Guided by Faith
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This chapter was supercharged with emotion. Not only is the rapid movement of plot, but we get a chance to see Seth and Emma's relationship deepen. They still aren't admitting girlfriend/boyfriend stays, but their mutual affection and need is growing beautifully.
This chapter had depth and complexity and was a joy to read.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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This chapter was supercharged with emotion. Not only is the rapid movement of plot, but we get a chance to see Seth and Emma's relationship deepen. They still aren't admitting girlfriend/boyfriend stays, but their mutual affection and need is growing beautifully.
This chapter had depth and complexity and was a joy to read.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment Written 13-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Emma is a very strong-willed character; you can feel it. I love the way you made her feel so rounded. There is something off with these people, and it makes the reader want to know more.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Emma is a very strong-willed character; you can feel it. I love the way you made her feel so rounded. There is something off with these people, and it makes the reader want to know more.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind support.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Emma just doesn't have much good luck, except for Seth. She always seems to be in the right place at the wrong time. She is very lucky to have Seth and Ace.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Emma just doesn't have much good luck, except for Seth. She always seems to be in the right place at the wrong time. She is very lucky to have Seth and Ace.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Who knew a hug like that would make a difference in the reporting. And the nurse assumed that Seth was Emma's boyfriend! And she's being in his care is also going to make it hard to keep it just a "friendship." Hope they can keep it clear. Or sometime soon, they will have to brave the small town rumors and accept that they really love each other.
Suggestion:
he was doing over eighty." (80) Since it was 40 MPH, I wondered if the number should be numerals. In the APA, any number over ten would be numbers.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Who knew a hug like that would make a difference in the reporting. And the nurse assumed that Seth was Emma's boyfriend! And she's being in his care is also going to make it hard to keep it just a "friendship." Hope they can keep it clear. Or sometime soon, they will have to brave the small town rumors and accept that they really love each other.
Suggestion:
he was doing over eighty." (80) Since it was 40 MPH, I wondered if the number should be numerals. In the APA, any number over ten would be numbers.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the catch and you are correct. I have made the change. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a detailed chapter, with a surprising twist in the storyline, a car accident. Perhaps it is a little too detailed relative to the events. Also, I would have liked to read more vivacity concerning Emma's reactions, it fell a bit flat. kay
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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This is a detailed chapter, with a surprising twist in the storyline, a car accident. Perhaps it is a little too detailed relative to the events. Also, I would have liked to read more vivacity concerning Emma's reactions, it fell a bit flat. kay
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, the wreck is out of the way, Emma is out of the hospital, and now, her and Seth can start some rumors. But of course, as we all know, people don't have to do anything wrong to send tongues wagging. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Well, the wreck is out of the way, Emma is out of the hospital, and now, her and Seth can start some rumors. But of course, as we all know, people don't have to do anything wrong to send tongues wagging. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
This is a very good chapter, and you handled the accident very well by giving the important details, but not dwelling on the nature of it with unnecessary information about every sordid detail, like the news media tends to do.
It is nice to see Emma appreciate Seth's being there and accepting his help. It was interesting to see some of the details that police have to be aware of in this kind of situation, like Seth not being able to take the deposition because he and Emma had shared a hug.
You also did a good job with the hospital scene, and Seth trying to get Emma to think of pleasant things. It will be interesting to see how the arrangements between Seth and Emma go. I thought you did a great job with some difficult material to describe.
Once small thing:
"She called and said, she was taking Florence Hawkins [no comma; it isn't direct address]
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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This is a very good chapter, and you handled the accident very well by giving the important details, but not dwelling on the nature of it with unnecessary information about every sordid detail, like the news media tends to do.
It is nice to see Emma appreciate Seth's being there and accepting his help. It was interesting to see some of the details that police have to be aware of in this kind of situation, like Seth not being able to take the deposition because he and Emma had shared a hug.
You also did a good job with the hospital scene, and Seth trying to get Emma to think of pleasant things. It will be interesting to see how the arrangements between Seth and Emma go. I thought you did a great job with some difficult material to describe.
Once small thing:
"She called and said, she was taking Florence Hawkins [no comma; it isn't direct address]
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jay Squires
It appears they will "have some teeth" in making a conviction stick, regardless of the position of power that the boy's father is in. As with Trump, no one is above the law. But there is still the person that tried to grap her when she was in the nursery. He wasn't Eliot was he?
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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It appears they will "have some teeth" in making a conviction stick, regardless of the position of power that the boy's father is in. As with Trump, no one is above the law. But there is still the person that tried to grap her when she was in the nursery. He wasn't Eliot was he?
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Hunter Biden seems to be above the law.
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As with anyone, really, backed by political power -- because of the political embarrassment it might cause.
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True, but it's not right, what he and his family are allowed to get by with.
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent job raising the concern about Emma. It starts out as a slight doubt at her being late and then escalates by degrees. Sure, she is fine. Let the doctors check please.
So, even the hospital staff thinks that Seth and Emma are boyfriend-girlfriend. It may be inevitable, but they have to discover it for themselves. Great job putting them together so frequently, yet so naturally. You've got to love small towns. LOL
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Excellent job raising the concern about Emma. It starts out as a slight doubt at her being late and then escalates by degrees. Sure, she is fine. Let the doctors check please.
So, even the hospital staff thinks that Seth and Emma are boyfriend-girlfriend. It may be inevitable, but they have to discover it for themselves. Great job putting them together so frequently, yet so naturally. You've got to love small towns. LOL
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. Emma makes sure she keeps the friend boundary between her and Seth. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. Emma makes sure she keeps the friend boundary between her and Seth. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind reivew.
