Benny Broke His Bicycle
Amazing how lies begin and are spread.15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Annie,
Sometimes a lie can ruin a person's reputation for life. Lies grow in power the more we use them. Sad when our own tongues become our worst enemy. Poor Ty ... the whole town looked at him as a liar, someone who couldn't be trusted.
Good Luck in the Rhyming Poetry contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Hi Annie,
Sometimes a lie can ruin a person's reputation for life. Lies grow in power the more we use them. Sad when our own tongues become our worst enemy. Poor Ty ... the whole town looked at him as a liar, someone who couldn't be trusted.
Good Luck in the Rhyming Poetry contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for your review and input. I thought of my grandkids when I wrote this one. Think I may read it to them or at least give them a copy. May do some good.
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
This is excellent with a great moral to the story. You deserve great recognition for this wonderful poem. I love the illustration and color which work perfectly together. A terrific job. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This is excellent with a great moral to the story. You deserve great recognition for this wonderful poem. I love the illustration and color which work perfectly together. A terrific job. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for your review and input. I thought of my grandkids when I wrote this one. Think I may read it to them or at least give them a copy. May do some good.
Comment from Ricky1024
Tye Die?
Made him cry?
Tear drop in his eye?
Oh me, Oh My!
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Tye Die?
Made him cry?
Tear drop in his eye?
Oh me, Oh My!
...
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for your review and input. I thought of my grandkids when I wrote this one. Think I may read it to them or at least give them a copy. May do some good.
Comment from bob cullen
What a powerful message your poem presents. A lie will always be a lie. It doesn't matter how many times it is repeated. And lies bred miscontent and often anger. And in this instance, it probably destroyed the friendship between Tye and Ben.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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What a powerful message your poem presents. A lie will always be a lie. It doesn't matter how many times it is repeated. And lies bred miscontent and often anger. And in this instance, it probably destroyed the friendship between Tye and Ben.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for your review and input. I thought of my grandkids when I wrote this one. Think I may read it to them or at least give them a copy. May do some good.
Comment from WalkerMan
Your rhyming poem makes an important point on its theme -- that a lie, however minor it seems, can cause lasting harm to someone wrongfully blamed for some event, regardless of whoever or whatever DID cause it. Superb, and aptly illustrated (though a girl's bike). -- Mike
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Your rhyming poem makes an important point on its theme -- that a lie, however minor it seems, can cause lasting harm to someone wrongfully blamed for some event, regardless of whoever or whatever DID cause it. Superb, and aptly illustrated (though a girl's bike). -- Mike
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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What a good pickup! I did not realize that it was a girl's bike when I chose the picture...lol. Thanks for pointing it out. And thanks for the great review.
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You are most welcome, Annie.
I noticed the bike frame because I have a younger sister and eventually raised three daughters. Rather than look for another picture, just change your poem's first line to "Benny broke sister's bike" (without the quotation marks).
The damage seems just a flat rear tire, certainly not worth the lie's harm.
Benny's mom's actions did the real harm by spreading the lie before determining what really happened and how. Thus, this post is more of a warning to adults than to fibbing kids who should know better.
Comment from w.j.debi
Poor Tyson. Ben was a terrible friend to blame someone else. Even worse was that Ben's mom spread the lie to everyone she knew. Poor Tye didn't even get a chance to stand up for himself.
Excellent reminder not to gossip and to find out the truth.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Poor Tyson. Ben was a terrible friend to blame someone else. Even worse was that Ben's mom spread the lie to everyone she knew. Poor Tye didn't even get a chance to stand up for himself.
Excellent reminder not to gossip and to find out the truth.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Exactly. Guess we always believe our kids but they sometimes pull the wool over our eyes. Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Teri7
Annie, This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest about Bennie telling a lie on Tye. You used very good descriptive and very true words. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Annie, This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest about Bennie telling a lie on Tye. You used very good descriptive and very true words. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I value your criticism as you have been on the site for so long and really are an experienced poet. Thank you again, my friend, and God bless.
Comment from lyenochka
That's a sobering thought. There are many innocent victims of lies that spread. And yet, there are some who make lying a profession as in certain politicians we know. Good to see you back, Annie! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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That's a sobering thought. There are many innocent victims of lies that spread. And yet, there are some who make lying a profession as in certain politicians we know. Good to see you back, Annie! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you. Have had a year of really bad pain which interferes with any kind of composing. Couldn't get it together. Had to refuse surgery and will be on medication for the rest of my life. At least now I can float along and compose a bit.
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I'm so sorry to hear about the constant pain. Sending hugs and prayers! 💖🙏
Comment from patcelaw
When we tell a lie that I can be spread so quickly. It's off and said that I can travel around the world before the truth gets to choose on. I think there may be some truth in that myself. I wish you the best of the contest. Patricia.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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When we tell a lie that I can be spread so quickly. It's off and said that I can travel around the world before the truth gets to choose on. I think there may be some truth in that myself. I wish you the best of the contest. Patricia.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Children don't realize the harm that a lie can cause. This poem just came out of the blue. Guess that some of mine are born in my dreams. Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
What a creative and well-rhymed poem about a subject we don't usually read about it poetry - lies! When I was a very young teenager, I blamed my best friend's brother for something that I did. He ended up being spanked for it, and I felt so bad, but was then too embarrassed to speak the truth. The weird thing is, I always thought his parents knew I was fibbing, and they spanked him anyway. To this day, I regret it.
Thanks for sharing this moral lesson in rhymes.
Pam
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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What a creative and well-rhymed poem about a subject we don't usually read about it poetry - lies! When I was a very young teenager, I blamed my best friend's brother for something that I did. He ended up being spanked for it, and I felt so bad, but was then too embarrassed to speak the truth. The weird thing is, I always thought his parents knew I was fibbing, and they spanked him anyway. To this day, I regret it.
Thanks for sharing this moral lesson in rhymes.
Pam
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Children don't realize the harm that a lie can cause. This poem just came out of the blue. Guess that some of mine are born in my dreams. Thanks so much for your kind review.
