Urban Garden Haiku
contest entry10 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
We have a metal bird feeder hanger just like yours in our backyard, and the sparrows and finches are always battling for a toehold. They love sunflower seeds.
I especially love this,
"starlings storm feeder"
I would guess you have to inspect your laundry for stains and feathers after such a mob has passed through.
Nicely penned for the contest! Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Hi Debra,
We have a metal bird feeder hanger just like yours in our backyard, and the sparrows and finches are always battling for a toehold. They love sunflower seeds.
I especially love this,
"starlings storm feeder"
I would guess you have to inspect your laundry for stains and feathers after such a mob has passed through.
Nicely penned for the contest! Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Hi Kimbob :)
Thank you for your kind feedback!
Hope to be back on site 'properly' in a week or two :)
Stay well, Debra x
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Urban Garden, has the proper formatting and captures the scene displayed well. The aggressive profile of the starlings makes me wonder about the safety of your laundry from bird droppings. : )
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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This haiku, Urban Garden, has the proper formatting and captures the scene displayed well. The aggressive profile of the starlings makes me wonder about the safety of your laundry from bird droppings. : )
Comment Written 31-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Bill, for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile with this write and there are so many birds in your garden squabbling over the food you have left them, a magical picture and wonderful words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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You made me smile with this write and there are so many birds in your garden squabbling over the food you have left them, a magical picture and wonderful words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you of your lovely feedback, Dolly :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gloria ....
Very clever wording here for your urban garden haiku. I can imagine the starlings looking up and thinking: nice! Towels to clean up with after we feast.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Very clever wording here for your urban garden haiku. I can imagine the starlings looking up and thinking: nice! Towels to clean up with after we feast.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes, Gloria :) I appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hi Debra, I think you should have been ok with the weather today but not sure about the starlings! I love the way you always manage to bring a touch of humour into your verses. This haiku covers all bases here: you've got the middle line sandwiched in between your two dreads! Plus you've got some alliteration too. A strong contender! Well done and good luck! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Hi Debra, I think you should have been ok with the weather today but not sure about the starlings! I love the way you always manage to bring a touch of humour into your verses. This haiku covers all bases here: you've got the middle line sandwiched in between your two dreads! Plus you've got some alliteration too. A strong contender! Well done and good luck! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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He Debbie :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Glad you get my humour.... it's usually lurking in between the words somewhere! No washing in the garden today, or starlings for that matter - just pigeons and drizzle LOL
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for sharing the photo, notes, and poem, Debra.
-The first thing I would do is move the feeder and pole away from the clothes.
You probably have too many feeders, too.
-I can't imagine having that many starlings. It would drive me nuts.
-You wrote a good haiku about it with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-You set the scene well in the opening lines
and a very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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-Thanks for sharing the photo, notes, and poem, Debra.
-The first thing I would do is move the feeder and pole away from the clothes.
You probably have too many feeders, too.
-I can't imagine having that many starlings. It would drive me nuts.
-You wrote a good haiku about it with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-You set the scene well in the opening lines
and a very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Hello Pam :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes.
We don't usually get that many birds all at once - I think the starlings were just passing through and spotted an opportune snack!
The feeding station is quite close to the clothes airer, but we wanted to be able to see the birds from the house as we usually have lots of different variety visiting - we did ought to move the airer a bit higher up the garden though!
No washing to spoil today, it's raining.... again!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
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You are very welcome, Debra, and thanks for sharing everything.
Comment from lyenochka
Love your wordplay! Yes, that laundry does "hang in the balance" because it probably won't be clean when the starlings are done!
The funny thing about starlings is that they were brought to the US because "starlings" were mentioned by Shakespeare so they wanted to see them here. So we have too many of them, too!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Love your wordplay! Yes, that laundry does "hang in the balance" because it probably won't be clean when the starlings are done!
The funny thing about starlings is that they were brought to the US because "starlings" were mentioned by Shakespeare so they wanted to see them here. So we have too many of them, too!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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How interesting! Happy to share those starlings with you - we have enough over here!
Thanks so much, Helen, for your lovely feedback and for the info :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Sally Law
This is a fresh take on a haiku, much like my yard growing up. Laundry was always hanging out to dry between the trees.
A delightful post an entry for the contest. Sending my best today is always in my very best for the upcoming haiku, Sal XOs
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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This is a fresh take on a haiku, much like my yard growing up. Laundry was always hanging out to dry between the trees.
A delightful post an entry for the contest. Sending my best today is always in my very best for the upcoming haiku, Sal XOs
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Sal :)
I always appreciate your lovely feedback and hearing snippets of your life. I would love some trees in my garden - we have a tiny apple tree sapling, but the rest is lawn, flower beds and overgrown veg beds (which I am in the process of clearing. Again!)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good haiku representation of the photograph that you have used. I like it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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This is a very good haiku representation of the photograph that you have used. I like it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you, Patricia, for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from papa55mike
It's the Brown-headed Cow Birds that ravage our full feeders and that seed is high-priced. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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It's the Brown-headed Cow Birds that ravage our full feeders and that seed is high-priced. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you, Mike, for your kind feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
