Guided by Faith
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Comment from judiverse
Emma does seem to attract trouble, this time the drunk who's making advances. Seth, of course, is there to protect her. It's too bad he can't catch the person in the Crown Vic who's been following her. The dogs are so cute! I enjoy them both. I'm not sure about that sandwich. Maybe it tastes better than it sounds. I'd like to see Emma being a little less dependent. She has a lot going for her, and I think hers and Seth's relationship could move along without her constantly being in some kind of trouble. If someone is stalking her and perhaps makes some real threats against her, that might work better. This is still excellent writing. Just my thoughts. judi
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Emma does seem to attract trouble, this time the drunk who's making advances. Seth, of course, is there to protect her. It's too bad he can't catch the person in the Crown Vic who's been following her. The dogs are so cute! I enjoy them both. I'm not sure about that sandwich. Maybe it tastes better than it sounds. I'd like to see Emma being a little less dependent. She has a lot going for her, and I think hers and Seth's relationship could move along without her constantly being in some kind of trouble. If someone is stalking her and perhaps makes some real threats against her, that might work better. This is still excellent writing. Just my thoughts. judi
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Emma, later, will show how strong she can really be. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I'm glad you'll be showing that side of Emma. judi
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Uh oh, creepy ending!! just as we thought Emma was safe.
I love the interaction between Seth and Emma. You can tell they are developing a relationship they both enjoy, well they and their dogs.
The drunken language sounds authentic to me, so good job there.
As a former waitress, I can relate to Emma, though the worst sexual harassment I ever had came from a woman. Go figure!!
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Uh oh, creepy ending!! just as we thought Emma was safe.
I love the interaction between Seth and Emma. You can tell they are developing a relationship they both enjoy, well they and their dogs.
The drunken language sounds authentic to me, so good job there.
As a former waitress, I can relate to Emma, though the worst sexual harassment I ever had came from a woman. Go figure!!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you for sharing and the kind review. Women can be an interesting lot.
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Too true!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
Hope you had a Happy Fourth too, barbara. Great choice of artwork and the chapter was good.
I wouldn't know how to write dialogue for drunk, but I think you did it well. Just enough to get the idea across.
It's too bad there has to be people like the guy in your story, and in real life, too. I think Emma made the right decision about him, and hopefully, he won't come back.
You did a good job with the discussion about the sandwich, and Seth and Ray volunteering to test the new sandwich. It seems like it was a success. Emma's answer to Ray about Seth being a good guy was interesting. They all enjoyed the new creation.
I like how Seth goes over to Emma's when she's practicing her guitar and doesn't mind that Seth is there. It's a shame the guy in the Crown Vic keeps showing up. He keeps being very mysterious.
One little thing about the door being locked. Was it just on the outside? A couple was still eating, and Emma said she had locked the door.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Hope you had a Happy Fourth too, barbara. Great choice of artwork and the chapter was good.
I wouldn't know how to write dialogue for drunk, but I think you did it well. Just enough to get the idea across.
It's too bad there has to be people like the guy in your story, and in real life, too. I think Emma made the right decision about him, and hopefully, he won't come back.
You did a good job with the discussion about the sandwich, and Seth and Ray volunteering to test the new sandwich. It seems like it was a success. Emma's answer to Ray about Seth being a good guy was interesting. They all enjoyed the new creation.
I like how Seth goes over to Emma's when she's practicing her guitar and doesn't mind that Seth is there. It's a shame the guy in the Crown Vic keeps showing up. He keeps being very mysterious.
One little thing about the door being locked. Was it just on the outside? A couple was still eating, and Emma said she had locked the door.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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The couple left. I need to make that clearer. You're the second person to comment on it. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, and I am glad the comment was helpful. I guess you have two eagle-eyed reviewers😊
Comment from Sanku
That is a whopping number of of sexual harassment ! Thanks for the video...You have handled the inebriated fellow's dialogue very well.
Emma and Seth are slowly inching towards each other ...
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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That is a whopping number of of sexual harassment ! Thanks for the video...You have handled the inebriated fellow's dialogue very well.
Emma and Seth are slowly inching towards each other ...
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Of course charges should have been pressed by Emma. All failing to do so will achieve is more undesired advances. Or perhaps that is what Emma wants?
If "fur ball" is used to mean a pet believe it should be furball.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Of course charges should have been pressed by Emma. All failing to do so will achieve is more undesired advances. Or perhaps that is what Emma wants?
If "fur ball" is used to mean a pet believe it should be furball.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you for will consider that.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. Emma and Seth keep inching forward. The good thing for me is that it keeps me reading to see the next step in that relationship. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. Emma and Seth keep inching forward. The good thing for me is that it keeps me reading to see the next step in that relationship. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I enjoyed this chapter. They say a good romantic relationship starts with being good friends, and it looks like these two are taking it slow and easy, getting to know each other well before they make a committment.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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I enjoyed this chapter. They say a good romantic relationship starts with being good friends, and it looks like these two are taking it slow and easy, getting to know each other well before they make a committment.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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I agree. Thank you for the understanding.
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You are welcome, Barbara
Comment from Douglas Goff
I know it feels like we are 'tit for tatting' sixes but I really like the character development in your story.
It is a great tale with some suspense building and has very interesting secondary characters as well.
Great job.
D
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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I know it feels like we are 'tit for tatting' sixes but I really like the character development in your story.
It is a great tale with some suspense building and has very interesting secondary characters as well.
Great job.
D
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I really like your novel. I'm a huge fan of Greg. You're a great writer.
Comment from Loretta Bigg
I like your romance novel. It's interesting. My only suggestion is to have more action intertwined with your dialogue. It's hard to picture the characters when I can't see them doing anything. PS That sandwich sounds delicious.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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I like your romance novel. It's interesting. My only suggestion is to have more action intertwined with your dialogue. It's hard to picture the characters when I can't see them doing anything. PS That sandwich sounds delicious.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is another engaging chapter and I think the drunken incident is well handled (dialogue a little forced but credible). Seth's constant concern for Emma is well conveyed and, for me, it creates tension in the story because she seems so vulnerable and perhaps a little too forgiving. But your characterization, Barbara, is always skilfully done and enjoyable. Thanks for sharing Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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This is another engaging chapter and I think the drunken incident is well handled (dialogue a little forced but credible). Seth's constant concern for Emma is well conveyed and, for me, it creates tension in the story because she seems so vulnerable and perhaps a little too forgiving. But your characterization, Barbara, is always skilfully done and enjoyable. Thanks for sharing Debbie
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
