I Knew It!
The world is flat!11 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love that Spock could stay, but you had to look for other accommodation.
I wouldn't stop at Papua N.G. either. Good decision. Loved this trip. Great story telling Yvonne and congratulations on the contest win. Loved it, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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I love that Spock could stay, but you had to look for other accommodation.
I wouldn't stop at Papua N.G. either. Good decision. Loved this trip. Great story telling Yvonne and congratulations on the contest win. Loved it, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I'm appreciate you reviewing it.
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, that's the best explanation - it's true but there's no proof! I liked how you used the map to show us the journey and how you traveled land and seas with a Great Dane! Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Ah, that's the best explanation - it's true but there's no proof! I liked how you used the map to show us the journey and how you traveled land and seas with a Great Dane! Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you! 💖
Comment from Loren .
What a wonderful journey. Thank you for taking me along. I enjoyed everything. I'm glad you did not fall off the edge of the earth as you would have been lost and not able to testify to all that you had seen. Good thing, too, that motors have a reverse drive, I don't blame you for heading west and not north either. Take care and keep journaling. Loren
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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What a wonderful journey. Thank you for taking me along. I enjoyed everything. I'm glad you did not fall off the edge of the earth as you would have been lost and not able to testify to all that you had seen. Good thing, too, that motors have a reverse drive, I don't blame you for heading west and not north either. Take care and keep journaling. Loren
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful review!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Congratulations on Milestone Post #1000! This is a good entry to the contest Flat. The text is a great size. That is important for long entries. It makes the reading easier. The plot is well conceived and developed. It is also not rushed. The speaker and his Great Dane are believable characters. You sprinkled great detail and adventures throughout your story. This would be a great story in an upper elementary school storybook. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest. It was a good read. You have my vote.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Congratulations on Milestone Post #1000! This is a good entry to the contest Flat. The text is a great size. That is important for long entries. It makes the reading easier. The plot is well conceived and developed. It is also not rushed. The speaker and his Great Dane are believable characters. You sprinkled great detail and adventures throughout your story. This would be a great story in an upper elementary school storybook. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest. It was a good read. You have my vote.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you so very much. I appreciate that.
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You are welcome. Several shared my sentiment you have a great lead.
Comment from Chris Davies
You had an interesting take on the story, which I thought was a difficult one to write. Loved that you used Spock to "humanize" it. I wish you best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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You had an interesting take on the story, which I thought was a difficult one to write. Loved that you used Spock to "humanize" it. I wish you best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Congratulations on post number 1,000! That is a remarkable achievement. Your story is very creative and well-written. It is a fine entry for this contest, good luck. Terry.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Congratulations on post number 1,000! That is a remarkable achievement. Your story is very creative and well-written. It is a fine entry for this contest, good luck. Terry.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I'm trying my wings with writing prose.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Many thanks for entering the competition and I think you did a good job with this. It comes across very conversational-like which makes for easy reading.
I'd have liked a bit more at the end about what was seen but that's writer's choice. Meets the criteria.
We stopped in small town somewhere in the Smokey Mountains- in a small town.
They meant that. When I went to register, the night clerk said Spock could stay, but humans were the most destructive, and I would have to find other accommodations.- lol
We sailed close to Pitcairn Island, a was a place I had always been interested in, - I would delete a was here.
I don't think even 180 lbs. Spock could take one on.- maybe change this to I don't think even at 180lbs, Spock could take one on.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Hi there,
Many thanks for entering the competition and I think you did a good job with this. It comes across very conversational-like which makes for easy reading.
I'd have liked a bit more at the end about what was seen but that's writer's choice. Meets the criteria.
We stopped in small town somewhere in the Smokey Mountains- in a small town.
They meant that. When I went to register, the night clerk said Spock could stay, but humans were the most destructive, and I would have to find other accommodations.- lol
We sailed close to Pitcairn Island, a was a place I had always been interested in, - I would delete a was here.
I don't think even 180 lbs. Spock could take one on.- maybe change this to I don't think even at 180lbs, Spock could take one on.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you for this great and encouraging review. I will keep your critique for future attempts. I'll make those changes now.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I hope the main character collected his $$$$$$
before too much celebration. You did an awesome
job, Mystery Author, with your contest entry. I enjoyed
reading it. Your details put readers right there with the
man and his dog. I'm thrilled he stuck to his guns when
the naysayers came out. Your words flowed smoothly with
pertinent details. The man did a great job recording his
thoughts and the facts in his journal and taking pictures.
That ought to make others sit up and take notice. He set
out to find proof of his beliefs and succeeded much more
than he or anyone thought possible. The inclusion of specific
points and places lets readers follow along til he reaches
the end. Great intuition on his part to know to stop before
he fell off the edge. The image was perfect--flat just like the
Earth he proved with his journey. Congratulations on your
milestone post!
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I hope the main character collected his $$$$$$
before too much celebration. You did an awesome
job, Mystery Author, with your contest entry. I enjoyed
reading it. Your details put readers right there with the
man and his dog. I'm thrilled he stuck to his guns when
the naysayers came out. Your words flowed smoothly with
pertinent details. The man did a great job recording his
thoughts and the facts in his journal and taking pictures.
That ought to make others sit up and take notice. He set
out to find proof of his beliefs and succeeded much more
than he or anyone thought possible. The inclusion of specific
points and places lets readers follow along til he reaches
the end. Great intuition on his part to know to stop before
he fell off the edge. The image was perfect--flat just like the
Earth he proved with his journey. Congratulations on your
milestone post!
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much!!!!!
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your story is delightful and fun to read. You have done a wonderful job with the writing prompt. So, the world really is flat, right? I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Your story is delightful and fun to read. You have done a wonderful job with the writing prompt. So, the world really is flat, right? I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Who really knows? hahahaha. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
I enjoyed reading your article. Well written and interesting. You have a knack for presenting the unimaginable as believable. Good job thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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I enjoyed reading your article. Well written and interesting. You have a knack for presenting the unimaginable as believable. Good job thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I'm branching out into prose writing.