Silentious Sex
Was it her sensual smile?22 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I thought I commented on this another time recently, so why am I allowed to try again. Did I forget to SAVOR it properly? Well done. An enjoyable but macabre read. :-)
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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I thought I commented on this another time recently, so why am I allowed to try again. Did I forget to SAVOR it properly? Well done. An enjoyable but macabre read. :-)
Comment Written 29-May-2023
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Thank you, Tom! FYI: This is the only review I received from you. Thanks again!
Comment from BermyBye50
John,
This is a brilliant write and a cautious tale that speaks to the powerful solicitation of words. This poem draws in in from its opening line and abruptly shocks you awake to the subtlety of the reality it secretly disguises within every line. The title "Silentious Sex" leads the reader in their expectation of a different outcome and boom it explodes to the opposite actually occurring.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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John,
This is a brilliant write and a cautious tale that speaks to the powerful solicitation of words. This poem draws in in from its opening line and abruptly shocks you awake to the subtlety of the reality it secretly disguises within every line. The title "Silentious Sex" leads the reader in their expectation of a different outcome and boom it explodes to the opposite actually occurring.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you for the SIX and the kind words, BB50. I appreciate all of it!
Comment from Monica Chaddick
Wow! This was quite a piece of writing. The rhyme was good. I had a bit of trouble catching the flow, but that have just been me and not the piece itself. It certainly did turn dark, but things happen. Great job!
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Wow! This was quite a piece of writing. The rhyme was good. I had a bit of trouble catching the flow, but that have just been me and not the piece itself. It certainly did turn dark, but things happen. Great job!
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind words and the great review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Uncomplimentary, or silentious sex isn't anything that I know anything about, but I'm guessing that most all of us have our dark sides. LOL. Thanks for sharing your other side.
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Uncomplimentary, or silentious sex isn't anything that I know anything about, but I'm guessing that most all of us have our dark sides. LOL. Thanks for sharing your other side.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Ric! Yes, this was my dark side, for sure. But I always appreciate you, my friend, and thank you so much for the stars.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a lurid and seductive work which brings the readers in figure out exactly what is happening, whether imagined or real. Looks like someone wanted to be together with the speaker, not knowing he was a changed man. He was to die for. Great job.
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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This is a lurid and seductive work which brings the readers in figure out exactly what is happening, whether imagined or real. Looks like someone wanted to be together with the speaker, not knowing he was a changed man. He was to die for. Great job.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Bill, for the great review. You got it! Thanks again
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oh John, you naughty boy. I couldn't sleep after a tragic day and this caught my attention. I had to biteto see what this was about. I will be honest that I am still a little bewildered and strangely moved. I think you took us on quite the ride while you daunted us with this sensuous and violent piece of art. I'm usually not a dark type of woman, but tonight is an exception. I got out of this the jolt that I think you meant for us as it played out in our imaginations. Great job my friend!
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Oh John, you naughty boy. I couldn't sleep after a tragic day and this caught my attention. I had to biteto see what this was about. I will be honest that I am still a little bewildered and strangely moved. I think you took us on quite the ride while you daunted us with this sensuous and violent piece of art. I'm usually not a dark type of woman, but tonight is an exception. I got out of this the jolt that I think you meant for us as it played out in our imaginations. Great job my friend!
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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I'm typically pretty naughty, Debi! Hahaha! Thank you for the great review
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Goodness me, John, that was a shock ending!! This happens so many times, where a woman believes he will change if she loves him enough. But he knew better, and tried to tell her that, many times. He wasn't the man she fell in love with, and she tried to bring that man back, only for him to stab her to death! You can't change the unchangeable. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Goodness me, John, that was a shock ending!! This happens so many times, where a woman believes he will change if she loves him enough. But he knew better, and tried to tell her that, many times. He wasn't the man she fell in love with, and she tried to bring that man back, only for him to stab her to death! You can't change the unchangeable. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Hello, Sandra! Thank you so much for accepting my darkness and for the great review. I'm on my way to read your recent post. Thanks again!
Comment from Wendy G
How very dark, and yes, violent. She wanted him, despite everything rational, and he couldn't stop himself from murdering her in cold blood, despite the warnings of the birds, and his warnings to her that he hadn't changed, could not change. It makes one wonder if anyone can ever change because of or by a jail experience. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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How very dark, and yes, violent. She wanted him, despite everything rational, and he couldn't stop himself from murdering her in cold blood, despite the warnings of the birds, and his warnings to her that he hadn't changed, could not change. It makes one wonder if anyone can ever change because of or by a jail experience. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Wendy, for the great review! I appreciate you.
Comment from lyenochka
That was quite a shock at the end. So a jailbird was corresponding with his girlfriend who still loved him and took him back after he was freed. But then he killed her? Well, I guess some criminals can't change?
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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That was quite a shock at the end. So a jailbird was corresponding with his girlfriend who still loved him and took him back after he was freed. But then he killed her? Well, I guess some criminals can't change?
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Helen, for the great review.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I follow through the whole story. I believe there is true love in this story.
I also agree that "people become a different man after a drama.
It is a good story.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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I follow through the whole story. I believe there is true love in this story.
I also agree that "people become a different man after a drama.
It is a good story.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you
