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The Makeover

A WITSEC Dribble Flash

45 total reviews 
Comment from zanni
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Glad there was the info about WITSEC as the story made more sense. The use of a list was very effective in this context. Humdinger of a last line- did not see that coming.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Zanni. I appreciate the good review.

    John
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Oh, my freakin gawd!!! At that point, you've EARNED your freedom! Usually, I can guess the ending to a flash piece, but this one punched me square in the jaw. Great misdirect!! No wonder it won. xo

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Rachelle, thank you for this outstanding review.
    I very much am in appreciation.
    John
reply by Rachelle Allen on 28-Oct-2023
    My pleasure!
Comment from Annmuma
Exceptional
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What a perfect 50 word dribble! Congratulations on your well-deserved win. Creative, well illustrated and a complete story in so few words. I am more than impressed! ann

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Ann. You made my day with this review.

    Your words mean so much, I appreciate them and the stars are the frosting on my cake!
    John
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Congratulations on your contest winner! I think about anyone who reads this will be able to relate to the character as we've all met someone similar. LOL. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Ric. Thank you for this great review.

    John
Comment from Navada
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Ha! I enjoyed this response to the prompt. I really like it when there's an effective twist in the final line, particularly when it's funny. Congratulations on your win and thanks for the share.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Thank you so much for this outstanding review and congratulatory wishes.
    John
Comment from Contests

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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023

Comment from Father Flaps
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Wow, John! That's a huge change in your appearance. Now if you can just lick that urge to pee standing up, you'll be free and clear.
Terrific entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction contest. Not an easy thing to do, but you've written it in 48 words! (I believe a hyphenated word, like "fifty-two", counts as one word.)
Good Luck in the contest! This could be a winner,
Cheers,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Kimbob.
    I always appreciate your stopping to read and comment.
    John
Comment from Don De Leon
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What can I say? Perfect build-up, perfect payoff. Simple, hilarious, even a bit creepy, but when you can package all that into 50 words, you've done something right.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
    Wow. Thank you, Don.
    I appreciate your stopping by.
    John
Comment from karenina
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Oh my gosh! I had to read that last line three times! I suppose this would be quite possible, if not extremely expensive...

Your humor with regard to WITSEC changing a man to a woman--but leaving a few problems unresolved is hysterical...

A Dribble Flash that's sure to elicit howls of laughter!

Karenina

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
    This one was fun to write and I?m glad you stopped over to read and review.

    Thank you?
    John
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is really funny with a great last line. That was a super makeover that would fool even the most perceptive mama. You also found the perfect picture of a cute girl with a thoughtful look.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
    Carol, thank you so much for reading and sharing with me?

    Cheers,
    John