Angels Unaware
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Truth and Consequences"A Memoir and Love Story
10 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
That was dramatic and traumatic from beginning to end, considering how close family members should be and what actually happens in real life. It reminded me of something a former police chief in Utah said in a long speech on past experiences, that sometimes events happen which seem to suck all the light out of a place that should have been more neutral. You were lucky to get a bit more of an explanation, even if it was years later. What a perceptive insight about it possibly being the OTHER sister there in another way.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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That was dramatic and traumatic from beginning to end, considering how close family members should be and what actually happens in real life. It reminded me of something a former police chief in Utah said in a long speech on past experiences, that sometimes events happen which seem to suck all the light out of a place that should have been more neutral. You were lucky to get a bit more of an explanation, even if it was years later. What a perceptive insight about it possibly being the OTHER sister there in another way.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I'm always appreciative of your insight and your writing experience that comes to the fore in your reviews. Good to get back in touch with writing friends.
Comment from Shirley McLain
That was traumatic to read, much less live through. You did an excellent job telling your story. I lived with an alcoholic father and lots of physical fights. I thought they would kill each other, but thank God they survived and lived together 58 years before my mom passed. Have a blessed evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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That was traumatic to read, much less live through. You did an excellent job telling your story. I lived with an alcoholic father and lots of physical fights. I thought they would kill each other, but thank God they survived and lived together 58 years before my mom passed. Have a blessed evening. Shirley
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks Shirley
Comment from mermaids
Your account of the domestic violence is vivid and I felt like I was there with you as your father was assaulting your mother. Your story held my interest, your writing is excellent and I look forward to reading more of your story.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Your account of the domestic violence is vivid and I felt like I was there with you as your father was assaulting your mother. Your story held my interest, your writing is excellent and I look forward to reading more of your story.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much
Comment from Alaskastory
"Truth and Consequences" contains descriptions of how a small child spied a scary event and his amazing reaction. The style you use has a sharp impact on reader interest, making it impossible not to keep reading. Very interesting piece.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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"Truth and Consequences" contains descriptions of how a small child spied a scary event and his amazing reaction. The style you use has a sharp impact on reader interest, making it impossible not to keep reading. Very interesting piece.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks Marie!
Comment from royowen
I think in many ways I suffer the things you do, my parents fought very badly, and some of the provocative things my mother said to my father should have evoked a bad reaction from him, but there was once an incident were my father descended threateningly towards her, I was fourteen, as big as my father, I stepped between them and hit him in the mouth, he looked really startled with blood pouring from his mouth, but it stopped, really my father was a gentle man, mum could be violent though, I still remember terrible things she said to me, and terrible beating I received. Well done, thanks for sharing. Blessings Roy
Suggestion, 2nd time. Those words haunt me, (to this day) 2: Where there was (a) bathroom, 3: The number (of) hugs 4: someone trying (to) stop me.
5: What (had) happened.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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I think in many ways I suffer the things you do, my parents fought very badly, and some of the provocative things my mother said to my father should have evoked a bad reaction from him, but there was once an incident were my father descended threateningly towards her, I was fourteen, as big as my father, I stepped between them and hit him in the mouth, he looked really startled with blood pouring from his mouth, but it stopped, really my father was a gentle man, mum could be violent though, I still remember terrible things she said to me, and terrible beating I received. Well done, thanks for sharing. Blessings Roy
Suggestion, 2nd time. Those words haunt me, (to this day) 2: Where there was (a) bathroom, 3: The number (of) hugs 4: someone trying (to) stop me.
5: What (had) happened.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from BethShelby
This was a horrible thing for any family to live through. So many have childhood memories that they tend to block out. You remember enough to have had flash-backs and PTSD. I guess people have points during which time they lose total control and apparently, your father did. I guess that is how get off with a temporary insanity plea. We can't choose the personalities of our parents. Life experiences make them who they become but God can change all that. I think you had an angel with you that day.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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This was a horrible thing for any family to live through. So many have childhood memories that they tend to block out. You remember enough to have had flash-backs and PTSD. I guess people have points during which time they lose total control and apparently, your father did. I guess that is how get off with a temporary insanity plea. We can't choose the personalities of our parents. Life experiences make them who they become but God can change all that. I think you had an angel with you that day.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks again, Beth.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Wow, very good. We too survived the days when everyone turned a blind eye to domestic violence. Even the cops knew. Just swept it under the rug.
This was well written, and all though hard to write, hopefully it was theraputic.
Thank you for giving us a peek into your childhood.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Wow, very good. We too survived the days when everyone turned a blind eye to domestic violence. Even the cops knew. Just swept it under the rug.
This was well written, and all though hard to write, hopefully it was theraputic.
Thank you for giving us a peek into your childhood.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your perceptive review, understanding the undercurrent developing.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting chapter, hard to read, harder to live through.
notes:
I was a told a baby girl died with crib death.
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I was told a baby girl died from crib death.
it was hard to believe in my virgin mind that there could [be] danger lurking from the person I trusted the most.
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Recommend looking at the ninth paragraph. It seems contradictory.
And I could still hear [her or my mother] cry like a helpless cat in weakened voice.
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"I bet {your} sorry now."
-you're
It was then that I knew, God had {given me answer.}
-given me the answer
-given me answers
-given me an answer
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Very interesting chapter, hard to read, harder to live through.
notes:
I was a told a baby girl died with crib death.
-edit
I was told a baby girl died from crib death.
it was hard to believe in my virgin mind that there could [be] danger lurking from the person I trusted the most.
-missing word
Recommend looking at the ninth paragraph. It seems contradictory.
And I could still hear [her or my mother] cry like a helpless cat in weakened voice.
- missing subject
"I bet {your} sorry now."
-you're
It was then that I knew, God had {given me answer.}
-given me the answer
-given me answers
-given me an answer
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Appreciate your reviews.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
This is very well written. Your story line kept me glued. I'm sorry you saw those things as a little boy. It breaks the heart. One thing you could try is to leave your reader hanging at the end of each chapter.
This is very good.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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This is very well written. Your story line kept me glued. I'm sorry you saw those things as a little boy. It breaks the heart. One thing you could try is to leave your reader hanging at the end of each chapter.
This is very good.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks again. Will remember the hook and hangers.
Comment from Ben Colder
Stan this is good. Is it true? You were born in 58? The year I returned from Germany and was discharged from the Army. You did well with this and somewhat typical for abuse. What children go through to exist in such a cruel world without Jesus.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Stan this is good. Is it true? You were born in 58? The year I returned from Germany and was discharged from the Army. You did well with this and somewhat typical for abuse. What children go through to exist in such a cruel world without Jesus.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks again Big Ben
