Thorny pineapple
haiku about a favorite fruit16 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
Great layout, fantastic picture. I note your second line only has six syllables. I am definitely no expert but I thought a Haiku was 5-7-5.
I do love pineapple. I even live near "The big pineapple" in Australia.
A fun read.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Great layout, fantastic picture. I note your second line only has six syllables. I am definitely no expert but I thought a Haiku was 5-7-5.
I do love pineapple. I even live near "The big pineapple" in Australia.
A fun read.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.Yes I thought so too .But the club organiser insists that it need not be . 17 syllables or less is the norm. minimal words i think that is the point .
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes, some of the toughest exteriors hide the softest and sweetest interiors that we desire, a wonderful haiku on this most delectable fruit, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Excellent, yes, some of the toughest exteriors hide the softest and sweetest interiors that we desire, a wonderful haiku on this most delectable fruit, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very uch.
Comment from Mintybee
I like this poem about having to get through a tough exterior to a heavenly fruit. I noticed that your second line only had 6 syllables. I'm not sure if that's an accident on a 5-7-5, or on purpose as modern English haikus have different rules. the picture you chose works well, and the orange background adds some playfulness.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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I like this poem about having to get through a tough exterior to a heavenly fruit. I noticed that your second line only had 6 syllables. I'm not sure if that's an accident on a 5-7-5, or on purpose as modern English haikus have different rules. the picture you chose works well, and the orange background adds some playfulness.
Mintybee
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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YEs the club organiser says that modern English Haikus need not be 5-7-5.17 syllables or less is the norm .minimum words maximum image ,I suppose .Thank you for dropping by
Comment from karenina
Sometimes those rough e,periods are well worth penetrating...in fruit and in humans! We're all the more appreciative of the sweetness found within!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Sometimes those rough e,periods are well worth penetrating...in fruit and in humans! We're all the more appreciative of the sweetness found within!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
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You're wecome!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Yes, indeed, many good things in life require patience and a great deal of effort. But, oh the reward can seem like heaven! This is a delicious haiku.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Yes, indeed, many good things in life require patience and a great deal of effort. But, oh the reward can seem like heaven! This is a delicious haiku.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from royowen
I can't really answer that question on why the pineapple has such a tough, hoary skin and those thorns, nor can I answer why a rose bush has such beautiful flowers and yet thorns, perhaps it's because life's journey has beauty but some thorns, well done Sanku, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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I can't really answer that question on why the pineapple has such a tough, hoary skin and those thorns, nor can I answer why a rose bush has such beautiful flowers and yet thorns, perhaps it's because life's journey has beauty but some thorns, well done Sanku, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, Roy .I think God id not want us to get everything the easy way ..nature is full of such examples
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I agree
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I happen to really like pineapple too. I also prefer fresh pineapple, and yes, it is prickly, but well worth it. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I happen to really like pineapple too. I also prefer fresh pineapple, and yes, it is prickly, but well worth it. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much .
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
*(ask) for patient labour (add dash)
thorny pineapple
asks for patient labour --
tough path to heaven
Excellent entry for the Haiku Cub event.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
Gypsy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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*(ask) for patient labour (add dash)
thorny pineapple
asks for patient labour --
tough path to heaven
Excellent entry for the Haiku Cub event.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from lyenochka
Love your poem about the thorny pineapple! I read the poem's message in two different ways. From the laborer's perspective, one has to tolerate a lot to get the "heavenly" taste of the fruit. From a symbolic view of the pineapple as a person who is prickly and difficult, the path to Heaven putting up with such a thorny person or a thorny person who doesn't make it easy to love him/her, the path to Heaven is hard, too. Enjoyed your poem!
Suggestions:
ask for patient labour (asks) if pineapple is the singular subject
within tough shin and thorns (skin)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Love your poem about the thorny pineapple! I read the poem's message in two different ways. From the laborer's perspective, one has to tolerate a lot to get the "heavenly" taste of the fruit. From a symbolic view of the pineapple as a person who is prickly and difficult, the path to Heaven putting up with such a thorny person or a thorny person who doesn't make it easy to love him/her, the path to Heaven is hard, too. Enjoyed your poem!
Suggestions:
ask for patient labour (asks) if pineapple is the singular subject
within tough shin and thorns (skin)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much helen .Thanks for pointing out the grammatical mistake ...
Comment from country ranch writer
My husband loved pineapples and we'd take the tops and plant them forming so he could watch them. It is amazing to know they are so easy to grow, I could not eat them as much as I loved them. They would make me sick soon as I ate them. I still got them for hubby though.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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My husband loved pineapples and we'd take the tops and plant them forming so he could watch them. It is amazing to know they are so easy to grow, I could not eat them as much as I loved them. They would make me sick soon as I ate them. I still got them for hubby though.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
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