Earthly Cares
A Kyrielle poem11 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
That is a nice Kyrielle, Jim. You picked a great subject matter for this poem. The repeating line really works. You have almost got me interested in trying one of those.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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That is a nice Kyrielle, Jim. You picked a great subject matter for this poem. The repeating line really works. You have almost got me interested in trying one of those.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Paul, I look forward to seeing yours!
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Excellent execution of a Kyrielle poem and a perfectly lovely poem too. The rhymes are easy and natural. The words are well chosen and the topic never strays from the theme. I liked it.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Excellent execution of a Kyrielle poem and a perfectly lovely poem too. The rhymes are easy and natural. The words are well chosen and the topic never strays from the theme. I liked it.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you
Comment from karenina
This is beautifully presented, nice rhymes, serene refrain, fine syllable count (as prayers can be one or two syllables according to Google search.)
Nice how you take us from night to dawn...
Faith filled and a real contender!
Good luck!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This is beautifully presented, nice rhymes, serene refrain, fine syllable count (as prayers can be one or two syllables according to Google search.)
Nice how you take us from night to dawn...
Faith filled and a real contender!
Good luck!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I am quite humbled with your six star validation thank you so much!
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Well deserved!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the Kyrielle Poetry Contest. The text is a good size for reading. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. It reads like a prayer or a song in a hymn book. The refrain you selected reads well in the poem. I would write the last refrain with a lower case "easing" as in the other verses. Put a comma after the preceding line. The last refrain is a phrase and not a sentence just like it was in the other verses. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the Kyrielle Poetry Contest. The text is a good size for reading. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. It reads like a prayer or a song in a hymn book. The refrain you selected reads well in the poem. I would write the last refrain with a lower case "easing" as in the other verses. Put a comma after the preceding line. The last refrain is a phrase and not a sentence just like it was in the other verses. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Sandra, thank you for your excellent review and comments. I, am always grateful to receive helpful advice to improve my efforts.
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You are welcome. Thanks for being receptive to my suggestions.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the Kyrielle Contest.
Good rhyme and meter scheme that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Wonderful entry for the Kyrielle Contest.
Good rhyme and meter scheme that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely kyrielle. I see your definition didn't require the iambic meter which is more typical so you met the form according to the contest rules.
In life we do have so many earthly cares but we can trust God and read His Word. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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A lovely kyrielle. I see your definition didn't require the iambic meter which is more typical so you met the form according to the contest rules.
In life we do have so many earthly cares but we can trust God and read His Word. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Thanks.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and good presentation.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery, rhyme, and repeating line.
-I like the first line with the "starry, starry night."
-There is good progression of ideas from verse to verse,
showing how you feel blessed.
-A good concluding verse, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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-Nice artwork and good presentation.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery, rhyme, and repeating line.
-I like the first line with the "starry, starry night."
-There is good progression of ideas from verse to verse,
showing how you feel blessed.
-A good concluding verse, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Pam, I appreciate your kind review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the sentiment and your clever rhymes, your light hearted words are uplifting and angelic, our days are filled with magical scenes, we are truly blessed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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I loved the sentiment and your clever rhymes, your light hearted words are uplifting and angelic, our days are filled with magical scenes, we are truly blessed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly,, may your weeks sail smoothly on gentle waves.
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
I loved both the style and wording of this beautiful poem. What a feeling of pure joy in brings sd a reminder of Gods love for us. Beautiful background too!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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I loved both the style and wording of this beautiful poem. What a feeling of pure joy in brings sd a reminder of Gods love for us. Beautiful background too!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Thank Kerry, have a great week
Comment from Ginda Simpson
The line you have chosen for the repetition is perfect because throughout day and night, God repeatedly eases our earthly cares. Rhyme and flow are well done.
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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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The line you have chosen for the repetition is perfect because throughout day and night, God repeatedly eases our earthly cares. Rhyme and flow are well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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