Some Call It Luck
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
If Dana is about to come into Abby's life, there should be fireworks. You did a really good job of making the reader see there is practically no good thing about her, although she was sorry when she broke Abby's arm. She is also becoming a little less sure of herself.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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If Dana is about to come into Abby's life, there should be fireworks. You did a really good job of making the reader see there is practically no good thing about her, although she was sorry when she broke Abby's arm. She is also becoming a little less sure of herself.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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You're right. Trouble is coming. Thanks for the good review, Carol.
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, this was an interesting chapter. You don't often see a new character brought into the middle of a book. I don't think she was brought aboard just to provide some of the backstory for Abby's girlhood, although it was pretty nifty the way you did that. I hope she will be a continuing factor in the remaining novel.
Jay
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Well, this was an interesting chapter. You don't often see a new character brought into the middle of a book. I don't think she was brought aboard just to provide some of the backstory for Abby's girlhood, although it was pretty nifty the way you did that. I hope she will be a continuing factor in the remaining novel.
Jay
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Dana is not a total stranger to the story because some of the incidents she mentioned we saw from Abby's POV in Part 1. Dana was the one who teased her the most. She will definitely be a big part of Part 3.
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I'm wondering if that was before I came aboard your novel.
Jay
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Pretty sure it was.
Comment from royowen
So, a third person enters the ring beside Abby and E.J., how interesting, I can see where this is going, but I'll leave that to, I like stories as through the first person's eyes, and I like this one, a great contrast between her and Abby, one can see how life fashions people. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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So, a third person enters the ring beside Abby and E.J., how interesting, I can see where this is going, but I'll leave that to, I like stories as through the first person's eyes, and I like this one, a great contrast between her and Abby, one can see how life fashions people. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Yeah, besides Fairbanks earlier, Dana is definitely the villain of the story.
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That?s right
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Please don't tell me this Dana person is going after Kenny just to get even with Abby. NO!!!!!!!!!! Or maybe she'll go after E.J. If she cheated on him, it could get him to drinking again. Maybe she decided to be a nice person, but I doubt it. I do like this story.
That marriage lasted about five years, when we realized that it wasn't working and decided to call it quits. (you can omit 'that')
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Please don't tell me this Dana person is going after Kenny just to get even with Abby. NO!!!!!!!!!! Or maybe she'll go after E.J. If she cheated on him, it could get him to drinking again. Maybe she decided to be a nice person, but I doubt it. I do like this story.
That marriage lasted about five years, when we realized that it wasn't working and decided to call it quits. (you can omit 'that')
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Hey, those are all good possibilities! Let's see which one (or a different one) comes to fruition.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Interesting but not exactly spellbinding. I don't believe I have read of Dana previously. Quite a minx you have introduced, seducing everyone in town and about. I'll be on pins for the turning of the page.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Interesting but not exactly spellbinding. I don't believe I have read of Dana previously. Quite a minx you have introduced, seducing everyone in town and about. I'll be on pins for the turning of the page.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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You're right. This is just background to understand Dana's role in what is to come.
Comment from jmdg1954
Excellent chapter. You did a great work up on introducing Dana and how she will tie into the story.
Personal opinion-
He got a job selling seeds, fertilizer, and (shit) and traveled a lot.
I would consider changing "shit" ... are you referring to manure or meaning other farming supplies?
To me the word was out of place. Just my opinion.
John
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Excellent chapter. You did a great work up on introducing Dana and how she will tie into the story.
Personal opinion-
He got a job selling seeds, fertilizer, and (shit) and traveled a lot.
I would consider changing "shit" ... are you referring to manure or meaning other farming supplies?
To me the word was out of place. Just my opinion.
John
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Other farming supplies. It was meant to show she's a bit crude, but I'll think about it some more. Thanks for that, John.
