Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

You did a great job on this verse and I loved the rollicking rhymes you chose to use throughout this piece. Welcome to FanStory and I know you will love it like I do!!

Melissa

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your review and for your kind words - greatly appreciated.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Brendan,

I'm from Madrid but I moved to America at 16 years old.

I like your poem, it's well written. I can't rhyme, but I enjoy reading it. Your rhyme don't sounds forced.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your review and for your kind words - greatly appreciated.

Comment from Heather Knight

Exceptional

Hi,
This is a lovely poem. I wish I was able to rhyme like this.
Whereabouts in Spain do you live? The coast?
I'm Spanish and live in Madrid.
Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your review and for your kind words - greatly appreciated. I am particularly grateful for the six stars@!

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

P.S. Forgot to say that we actually live between Alicante and Murcia.

reply by Heather Knight on 29-Jan-2023

Lovely place.

Comment from jenintorre

Exceptional

Wow! Fabulous. I love this children's poem. 'Shell shocked', great play on words. This is so cleverly written and an excellent entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thanks so much, really grateful for your feedback. Particularly appreciate the 6 stars. Makes it all worthwhile.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Welcome to FanStory, Brendan. It is so nice to read you today. This is absolutely darling and with a very likable character named Nell. Precious. I hope you are going to make this a book.

Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your review and kind words. Very greatly appreciated.

reply by Sally Law on 27-Jan-2023

Most welcome. My pleasure as always. Sal :))

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Welcome to the forum of lost wannabe authors. Not really. Some actually have been published, so they believe, even if it was through self-publishing. Does that count? As for me, I'm aged and decrepit, with little to do, so I arise early each morn and type a line or two.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your kind words - greatly appreciated. Brendan

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Congratulations on your first post.
I enjoyed your intriguing and informative poem.
The rhyming is well done and it's quite an informative poem.
Best of luck.
Shirley

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your kind words - greatly appreciated. Brendan

Comment from jacquelyn popp

Excellent

This was a cute poem. A child and even an adult would really enjoy reading this. The imagery, and rhyming went together perfectly. The words in your poem flowed together very nicely. I enjoyed reading it. Nicely done. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your kind words - greatly appreciated. Brendan

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's poem is long yet very enjoyable to read. I found the poem
engaging, descriptive and creative. Thank you for the author notes -
it is always great to know the history. The author expresses his words well
with many interesting details. The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Hi Brendan, welcome to Fanstory!.....Maria

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for your kind words - greatly appreciated. Brendan

Comment from Brandon Clark

Exceptional

Congratulations on your first post! You'll find the FanStory community very helpful which makes it a more pleasant experience. This poem was excellent, especially for a first time post. It flowed easy and made it that much more enjoyable.

I see no other issues or revisions needed.

Welcome to FanStory and keep posting!! To ''kick off" your FS journey, and because this was a very nice poem, I am going to give you six stars!

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Thanks for your kind words - greatly appreciated. Also, thanks especially for the 6 stars! Brendan