Family is Family
My family2 total reviews
Comment from Wendyanne
This is quite a good start to a poem about family but I think you need to say more about what family means to you. In the first stanza I think you meant to say "the world" not "to world". Good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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This is quite a good start to a poem about family but I think you need to say more about what family means to you. In the first stanza I think you meant to say "the world" not "to world". Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Okay, I did what you suggested. Thank you for your review! Is it better now for a five star rating? Please revise it.
Comment from Austin Yu
Family is truly everything, as they bring out the best in you, and provide plenty of encouragement for you to live on with hope and prosperity. However, I do see a lot of repetition, as well as mispronounced words, like "persons" instead of "people." Good luck, still an amazing message
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Family is truly everything, as they bring out the best in you, and provide plenty of encouragement for you to live on with hope and prosperity. However, I do see a lot of repetition, as well as mispronounced words, like "persons" instead of "people." Good luck, still an amazing message
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you! I have made the changes. Is it now good enough for five stars rating? Please revise it. Thank you for your review!
