Guided by Faith
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, Seth almost messed things up, didn't he? What a mean thing to say, but then he was mentally exhausted and his mind confused by Peggy. He made it up in the end. Good thing!
Love the dialogue and character development. Looking forward to the rest of the chapter.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
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Wow, Seth almost messed things up, didn't he? What a mean thing to say, but then he was mentally exhausted and his mind confused by Peggy. He made it up in the end. Good thing!
Love the dialogue and character development. Looking forward to the rest of the chapter.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 15-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
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Yes, Seth messed up and he's trying to make amends. Thank you for the kind review.
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You know, adding that element really added to the layers of your story. For sure, people make mistakes, and how they resolve them helps point out their characters. I loved it!
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Thank you. I needed to hear that. I took some hits in the reviews over it.
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You?ve got to be kidding me! Everything isn?t always roses. Sometimes people are weary and snap, even at the people they love. It made the story more authentic.
Comment from Pam (respa)
This is an excellent chapter, barbara. You did a good job with all of the details of quite a few characters and the situations they were in. It flowed smoothly and logically from scene to scene.
I couldn't help but think if Emma was a bit older and more experienced with dating and felt comfortable around Seth, it would have had a different tone, but he has to be careful because she is more vulnerable right now so he does the right thing.
In addition, he doesn't give in to her wanting to move. Instead he takes small steps, like asking her if he can sit and talk, then proceeds to tell her what he has been through in a short period of time. It was a sad story about the person who died from an overdose.
On the other hand, the reaction of Marc's father wasn't what his son needed at the time. Hopefully, they can both learn from it.
I'm glad the ending was more positive and Emma even agreed to go on a Harley!!
One thing to consider:
"After I assured the mayor, everything was above board and returned to my office,
[no comma after mayor because the whole clause through office is the subject of the sentence.
You could end the sentence after office and then finish with the rest as a new sentence.]
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023
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This is an excellent chapter, barbara. You did a good job with all of the details of quite a few characters and the situations they were in. It flowed smoothly and logically from scene to scene.
I couldn't help but think if Emma was a bit older and more experienced with dating and felt comfortable around Seth, it would have had a different tone, but he has to be careful because she is more vulnerable right now so he does the right thing.
In addition, he doesn't give in to her wanting to move. Instead he takes small steps, like asking her if he can sit and talk, then proceeds to tell her what he has been through in a short period of time. It was a sad story about the person who died from an overdose.
On the other hand, the reaction of Marc's father wasn't what his son needed at the time. Hopefully, they can both learn from it.
I'm glad the ending was more positive and Emma even agreed to go on a Harley!!
One thing to consider:
"After I assured the mayor, everything was above board and returned to my office,
[no comma after mayor because the whole clause through office is the subject of the sentence.
You could end the sentence after office and then finish with the rest as a new sentence.]
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023
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I made the correction. It does read better. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, and I am glad the suggestion was helpful.
Comment from Ulla
Ah, So progress is in the air. They do seem to be misunderstanding each other all the time. Now we'll see how the meat is going.
She turned, but(made) no eye contact.
I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Ah, So progress is in the air. They do seem to be misunderstanding each other all the time. Now we'll see how the meat is going.
She turned, but(made) no eye contact.
I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, they are struggling with this relationship.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh things are heating up but there was quite a bit of misunderstanding on both their sides. The good thing about their relationship (and all your other couples in your books) is that they talk out their issues and come to an understanding. Hope the townsfolk can keep George and his son and Peggy from ruining this blossoming romance!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Oh things are heating up but there was quite a bit of misunderstanding on both their sides. The good thing about their relationship (and all your other couples in your books) is that they talk out their issues and come to an understanding. Hope the townsfolk can keep George and his son and Peggy from ruining this blossoming romance!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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We'll wait and see about these people. Thank you for the kind review. Isn't talking things out the key to a happy relationship/marriage???
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That's the best way but it really requires good role models of that. I didn't see that in my parents. But thankfully, my husband does like talking!
Comment from nomi338
Like Seth, I in the past have made an off hand remark that was misinterpreted, or misunderstood and I had to spend much time trying to get across my true meaning. Sometimes I was successful, sometime I was not. It can be very uncomfortable trying to recover from such an incident.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Like Seth, I in the past have made an off hand remark that was misinterpreted, or misunderstood and I had to spend much time trying to get across my true meaning. Sometimes I was successful, sometime I was not. It can be very uncomfortable trying to recover from such an incident.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Seth struggling with is, but I feel Emma will evidentially forgive him. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Loretta Bigg
This is interesting. there are good characters and they are easy to see. My main concern here is that there is a lot of dialogue which would be well suited to a theatrical piece, and some of the dialogue isn't necessary, like, "Thank you I am fine," kind of stuff. You could show that instead of using dialogue. I as a reader am hungry for action and movement.
I am not say get rid of all dialogue, I mean just intersperse it with more things happening, maybe 5 lines of dialogue and then a small action. They gaze at each other, perhaps.
Anyway it's your piece and this is just a suggestion. If it doesn't interest you to write like that, it's completely up to you. I really liked the characters and liked the plot. I am just hungry for more. Thanks for reading.
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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This is interesting. there are good characters and they are easy to see. My main concern here is that there is a lot of dialogue which would be well suited to a theatrical piece, and some of the dialogue isn't necessary, like, "Thank you I am fine," kind of stuff. You could show that instead of using dialogue. I as a reader am hungry for action and movement.
I am not say get rid of all dialogue, I mean just intersperse it with more things happening, maybe 5 lines of dialogue and then a small action. They gaze at each other, perhaps.
Anyway it's your piece and this is just a suggestion. If it doesn't interest you to write like that, it's completely up to you. I really liked the characters and liked the plot. I am just hungry for more. Thanks for reading.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the dropping by and leaving this kind review.
I have been taught in writing to tell, not show, so I will continue to be heavy on dialogue. My editors and publishers don't have a problem with it. I'm sorry it's not your style of writing, but that's why we have so many different styles.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm really enjoying your story. I was a little surprised at Emma reaction to the comment Seth made. Maybe it was a little out of line, but it sounded like typical male teasing. I'm sure he wasn't trying to insinuate anything. Of course he was in a bad mood and maybe it irritated him that she wanted him to take his shirt off and was acting like he wasn't smart enough to keep from getting burned again. I guess it would depend on his tone when he said it.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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I'm really enjoying your story. I was a little surprised at Emma reaction to the comment Seth made. Maybe it was a little out of line, but it sounded like typical male teasing. I'm sure he wasn't trying to insinuate anything. Of course he was in a bad mood and maybe it irritated him that she wanted him to take his shirt off and was acting like he wasn't smart enough to keep from getting burned again. I guess it would depend on his tone when he said it.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Seth wasn't teasing. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
I thought his rude comment was a bit out of character but men will be men and I still really enjoyed the chapter.
Again, the characters are great and are lining up for a final confrontation I believe Starting to think maybe Peggy is a psycho.
Great read.
D
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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I thought his rude comment was a bit out of character but men will be men and I still really enjoyed the chapter.
Again, the characters are great and are lining up for a final confrontation I believe Starting to think maybe Peggy is a psycho.
Great read.
D
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Peggy is weird that's for sure. Seth had a hard day and took it out on Emma. Thank you for the kind review.
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They are starting to act like boyfriend girlfriend. Nice work.
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Comment from estory
The romance dance continues to weave in and out and we see Seth being very deferential to Emma and Emma kind of still keeping her distance, trying to maintain her independence. I liked how you handled the scene where she goes after the cat and he surprises her and she falls into his arms. Nice humorous moment in the story that still captures the gist of their attraction for each other. estory
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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The romance dance continues to weave in and out and we see Seth being very deferential to Emma and Emma kind of still keeping her distance, trying to maintain her independence. I liked how you handled the scene where she goes after the cat and he surprises her and she falls into his arms. Nice humorous moment in the story that still captures the gist of their attraction for each other. estory
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think Emma has to lighten up a bit, she's not acting like a grown woman. She cried too much instead of using that spark she has and giving him the slapping most women would have given him. But Seth really wouldn't hurt her, and she should realise that after all he's done for her. I think she should stop worrying about his sunburn, especially after what he said, she'll never be able to treat it again, anyway. Not after this. Now she has agreed to go into town with him for something to eat, and Peggy is bound to see them together. What will happen then? I can't wait to find out! Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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I think Emma has to lighten up a bit, she's not acting like a grown woman. She cried too much instead of using that spark she has and giving him the slapping most women would have given him. But Seth really wouldn't hurt her, and she should realise that after all he's done for her. I think she should stop worrying about his sunburn, especially after what he said, she'll never be able to treat it again, anyway. Not after this. Now she has agreed to go into town with him for something to eat, and Peggy is bound to see them together. What will happen then? I can't wait to find out! Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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She will realize how wrong she is, but will take a day. More about Emma will come out in next weeks episode. Thank you for the kind review.
