Angels Unaware
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Comment from Soledadpaz
Nice phrasing: born to be a classic redneck.
And: dark thirty. Definitely original.
Suggest: my focus became blurred
Paranoid walls (that) I had crumbled, my Joker smile and false bravado (were) no match (against) the (pristine,) (white-robed)
(At) least in jail, I would have (been granted) a phone call.
Do you mean: (vanished) into a black hole . . .
What an absolutely terrifying time for you.
A few thoughts and suggestions.
Sol
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Nice phrasing: born to be a classic redneck.
And: dark thirty. Definitely original.
Suggest: my focus became blurred
Paranoid walls (that) I had crumbled, my Joker smile and false bravado (were) no match (against) the (pristine,) (white-robed)
(At) least in jail, I would have (been granted) a phone call.
Do you mean: (vanished) into a black hole . . .
What an absolutely terrifying time for you.
A few thoughts and suggestions.
Sol
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much Sole. I appreciate the thumbs up with a golden plus and the editing help is always very much welcomed.
Comment from patcelaw
I can so much identify with your story here. I had a time when I had to be hospitalized for bipolar disorder, and I went through several days of not really knowing where I was or what I was doing there. You have written your story well, and I enjoyed listening to it. I do wish you the very best in all that you do. Patricia.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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I can so much identify with your story here. I had a time when I had to be hospitalized for bipolar disorder, and I went through several days of not really knowing where I was or what I was doing there. You have written your story well, and I enjoyed listening to it. I do wish you the very best in all that you do. Patricia.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much Pat
Comment from lyenochka
This sounds so scary! Are you sure they were testing LSD on you? My goodness, how can they so quickly diagnose you and then drug you? I'm glad you kept your trust in God throughout it all.
It least in jail, I would have had a phone call. (At least)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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This sounds so scary! Are you sure they were testing LSD on you? My goodness, how can they so quickly diagnose you and then drug you? I'm glad you kept your trust in God throughout it all.
It least in jail, I would have had a phone call. (At least)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from royowen
I must admit I'm not sure I haven't been driven into that place. Bu I think subliminally I had a strong alter ego, that guided me even through times of drunkenness and stress quite well, we can deceive ourselves, as scripture tells us. Beautifully written dear friend, blessings Roy
Typo : (Vanquished) into...vanished?
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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I must admit I'm not sure I haven't been driven into that place. Bu I think subliminally I had a strong alter ego, that guided me even through times of drunkenness and stress quite well, we can deceive ourselves, as scripture tells us. Beautifully written dear friend, blessings Roy
Typo : (Vanquished) into...vanished?
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much Roy. Blessings ahead!
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Good job
Comment from Alaskastory
"Behind Locked Doors" is a startling chapter full of such unknown action. You give a mystifying description of his symptoms. My only longing is to know what his future will bring.
typo: "It (At) least in jail, I would have had a phone call."
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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"Behind Locked Doors" is a startling chapter full of such unknown action. You give a mystifying description of his symptoms. My only longing is to know what his future will bring.
typo: "It (At) least in jail, I would have had a phone call."
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thanks Marie. I'm anxious to get next chapter out because of the unconditional love from others that makes me cry thinking of it.
Comment from Shirley McLain
It's amazing that when we have God on our side, we can get through anything. I know this was traumatic for you. How long did it take you to realize what was really happening with you? You did a great job. Enjoy your Sunday night. Shirley
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It's amazing that when we have God on our side, we can get through anything. I know this was traumatic for you. How long did it take you to realize what was really happening with you? You did a great job. Enjoy your Sunday night. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow! What an experience. The military is bad about that. Seem as if they love playing with a person's mind. Especially, if you have experience combat of any sort. Good one, Bro. Yes, Christ makes the difference.
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Wow! What an experience. The military is bad about that. Seem as if they love playing with a person's mind. Especially, if you have experience combat of any sort. Good one, Bro. Yes, Christ makes the difference.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
Comment from BethShelby
Under the influence of the drugs they gave you, I would imagine almost anyone would appear to be bit off mentally. It would terrible to be misdiagnosed and having that on your medical records.
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Under the influence of the drugs they gave you, I would imagine almost anyone would appear to be bit off mentally. It would terrible to be misdiagnosed and having that on your medical records.
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thanks! The labeling did weigh heavy on me for a time.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this sounds so awful, as if you were being deceived and cajoled into another world where you were powerless to fight and get free. Far from free falling, I felt like you were trapped. I hope you have recovered from this period in your life, your experience sounded very frightening to me, thank you for sharing these personal details, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Oh my goodness, this sounds so awful, as if you were being deceived and cajoled into another world where you were powerless to fight and get free. Far from free falling, I felt like you were trapped. I hope you have recovered from this period in your life, your experience sounded very frightening to me, thank you for sharing these personal details, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thanks Dolly! I'm anxious to get the next chapter out because of the powerful unconditional love and prayers that turned the tide.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an excellent, breath-taking account of a paranoid breakdown, impressively conveyed in such detail and imagery. I wonder at how difficult this must have been to do such justice to this subject and communicate so effectively. The story-line also evolved skilfully and gripped the reader's attention from the start (enjoyed 'dark-thirty') I was therefore torn between excellent and exceptional but have opted for the latter. This is a remarkable piece of non-fiction and I thank you for sharing, Debbie
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This is an excellent, breath-taking account of a paranoid breakdown, impressively conveyed in such detail and imagery. I wonder at how difficult this must have been to do such justice to this subject and communicate so effectively. The story-line also evolved skilfully and gripped the reader's attention from the start (enjoyed 'dark-thirty') I was therefore torn between excellent and exceptional but have opted for the latter. This is a remarkable piece of non-fiction and I thank you for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
