ronnie with a cool head and very reasonable. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Barry Penfold
I must say I particularly like your conversations throughout this chapter. Provides insight into the characters and keeps the story moving along
nicely. Look forward to the next part of the Chapter. Have a great day and keep well.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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I must say I particularly like your conversations throughout this chapter. Provides insight into the characters and keeps the story moving along
nicely. Look forward to the next part of the Chapter. Have a great day and keep well.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from w.j.debi
Seth and Emma have had a lot of tribulation and have grown close in a short amount of time. It's as if they are destined to be together to support and watch out for each other. Family and friends agree. A wedding should be planned soon. :)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Seth and Emma have had a lot of tribulation and have grown close in a short amount of time. It's as if they are destined to be together to support and watch out for each other. Family and friends agree. A wedding should be planned soon. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Since I only have a few chapters left. I think we can manage a wedding being planned. HMMM
Comment from lyenochka
Well, you created some tension and suspense with Ronnie Calhoun trying to break up Emma's relationship with Seth by blurting out the inheritance news. It's good that Seth took this time of false accusation to finally profess his love for Emma! Should be easy to propose now!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Well, you created some tension and suspense with Ronnie Calhoun trying to break up Emma's relationship with Seth by blurting out the inheritance news. It's good that Seth took this time of false accusation to finally profess his love for Emma! Should be easy to propose now!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
