One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
These few syllable in this haiku pack a punch. The strong metaphor of the boat and water bringing her through mourning works well.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Hi MariVal,
These few syllable in this haiku pack a punch. The strong metaphor of the boat and water bringing her through mourning works well.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, Joan. I appreciate your time and insightful review. You are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
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You are most kindly welcome, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
Excellent grief poem. I am that woman in the boat, it will be a year since my husband passed in April. There is a light feel and flow to your words and I like the imagery of the boat.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Excellent grief poem. I am that woman in the boat, it will be a year since my husband passed in April. There is a light feel and flow to your words and I like the imagery of the boat.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I am sorry for your loss.
Thank you very much. I appreciate your time and insightful review. You are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I like the way you've arranged this, it's certainly better than the "stick in the mud" method of 5/7/5 that I thought we were confined, having it this way, makes it so much easier to negotiate, well done Gypsy, great post. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I like the way you've arranged this, it's certainly better than the "stick in the mud" method of 5/7/5 that I thought we were confined, having it this way, makes it so much easier to negotiate, well done Gypsy, great post. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate your exceptional review and five stars.
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
"grief waves carry her to shore" is a great line that says a lot more than the six words written. Such a sad poem of love lost for whatever reason. I have a feeling boat ride is a metaphor for life. Thank you for sharing this gorgeous package with us.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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"grief waves carry her to shore" is a great line that says a lot more than the six words written. Such a sad poem of love lost for whatever reason. I have a feeling boat ride is a metaphor for life. Thank you for sharing this gorgeous package with us.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Have a great day!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good haiku. I was not able to read it because the colors are just such that I have problems with my vision being able to see it but I was able to hear it by listening to it as my computer read it for me. Have a blessed day, and God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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This is a very good haiku. I was not able to read it because the colors are just such that I have problems with my vision being able to see it but I was able to hear it by listening to it as my computer read it for me. Have a blessed day, and God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I'm sorry about the font. I can make it lighter.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Have a great day!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your human haiku poem - excellent picture presentation of the sail boat - poem has good word count - poem appears to tell of a lost love and a grieving person being brought home alone by the ocean currents - a bit of a mystery - makes me wonder what happened to the other person! Interesting - Good Job. AP
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I like your human haiku poem - excellent picture presentation of the sail boat - poem has good word count - poem appears to tell of a lost love and a grieving person being brought home alone by the ocean currents - a bit of a mystery - makes me wonder what happened to the other person! Interesting - Good Job. AP
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Have a great day!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Julcia
I read haiku out loud in front of my
orchid collection. I find this enables
me to hear the specific tones of the poem. For this poem I reduced my
sound to a quiet hush. Then I felt
the woman's sorrow for her lost
lover, the coldness in the boat,the
slowness of the trip to shore. I felt
her experience. Julcia
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I read haiku out loud in front of my
orchid collection. I find this enables
me to hear the specific tones of the poem. For this poem I reduced my
sound to a quiet hush. Then I felt
the woman's sorrow for her lost
lover, the coldness in the boat,the
slowness of the trip to shore. I felt
her experience. Julcia
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Yes, julcia, you got it right. That's how you experience haiku. Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and insightful feedback.
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Reading your work is an honor and is
full of enjoyment for me. A necessary
six stars.
Julcia
Comment from kahpot
How very sad, "grief waves" so very much emotion in these words, as waves of grief sweep us away when a loved one is lost, beautifully written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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How very sad, "grief waves" so very much emotion in these words, as waves of grief sweep us away when a loved one is lost, beautifully written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sad poem about loss and grief and the loneliness and emptiness is echoing in this poem on the nighttime ocean in a lonely boat, a sinister and ghostly scene here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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A sad poem about loss and grief and the loneliness and emptiness is echoing in this poem on the nighttime ocean in a lonely boat, a sinister and ghostly scene here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Xoxox
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Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. For whatever reason, the lover is no longer there for her and so they is no more journeying the seas as the boat of their relationship has ceased carrying them. I liked how the "waves of grief" bring her back to shore to get her bearings.
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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That's so sad. For whatever reason, the lover is no longer there for her and so they is no more journeying the seas as the boat of their relationship has ceased carrying them. I liked how the "waves of grief" bring her back to shore to get her bearings.
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the insightful feedback... you are right.... that's what I was feeling.
Love you, big sister.
Marival ❤️
