Father Time
poetry7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This poem seems like the first half of a tetractys and you did it perfectly to describe the phenomenon of time. I like the "time" factor in "ancient" as the concept of time is indeed ancient! Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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This poem seems like the first half of a tetractys and you did it perfectly to describe the phenomenon of time. I like the "time" factor in "ancient" as the concept of time is indeed ancient! Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Hello Helen. Thank you. I had fun with that little challenge. Pairing time with ancient added a bit of depth (at least to me) and I hoped others saw it too. Hugs!!
Melissa
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I think they did! You're on a winning roll! 💖
Comment from karenina
Doesn't it though? You've brought me up short with this ten-syllable wisdom. So often I long to lay the hourglass on its side... Just a moment to enjoy the "now" without the realization nagging at me that already "now" is slipping to memory...
Very nicely done. Congratulations on your win!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Doesn't it though? You've brought me up short with this ten-syllable wisdom. So often I long to lay the hourglass on its side... Just a moment to enjoy the "now" without the realization nagging at me that already "now" is slipping to memory...
Very nicely done. Congratulations on your win!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Karenina!! Thank you for your lovely review and kind words. So glad you enjoyed that wee poem :). Hugs!!
Melissa
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Hello! You're welcome! Happy Spring!
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Simply stated with thoughtful word choices.
Well illustrated and seemed quite fitting for the style constraints.
Message clear and concise and very relatable for age brings not only wisdom but often a slowing of mobility yet as one struggles time passes quietly on.
A standout contest entry.
Good luck
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Simply stated with thoughtful word choices.
Well illustrated and seemed quite fitting for the style constraints.
Message clear and concise and very relatable for age brings not only wisdom but often a slowing of mobility yet as one struggles time passes quietly on.
A standout contest entry.
Good luck
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thanks so very much, Shirley!!
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You're very welcome.
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You're welcome
Comment from zanya
Yes a very succinct but universal sentiment expressed here in this very short poetic format - yes time is ever present for us though it moves around on 'ancient feet.'
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Yes a very succinct but universal sentiment expressed here in this very short poetic format - yes time is ever present for us though it moves around on 'ancient feet.'
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much Zanya!!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 1-2-3-4 poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. I like it centered on the visual. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. I like the personification of time in your short poem. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the 1-2-3-4 poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. I like it centered on the visual. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. I like the personification of time in your short poem. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write as out time soon passes into oblivion and becomes ancient quicker than light. I enjoyed your poem for the contest, it could be a winner, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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A poignant write as out time soon passes into oblivion and becomes ancient quicker than light. I enjoyed your poem for the contest, it could be a winner, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much, Dolly!
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
Father Time, who is as old as Mother Nature. Both of whom love to play jokes on Man. Some of which include coming up with stuff we need to ingest, but which, shall we say, makes our bodies more musically inclined and going bald.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Father Time, who is as old as Mother Nature. Both of whom love to play jokes on Man. Some of which include coming up with stuff we need to ingest, but which, shall we say, makes our bodies more musically inclined and going bald.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks for your fun and insightful review!!
