Stray Goat On A Risky Hill
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Stray Goat On A Risky Hill"part One
12 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Thank you for sharing this chapter in your story. I love the character development and the use of dialogue to move the story forward. Great - I will fan you so I can follow this one,
~Mustang~
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Hi there,
Thank you for sharing this chapter in your story. I love the character development and the use of dialogue to move the story forward. Great - I will fan you so I can follow this one,
~Mustang~
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you. I also would like to be there for ll your writing!
Comment from Esther Brown
I read the 3rd chapter first...loved it. Now I need to go back to the beginning.
I saw one type Don;'t. Easy fix.
Will go read more as soon as time allows. I didn't get lost and think you have interesting characters.
Esther
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I read the 3rd chapter first...loved it. Now I need to go back to the beginning.
I saw one type Don;'t. Easy fix.
Will go read more as soon as time allows. I didn't get lost and think you have interesting characters.
Esther
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I will repost Chapter One soon, as the site seems to have lost it. I saved a rough draft I can use,
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was a strong chapter. The characters are well developed. The dialogue adds so much to the story. I enjoyed the interactions between them. The gradual unfolding of the plot kept me engaged. Thought the Ray Curtis surprise was a nice twist
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I thought this was a strong chapter. The characters are well developed. The dialogue adds so much to the story. I enjoyed the interactions between them. The gradual unfolding of the plot kept me engaged. Thought the Ray Curtis surprise was a nice twist
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you. I hope to have more glimpses of the past in future chapters.
Comment from nomi338
There is no replacing the knowledge of old heads. We know and remember useful things that many youngsters have never even bothered to consider as useful. But when we amaze them with our depth of skillful knowledge, they are well, amazed.
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There is no replacing the knowledge of old heads. We know and remember useful things that many youngsters have never even bothered to consider as useful. But when we amaze them with our depth of skillful knowledge, they are well, amazed.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
Comment from lyenochka
I like your characters, especially Wendigo, who apparently can't carry a tune. Yet dear old Curtis was able to come up with the tune, probably better than Google could. Great job with this.
So is the character's name Anna Karena and she changed it to Karenina?
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I like your characters, especially Wendigo, who apparently can't carry a tune. Yet dear old Curtis was able to come up with the tune, probably better than Google could. Great job with this.
So is the character's name Anna Karena and she changed it to Karenina?
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an interesting addition to your story. Especially the character development is well-executed, and the different people bounce off each other well. kay
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is an interesting addition to your story. Especially the character development is well-executed, and the different people bounce off each other well. kay
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much! If I could only get all three chapters posted!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I like this a lot. I love libraries. How do you get this music onto your response? This would be neat to do. You write well, and I will read as long as you write. Unless you get weird and write about the long-held secret of elves hiding in panty-hose. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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I like this a lot. I love libraries. How do you get this music onto your response? This would be neat to do. You write well, and I will read as long as you write. Unless you get weird and write about the long-held secret of elves hiding in panty-hose. :-) Karen
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Did you men how to het music onto your page in which you post writing? Let me know. If so, I'll try to give you the process. If I could do it, you can. Shelley Kaye first taught me.
Comment from karenina
Wowzers, Jim. It's such an honor to see you've used my name (as promised!) in part three of your story!
It's almost eerie as I love Jimmy Dorsey, enjoy mysteries, and would most certainly have been a reporter if I didn't become an RN!
I wanted to leave you six stars, but due to some ongoing posting problems I found my review for your previous chapter that posted twice, beginning with: "this chapter is already posted" sitting in this review box...and once a five, even though I deleted that review, the system wouldn't let me move the new review up to a six!
I'm enjoying the story, and I'm so honored "Karenina" is a character!
Thanks for warming my heart, my friend.
I hope Tom helps you get the posting/review situation straightened out!
Thanks again!
Karenina
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Wowzers, Jim. It's such an honor to see you've used my name (as promised!) in part three of your story!
It's almost eerie as I love Jimmy Dorsey, enjoy mysteries, and would most certainly have been a reporter if I didn't become an RN!
I wanted to leave you six stars, but due to some ongoing posting problems I found my review for your previous chapter that posted twice, beginning with: "this chapter is already posted" sitting in this review box...and once a five, even though I deleted that review, the system wouldn't let me move the new review up to a six!
I'm enjoying the story, and I'm so honored "Karenina" is a character!
Thanks for warming my heart, my friend.
I hope Tom helps you get the posting/review situation straightened out!
Thanks again!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
An exciting story. Very mystical, but down to earth at the same time. There's a kidnapping that's occurred, but when is the question. Very good job of mixing description with dialogue.
Take care,
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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An exciting story. Very mystical, but down to earth at the same time. There's a kidnapping that's occurred, but when is the question. Very good job of mixing description with dialogue.
Take care,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, my second favorite Rhonda!
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Too sweet!!
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Your words are too sweet!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very interesting and creative. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Bradbury pondered a moment and said, "I believe I (you can put a period after 'moment' and omit 'and said' for a tighter read)
"Gentlemen" he said, (comma after, 'Gentlemen,")
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Very interesting and creative. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Bradbury pondered a moment and said, "I believe I (you can put a period after 'moment' and omit 'and said' for a tighter read)
"Gentlemen" he said, (comma after, 'Gentlemen,")
Bradbury, "therefore, the possibility of goats (Therefore)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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I wish I could hire you for pay! How can I ever write a mystery tale and miss all these things? Thank You!
