Turn-Ons
Variety: the Spice of Life ... here's my ...19 total reviews
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
This could be a reflection of someone's life as they realize how happy they are to be alive. It is spontaneous, uplifting, happy and fun! I get a warm fuzzy feeling as I read it and the photos are great! Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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This could be a reflection of someone's life as they realize how happy they are to be alive. It is spontaneous, uplifting, happy and fun! I get a warm fuzzy feeling as I read it and the photos are great! Wonderful job.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Welcome Kerry! Have we exchanged notes previously. I'll need to read some of yours. Suggestions?
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
I like the use of many lines of mono rhymes. I shows how much of what we do rhymes. I assume fairways is alluding to golf. I like how Friday is all caps to show how important it is for most workers.
I like that the title has a sexual overtone as does the last word in the bigger font but the other things aren't.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Hi Tom,
I like the use of many lines of mono rhymes. I shows how much of what we do rhymes. I assume fairways is alluding to golf. I like how Friday is all caps to show how important it is for most workers.
I like that the title has a sexual overtone as does the last word in the bigger font but the other things aren't.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Appreciatively yours. Yep, fairways = golf courses. Only activity I do any longer besides write -write- write and of course review.
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No problem, Tom, I am not a golfer, but my parents were and my brother and brother in law are. I read, do app based work outs and do crossword and jigsaw puzzles.
Joan
Comment from Jim Wile
I really enjoyed this, Tom, and share many of the same turn-ons as you. That's a list of the turn-ons of a very happy man. I loved how all your lines rhymed with 'a'. If all these turn-ons rhymed with just one sound, think of how many you must have in total! Jim
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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I really enjoyed this, Tom, and share many of the same turn-ons as you. That's a list of the turn-ons of a very happy man. I loved how all your lines rhymed with 'a'. If all these turn-ons rhymed with just one sound, think of how many you must have in total! Jim
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Appreciatively yours, Tom
Comment from JT traveller
Another beautiful poem Tom. I love the rhythmical nature of this one. You have managed to build excitement and then, slow the reader down to a warm, slow, sentimental conclusion both with words and font. J
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Another beautiful poem Tom. I love the rhythmical nature of this one. You have managed to build excitement and then, slow the reader down to a warm, slow, sentimental conclusion both with words and font. J
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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I had not written much rhyming pieces recently. Thought let's have a go. Did. It has been surprisingly accepted as well done. Thanks for the read and comment.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done list of things that turn you on. I might have made it a more explicit at the end what kind of woman turns you on and what situation turns you on but that is just me.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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nicely done list of things that turn you on. I might have made it a more explicit at the end what kind of woman turns you on and what situation turns you on but that is just me.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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I had not written much rhyming pieces recently. Thought let's have a go. Did. I also wanted to keep it to one page for my binder. Lastly, married for 44 years I have no eyes for anyone else but the woman who stood my me all dem years.
It has been surprisingly accepted as well done. Thanks for the read and comment.
Comment from kahpot
Foreplay? you definitely may add that, an excellent summary of turn On's, I particularly like your last 3 lines, though splitting fairways ranks very high, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Foreplay? you definitely may add that, an excellent summary of turn On's, I particularly like your last 3 lines, though splitting fairways ranks very high, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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The wink and smile not Natl park etc, right? Glad you enjoyed it
Thank you
Comment from Raul1
Everything in this poem ends with a wink and a smile. Interesting set of poetry you have here. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Everything in this poem ends with a wink and a smile. Interesting set of poetry you have here. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Appreciate the read, review and comments
Tom
Comment from strandregs
I love the girls with the hats.
Prickly pears
We call sabres.
Did you know
If you're born in Israel you're called a Sabres
The prickly people of the bible.
Funny ha?
It's nice to show your appreciation of life's little/ big gifts.
Mine is walking and looking at the clouds.
Weird ha? :-))Z.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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I love the girls with the hats.
Prickly pears
We call sabres.
Did you know
If you're born in Israel you're called a Sabres
The prickly people of the bible.
Funny ha?
It's nice to show your appreciation of life's little/ big gifts.
Mine is walking and looking at the clouds.
Weird ha? :-))Z.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Weird, no
I did it professionally for nine years as a weather-guesser in the Navy. I do it (forecasting) better than tv spokesperson.
Interesting notes on sabres. We?re the 3 musketeers of Dumas Jewish? 😜😳🤪👀😇🙈
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What a Dumass question.
They must have been. in Israel they still call 3 kids messing around . The three mmusketerim.
Dumass- it just asks for it, doesn't it?
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In the airport I was in charge of the cloud distance/ hight equipment, and
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Oh?! You may have served with an AG.
Aerographer Mate, like me. Ever see a radiosonde release?
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you take humor to a new high or would that be low?
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem was well-presented, Tom. I liked the mostly monorhyme.
Your picture collage worked well with your descriptive words. I liked the
short lines. They added to the smooth flow and pacing. I could picture
most everything.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Your poem was well-presented, Tom. I liked the mostly monorhyme.
Your picture collage worked well with your descriptive words. I liked the
short lines. They added to the smooth flow and pacing. I could picture
most everything.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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You are a gem and me? A lump of coal or maybe a raw diamond 🤪
Comment from Wendy G
How do you make them into a collage of photos like that? Do you set out the photos and take a photo to make one new photo to post? I'd like to know how to do that. This poem could almost be a monorhyme entry ... it's a fun one, an enjoyable read, so well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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How do you make them into a collage of photos like that? Do you set out the photos and take a photo to make one new photo to post? I'd like to know how to do that. This poem could almost be a monorhyme entry ... it's a fun one, an enjoyable read, so well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Thanks. I have a couple thousands of photos I snapped over fifteen years, and edited. I use pic monkey app that has a collage block. I select a collage set up, in this case 5 blocks, select the pictures to fill them, download to FanStory where I stow related subjects and after properly sizing select one for the selected entry.
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Thank you. I'll take a look at that app. Sounds good.
Wendy
