Dreaming of Spring
Suffering with winter maladies7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I loved the humor that you infused in this poem of having a winter cold and dreaming of spring. I really liked: "wheezed like an ancient accordion" and "We lounged like lumps on the sofa." Hope you are fully recovered now. (Was this when you had Covid?)
Sorry I missed this contest voting!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I loved the humor that you infused in this poem of having a winter cold and dreaming of spring. I really liked: "wheezed like an ancient accordion" and "We lounged like lumps on the sofa." Hope you are fully recovered now. (Was this when you had Covid?)
Sorry I missed this contest voting!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for reviewing. This was from one of my books from some years ago. Hugs!
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Wow! I'm glad you published it! I just ordered one of your books now. 💖
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Thank you so much for ordering! I hope you will enjoy it. I have put a number of things on here from different books, but occasionally I write one specifically for a contest here.
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I know I'll love it! 💖
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written free verse entry to this contest. The text is a good size but could be a bit larger. The message is stated with clarity and is easy to understand. You used wonderful example of metaphor throughout your poem. These were just a few I enjoyed......His cough, like a deep rumbling from the depths of the earth,
Or mine, that wheezed like
An ancient accordion.
Your poem looks as if has been squeezed into the poem box. Create space around your poem and it will present better. Go to the beginning of the first line and hit enter twice. Go to the end of the last line and hit enter twice. Now you have a better frame of space around your poem.
Lastly, your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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This is a well-written free verse entry to this contest. The text is a good size but could be a bit larger. The message is stated with clarity and is easy to understand. You used wonderful example of metaphor throughout your poem. These were just a few I enjoyed......His cough, like a deep rumbling from the depths of the earth,
Or mine, that wheezed like
An ancient accordion.
Your poem looks as if has been squeezed into the poem box. Create space around your poem and it will present better. Go to the beginning of the first line and hit enter twice. Go to the end of the last line and hit enter twice. Now you have a better frame of space around your poem.
Lastly, your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for all your suggestions, along with your review, Sandra.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Vicks has always been a favorite of mine since the day I was born. (I'm glad that you mentioned this remedy, that is soothing, and it does help in many cases). Yep, there's nothing like looking forward to spring. Like your poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Vicks has always been a favorite of mine since the day I was born. (I'm glad that you mentioned this remedy, that is soothing, and it does help in many cases). Yep, there's nothing like looking forward to spring. Like your poem.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for the review. I'm glad you liked my poem.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your commentary on being locked in with the flu, or Covid, makes for a successful free verse. You have used great descriptions of how it physically feels to be sick, but also of the isolation required to beat the virus. Good job.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Your commentary on being locked in with the flu, or Covid, makes for a successful free verse. You have used great descriptions of how it physically feels to be sick, but also of the isolation required to beat the virus. Good job.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is the unfortunate dread of spring with the pollen flying about and the hay-fever sufferers need medication and have to close all the windows, I feel for you, but I would rather have Spring than Winter, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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This is the unfortunate dread of spring with the pollen flying about and the hay-fever sufferers need medication and have to close all the windows, I feel for you, but I would rather have Spring than Winter, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for your review, Dolly.
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
You did a great job of depicting the suffering with the flu or maybe Covid. It is a miserable time indeed. Truly makes you long for Spring. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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You did a great job of depicting the suffering with the flu or maybe Covid. It is a miserable time indeed. Truly makes you long for Spring. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Mystery Writer,
A fine free verse offering of two individuals suffering winter maladies and hoping that spring will bring the cure they both need.
Relatable and timely.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Hello, Mystery Writer,
A fine free verse offering of two individuals suffering winter maladies and hoping that spring will bring the cure they both need.
Relatable and timely.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Diane. I appreciate your excellent review.
