Life's Storm
Free verse.20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
i enjoyed your rich descriptions here and watching the waves lap in such a fashion does make you feel tired as all that energy release is tiring! Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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i enjoyed your rich descriptions here and watching the waves lap in such a fashion does make you feel tired as all that energy release is tiring! Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much .
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a great club entry. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. Your message is relatable especially your last line. I too am tired to the marrow in my bones. Remove the extra period after tired.
For better spacing in the poem box, I would drop the first line down one space. The visual fits well. Good luck with your club entry.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This is a great club entry. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. Your message is relatable especially your last line. I too am tired to the marrow in my bones. Remove the extra period after tired.
For better spacing in the poem box, I would drop the first line down one space. The visual fits well. Good luck with your club entry.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good writing for the contest a picture of this. I enjoyed the post very much and you did a good job of writing it in such a way That when it is red by the generated voice of the computer, it flowed very well. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This is a very good writing for the contest a picture of this. I enjoyed the post very much and you did a good job of writing it in such a way That when it is red by the generated voice of the computer, it flowed very well. Patricia.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club entry, Sanku, was well done. Your words aptly
described the actions of the sea and how those actions
can be applied to life. Your words were well thought out
and created a great picture for readers.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Your club entry, Sanku, was well done. Your words aptly
described the actions of the sea and how those actions
can be applied to life. Your words were well thought out
and created a great picture for readers.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice presentation and notes are appreciated, Sanku.
-You wrote a very good poem with vivid imagery, like
"a wailing frenzy" "and the wind moaned."
-I also like the inclusion of the quote.
-You paint a vivid word picture of elements of nature
that symbolize how you have felt, and I agree that the
sea can be a metaphor for life.
-Good closing lines that show even though the
storm has calmed, going through it has taken an emotional toll.
-Very well done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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-Very nice presentation and notes are appreciated, Sanku.
-You wrote a very good poem with vivid imagery, like
"a wailing frenzy" "and the wind moaned."
-I also like the inclusion of the quote.
-You paint a vivid word picture of elements of nature
that symbolize how you have felt, and I agree that the
sea can be a metaphor for life.
-Good closing lines that show even though the
storm has calmed, going through it has taken an emotional toll.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you verymuch and I am sorry my reply was delayed
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You are very welcome, and no problem about a delayed reply.
Comment from TDLRasmar
Life's a Storm, then you marry one. Hey. I can see why you are tired. You wore yourself out in the poem. Nice job of showing the cycle from frenzy to tired.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Life's a Storm, then you marry one. Hey. I can see why you are tired. You wore yourself out in the poem. Nice job of showing the cycle from frenzy to tired.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A beautiful free verse, Sanku using the forces of nature as a metaphor for life. Well used alliteration throughout adds to the dramatic descriptions. Great interpretation for the PixThis club picture.
Valda
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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A beautiful free verse, Sanku using the forces of nature as a metaphor for life. Well used alliteration throughout adds to the dramatic descriptions. Great interpretation for the PixThis club picture.
Valda
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You've done a fine job with your use of alliterative words. Some become onomatopoetic. This is very sensory, the reader will feel tossed and may find themselves moaning like the personified wind. As you have mentioned, this is a strong metaphor. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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You've done a fine job with your use of alliterative words. Some become onomatopoetic. This is very sensory, the reader will feel tossed and may find themselves moaning like the personified wind. As you have mentioned, this is a strong metaphor. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much
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Comment from Aussie
I liked your club entry for Life's Storms. I feel he could have been a fisherman and was well versed with the sea's moves, dashing men to death and finally calm against the shore when it arrives to meet the land.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I liked your club entry for Life's Storms. I feel he could have been a fisherman and was well versed with the sea's moves, dashing men to death and finally calm against the shore when it arrives to meet the land.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from royowen
Yes I could see, feel and hear the ructions of life throughout your well written free verse poem dear friend. The seas are truly a metaphor for, they can restless, stormy, unpredictable, and they can certainly be calm too. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Yes I could see, feel and hear the ructions of life throughout your well written free verse poem dear friend. The seas are truly a metaphor for, they can restless, stormy, unpredictable, and they can certainly be calm too. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you verymuch
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