Don't Be Afraid
Why, baby girl.38 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
Deeply affective, John. Anyone with a daughter, child, or a heart would not hesitate to emote after picturing their own in such a situation. The connection between the dad and God is not lost on me either. Excellent poem, which punches hard to the gut.
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Deeply affective, John. Anyone with a daughter, child, or a heart would not hesitate to emote after picturing their own in such a situation. The connection between the dad and God is not lost on me either. Excellent poem, which punches hard to the gut.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you, Bill, for going back to read this one.
It seemed to have resonated with so many here on FS.
It's always a thrill to have you read my work. Thank you for the SIX, my friend.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Hi John, having visiting relatives, I missed many posts for review. I caught this in the voting for Poem of the Month.
I am glad I doubled back and found this powerful poem. These words are emotional, sad, and intimate. It is a poem that for a moment leaves this reader paralyzed from moving on. A moment is needed to absorb the emotion.
Good luck
Mary
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Hi John, having visiting relatives, I missed many posts for review. I caught this in the voting for Poem of the Month.
I am glad I doubled back and found this powerful poem. These words are emotional, sad, and intimate. It is a poem that for a moment leaves this reader paralyzed from moving on. A moment is needed to absorb the emotion.
Good luck
Mary
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Thank you, Mary, for the great review and encouraging words. It's always a pleasure and an honor to receive your thoughts!
Comment from Janel Mock
Wow. I am in tears right now. This is my first read today to make this happen. I enjoyed every word and it really hit me hard. Thank you for sharing this beautiful work.
~Janel
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Wow. I am in tears right now. This is my first read today to make this happen. I enjoyed every word and it really hit me hard. Thank you for sharing this beautiful work.
~Janel
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you for going back to read this one, Janel. I'm happy you liked it so much to give me a six. It is much appreciated. I'll be looking for your next post! Have fun!
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You are welcome! I even had some close people to me read it that aren?t into writing as much, and they loved it as well! I look forward to reading more! ~Janel
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Thank you, Janel, for doing that!
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hello John, this is a very
moving sorrowful poem on
the tragedy of suicide. It's
heart-rending and reaches
the soul, I'm sure, of all of us
readers. My very best wishes
to you. ~
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
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Hello John, this is a very
moving sorrowful poem on
the tragedy of suicide. It's
heart-rending and reaches
the soul, I'm sure, of all of us
readers. My very best wishes
to you. ~
Comment Written 28-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Regina! I always appreciate your reviews and will honor your six stars. Thank you for reading!
Comment from irishauthorme
This poem really touched me. I feel that this portrays a painful loss in your life. Beautifully written, you put me right at the bedside.
Some of the pain in life we recover from but some we carry with us for our lifetime, a hollow place that can never be filled.
God Bless,
irish
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This poem really touched me. I feel that this portrays a painful loss in your life. Beautifully written, you put me right at the bedside.
Some of the pain in life we recover from but some we carry with us for our lifetime, a hollow place that can never be filled.
God Bless,
irish
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Irish, for the great review, kind words, and, of course, the six stars! Much appreciated. This was not biographical.
Thanks again, my friend.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi John,
This is such a sad poem about suicide. It is full of strong emotion on both sides. It shows how even the sickest people can communicate with little movement. It goes into the guilt of a parent missing the signs that lead to suicide. It also shows faith and hope that those who commit suicide can make it to Heaven.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Hi John,
This is such a sad poem about suicide. It is full of strong emotion on both sides. It shows how even the sickest people can communicate with little movement. It goes into the guilt of a parent missing the signs that lead to suicide. It also shows faith and hope that those who commit suicide can make it to Heaven.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Joan, for the great review. It's always great to have you read my work. You keep healthy and keep writing too.
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You?re welcome, John. I?ll try to do both.
Joan
Comment from kiwisteveh
John, you have written an intensely moving and emotional piece from the POV of a father watching his daughter drift away, a victim of suicide. This feels real, but of course I cannot be sure if it is based on your own experience - if it is you have my sincere condolences.
I have personal experience which makes this poem very personal. Only outside intervention saved my son when he attempted to take his own life nearly 30 years ago, narrowly averting a tragedy which would have negatively impacted us for the rest of our lives.
Your chosen method of giving the father's responses to the perceived signals from his dying daughter is very effective and the father's helplessness is increasingly apparent.
Exceptional write - hence the sixer.
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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John, you have written an intensely moving and emotional piece from the POV of a father watching his daughter drift away, a victim of suicide. This feels real, but of course I cannot be sure if it is based on your own experience - if it is you have my sincere condolences.
I have personal experience which makes this poem very personal. Only outside intervention saved my son when he attempted to take his own life nearly 30 years ago, narrowly averting a tragedy which would have negatively impacted us for the rest of our lives.
Your chosen method of giving the father's responses to the perceived signals from his dying daughter is very effective and the father's helplessness is increasingly apparent.
Exceptional write - hence the sixer.
Steve
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Steve, I'm sorry to hear that this happened to your son so many years ago. It doesn't surprise me how many here have had similar experiences with suicide and the outcome for them not being a favorable one. I'm happy he received the help he needed to get through it. Thank you for the great review and the sixer!
Comment from rspoet
Hello John
A powerful poem and great message for others to be aware.
Not always easy to do, unless you're very diligent.
Excellent transition in the poem to awareness of the circumstances.
Hoping this is not biographical.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Hello John
A powerful poem and great message for others to be aware.
Not always easy to do, unless you're very diligent.
Excellent transition in the poem to awareness of the circumstances.
Hoping this is not biographical.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Robert, thank you so much for your review and the six stars! This turned out to be a relatable subject, sadly. I hope all is well. I haven't been following your saga as I lost track of it because I was away. I will tell you though you are one of my writing heroes! :)
Comment from Paul McFarland
Are you kidding me, John. Tears will always result in six stars. I hope this did not happen to you, but I have a sinking feeling in my heart. Great poem.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Are you kidding me, John. Tears will always result in six stars. I hope this did not happen to you, but I have a sinking feeling in my heart. Great poem.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Paul! It did not happen to me. However, I thank you for your concern. I pray I never have to live through what so many have here. I believe in awareness pieces and feel all are worthy of writing about. Thank you so much for the six. I'm sorry it prompted tears. Thanks again, Paul!
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Tears are good.
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Yes, they are.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem that is full of emotion and great imagery from your words. Suicide is a very sad thing to happen to a person. Thank you for sharing. Blessings Teri
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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This is a very well written poem that is full of emotion and great imagery from your words. Suicide is a very sad thing to happen to a person. Thank you for sharing. Blessings Teri
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the review, Teri. It's always good to hear from you.
