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Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your Haiku poem - excellent picture presentation supporting the poem - nice. Poem is simple and clearly describes the picture scene - silver moonlight slipping between the blinds- cool satori - dusts spotlight - reminds of the smoke filled house of my parents who smoked back in those days - sunlight would exposes the layer of think some through the window - everyone smoked in those days as you probably recall too. Good job. AP

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

That dust is always in air. It is amazing that it does not cause us more problems The light has to flow through the window in a special way to catch the floating dust.

Remember when we had those blackboard erasers!?! As we
clapped them together, it would duplicate your poem and artwork. Not true in every school today.

Mark







 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
    I'm allergic to dust, I try to avoid it. Yeah, I remember the blackboard erasers. I used to do that too when I was a teacher.

    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
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Gypsy, This is a very well written 4-5-3 haiku you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. It all goes together very well. love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Teri,

    Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Yes, dust seem to show it's self in the moon's rays. I guess it likes to steal the show. This poem was beautifully written and fits the artwork to a 'T'. Thank you for sharing.

dust' spotlight (dust's???)

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Barbara,

    Thank you, I fixed that error. I wasn't sure about the possessive form. It sounded like too many 's' LoL

    Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
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Another great haiku, Gypsy. This one really told the truth. Dust does gather in the air and it does show up in the sunlight. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Aryr,

    Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day. blessed be.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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What a beautiful poem about a pretty scene that is quite common in our life. But your satori has lifted it into a new level. Even dusts can do a spotlight or need a spotlight.

Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Lisa,

    Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Gypsy Yes you are spot on with this Haiku a great Satori
I have see this very thing and your image complemented your words very nicely as your blue on black
Cheer Chris

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Chris,

    Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day. Cheers.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is likely to be evening as the moon filters through cloud to shine like this, a misty bright light described here, but I would probably describe the scene as early dawn, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Dolly,

    Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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That's such a cool poem for that picture! Great use of S-initial alliteration and the moonlight seems to make the dust come alive in some imaginary form.

Did you mean: dust's spotlight in the last line?

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Big Sister,

    Barbara let me know about the error. I was not sure about the possesive in dust. Thank you! I appreciate the kind and helpful review.

    Love,
    Gypsy