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Comment from jmdg1954
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Okay. You got me. I couldn't believe what I read-

spotted brown-eyed deer
froze in a shocked wide-eyed stare--
bbq dinner

Then I read what a lowku 5-7-5 poem is... phew!

Now I can say congrats to a perfect lowku entry!

Good luck in the contest. This is a winner!
John

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    hehehe sure hope so! thank you john! :-)
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Awww - poor Bambi!!
Thank you for sharing your contest entry for this poetry contest. The 5-7-5 format is always a difficult one, but you nailed it.
I wish you well in the contest,
~MP~

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    cool! thank you patty :-)
Comment from Janet Foor
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Great disclaimer! Nicely done. Good pictures to add to the 5-7-5 lowku poetic form.

Well done and good luck in the writing prompt.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    hehehe thank you janet :-)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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So, we are looking for some BBQ version perhaps and the deer that is looking thinks he's in for a shocking surprise. The deer will hide until the day of hunting is over.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    lol! thank you rosemary :-)
Comment from Kaiku
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Well, maybe this could be considered disgustingly good based on one['s viewpoint. Nice to know that no injuries or deaths were reported. Good humor that left a bit of a BBQ taste in my mouth.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    hahaha!! thank you kaiku :-)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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HAHAHAHAHA. These lowku's are hilarious, though I do feel a little guilty liking a few of them. They were quite raunchy and uncouth. (Yours, not at all. Yours was just funny.) Good luck in the contest with it. xo

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    hehehe thank you rachelle :-)
reply by Rachelle Allen on 15-Jan-2024
    My pleasure, um, DEAR!!! hahahaha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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From life to the plate in just a few words and this tragedy continues. Yes you guessed it, I don't eat meat, a fun post with a touch of reality, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    lol thank you dolly :-)
Comment from BenThrone
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Man, I hate it when the deer watch me eat too--how rude, right?! How can I enjoy some sizzling venison hot off the grill when they're all up in my grill? Of course I got the venison in the first because another deer got caught up in my car's grill, so I guess I had it coming.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    LOL!! thank you ben :-)
Comment from Sugarray77
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You have mastered the art of presenting a 'gross and disgusting' poem... turning Bambi into steak. I know this is an unusual 5-7-5 format, but you did a great job with it. I wish you luck.

Melissa

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    hehehe thank you ray :-)
Comment from Navada
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Oh deer!!! I'm not a vegetarian, but the thought of shooting and eating meat is something I struggle with. I'm very much a supermarket shopper. :)

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    lol! me too!! thank you navada! :-)