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Back from the Brink

For Nhia - a true inspiration

31 total reviews 
Comment from Douglas Goff
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I can see why this win! Wonderful story.

I liked this descriptive part:
She was the clever mistress of a quick comeback,

Kids can show great kindness when they have a mind to.

Most enjoyable!
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 Comment Written 27-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much, Douglas! This was a really special memory. :)
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Congratulations on your win. This was a very moving story. I am a retired secondary teacher here in the states. I have seen situations (not as dramatic as yours) that have given me hope for the future, but many times these students change when immerse themselves in the real world.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
    Thank you.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is a story that demonstrates the power and determination of the human spirit. Thank you for telling such an inspirational and powerful story that proves the impossible can be achieved if you believe in yourself. Congratulations on your well deserved win,

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much for your lovely words! xx
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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That's beautiful and congratulations for winning the contest! And what a story of recovery for this young woman amazing really, such determination. It's rare in this world! I see no issues with grammar Spelling subject matter You've got a nice piece of magic here. Have a great night!

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much! xx
Comment from Teri7
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This is a wonderful story poem you have penned about this great miracle! You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. If people could only understand that miracles do still happen in this day and age! Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much, Teri! xx
reply by Teri7 on 23-Nov-2023
    You are so welcome! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from Janet Foor
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"Bach From the Brink " is a powerful story poem. It was detailed and emotional, encouraging and inspiring.
There should be more gifted teachers like you.
Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much, Janet! I appreciate your kind words and the very generous six stars! :)
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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I like the following sentence, it opens up for what comes next.

Similarly
Despite her sassy impertinence, I liked her.

This leads to your telling her life strove, struggling to overdone her painful operations to start learning to talk and talk.

Thanks for sharing this story


No-one believed that she would survive.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you!
Comment from Micahlshae
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Story of triumph! It depicts overcoming adversity and defying odds!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thanks
Comment from BenThrone
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One of the great privileges of teaching is meeting those students who change others for the better; clearly this remarkable young woman falls into this category. I like how you keep this rooted in details. The use of "bitumen" for example added a layer of detail without being merely descriptive ("show don't tell" as they say). Instead it anchored the reader into a specificity of texture, sight, and smell. This is why diction is so important, and words have to be respected in all theirs shades of meaning, not as things to be swapped in and out interchangeably; just as a composer views each individual note, as expressed by each instrument, as related but unique entities.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    What a beautifully-expressed review - thank you so much! xx
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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What an amazing story-like poem. God must have been with this girl from the very start. It was not her time to pass so He let her live. How beautiful it was to hear your inter-action as a teacher.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much, Rosemary! It's a challenging vocation at times, but at other times such as these, it's a real blessing.