Quiet Lawyer
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37 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good story with all the right affections, the ones that Ali has never experienced before. It is doubtful Alan ever made her feel so loved (or even liked).
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Very good story with all the right affections, the ones that Ali has never experienced before. It is doubtful Alan ever made her feel so loved (or even liked).
Comment Written 11-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Alan abused her and tore her down. Opposite of Cord. Thank you for the support.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
As always, your descriptions are spot-on. Cordero likes ice cream with everything, eh? He could be close to perfect, in my honest opinion. I trust all is well with you.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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barbara:
As always, your descriptions are spot-on. Cordero likes ice cream with everything, eh? He could be close to perfect, in my honest opinion. I trust all is well with you.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Cord loves his icecream.
Comment from amahra
LOL! I love Samson. If he's not jumping into the bathtub, he's knocking people into the pool. This was a very nice chapter, full of romance and a little laughter.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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LOL! I love Samson. If he's not jumping into the bathtub, he's knocking people into the pool. This was a very nice chapter, full of romance and a little laughter.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Samson is a great dog. I had a friend who had a newfie. Great dogs. Thank you for the kind reiew.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello. Barbara,
Excellent chapter, very funny at times. I think he should marry her right away.
I Like how she teases him about his icecream addiction. I like ice cream too. LoL he shouldn't had pushed her in the pool.
It was fun to read the Spanish words. I'm from Spain.
Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hello. Barbara,
Excellent chapter, very funny at times. I think he should marry her right away.
I Like how she teases him about his icecream addiction. I like ice cream too. LoL he shouldn't had pushed her in the pool.
It was fun to read the Spanish words. I'm from Spain.
Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from w.j.debi
Sounds like I've missed an interesting story that builds up to this romantic scene.
Your dialogue sounds natural and your narrative voice is engaging.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Sounds like I've missed an interesting story that builds up to this romantic scene.
Your dialogue sounds natural and your narrative voice is engaging.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The lightning strikes when there is a storm. I have always felt it is so difficult to leave the decency in a romance story, but I have always left the romance to the imagination. I do like your story.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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The lightning strikes when there is a storm. I have always felt it is so difficult to leave the decency in a romance story, but I have always left the romance to the imagination. I do like your story.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from jmdg1954
They went out for an evening walk under the Texas stars, which they do frequently. Suddenly a storm rolls in. They run for cover. When this accident happens-
As they got to the pool, Samson ran between them. Splash!
"Help!"
You're a good writer! I think you can write her falling into the pool better/clearer.
You mentioned it after the fact. It was sort of confusing the way you layed it out.
Just my opinion.
Nicely done.
John
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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They went out for an evening walk under the Texas stars, which they do frequently. Suddenly a storm rolls in. They run for cover. When this accident happens-
As they got to the pool, Samson ran between them. Splash!
"Help!"
You're a good writer! I think you can write her falling into the pool better/clearer.
You mentioned it after the fact. It was sort of confusing the way you layed it out.
Just my opinion.
Nicely done.
John
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I will work on that area. Another reviewer mentioned it too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent characterization, and the setting, with the storm coming up suddenly, really adds. That Samson means well, but he's a big klutz. It's great to have a dog in the story. Try not to overdo Ali getting into trouble. I don't know how many times she's needed rescuing. It makes it a bit hard to accept her as a powerful attorney. If Cord thinks he'd better marry Ali, he'd better ask the question first. Maybe that will be coming soon. What a wonderful couple they'll make. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Excellent characterization, and the setting, with the storm coming up suddenly, really adds. That Samson means well, but he's a big klutz. It's great to have a dog in the story. Try not to overdo Ali getting into trouble. I don't know how many times she's needed rescuing. It makes it a bit hard to accept her as a powerful attorney. If Cord thinks he'd better marry Ali, he'd better ask the question first. Maybe that will be coming soon. What a wonderful couple they'll make. Great work. judi
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. This is Ali's final accident.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Proof positive ice cream is an aphrodisiac, ha ha. I liked the reference to lightning being different colors as well. I must admit to being kind of a literal reader, but at first when I read this part, I was confused: As they got to the pool, Samson ran between them. Splash! "Help!"
I would just clarify slightly. Maybe:
As they got to the pool, Samson ran between them and knocked Alexandra off-balance.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Proof positive ice cream is an aphrodisiac, ha ha. I liked the reference to lightning being different colors as well. I must admit to being kind of a literal reader, but at first when I read this part, I was confused: As they got to the pool, Samson ran between them. Splash! "Help!"
I would just clarify slightly. Maybe:
As they got to the pool, Samson ran between them and knocked Alexandra off-balance.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I like your suggestion and have made the change. A couple of reviewers mentioned that area. I need to work on it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very well written. Though with all that kissing, I simply cannot imagine them not touching one another. Especially with Ali in her pajamas.
Best wishes
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Very well written. Though with all that kissing, I simply cannot imagine them not touching one another. Especially with Ali in her pajamas.
Best wishes
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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LOL Cord made a promise to her father. Thank you for the kind review.
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Uh, there are promises, and there are 'promises'.
(winky face here)
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LOL
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Cord's tongue is intimately acquainted with Ali's, but his hands don't know where second base is! (even bigger winky face here)
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LOL I guess you need to use your imagination. I can see you are.
