Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "There is time!"Musing of an old man
31 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Your powers of description are excellent, John. With this stanza I could picture being there:
As if it were a spiritual guide,
a deep soul-feeling connection
draws me to this solo obelisk.
With a sudden knowing,
I sense a personal dawning.
This is a great piece.
D
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Your powers of description are excellent, John. With this stanza I could picture being there:
As if it were a spiritual guide,
a deep soul-feeling connection
draws me to this solo obelisk.
With a sudden knowing,
I sense a personal dawning.
This is a great piece.
D
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Douglas, I appreciate and value your reviews always, Jim
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My apologies, Jim. Thought you were a John.
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John, Jim, Jack ... No Problem , just never call me Sue 😊😊
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HA!
Comment from karenina
A metaphorical tour de force. I have a treasured bookmark my dad gave me decades ago. It's a quote from "George Eliot:
"It is never too late to be what you might have been."
(These days there is some disagreement that it should be attributed to her, but I digress...)
The strength of your verse lies in your "word-smithing" and I find myself doubling back to savor each line.
Six worthy and here I am, On Tuesday no less, without another until next Sunday!
Bravo.
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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A metaphorical tour de force. I have a treasured bookmark my dad gave me decades ago. It's a quote from "George Eliot:
"It is never too late to be what you might have been."
(These days there is some disagreement that it should be attributed to her, but I digress...)
The strength of your verse lies in your "word-smithing" and I find myself doubling back to savor each line.
Six worthy and here I am, On Tuesday no less, without another until next Sunday!
Bravo.
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you! I will take your virtual six nonetheless. 🙏🙏🎶
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Hurrah! I'll owe you one...
Comment from Jim Wile
This is a melancholic, but in the end, hopeful poem about a lost young man with doubts about the hardships in his life and his loneliness as he looks out over a mountain range. Then he spots a single outcropping that somehow gives him hope that there is time to turn his life around.
The imagery you present is marvelous in setting the mood of the poem, which is very well-written. Jim
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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This is a melancholic, but in the end, hopeful poem about a lost young man with doubts about the hardships in his life and his loneliness as he looks out over a mountain range. Then he spots a single outcropping that somehow gives him hope that there is time to turn his life around.
The imagery you present is marvelous in setting the mood of the poem, which is very well-written. Jim
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you sir! I value your validation.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork to write about.
-I enjoyed reading your poem
with vivid images describing
what you see and feel from this view.
-Effective nature imagery with the mist
and "outcroppings
rock solid, steel gray."
-I like the conclusions you draw
in the final two stanzas.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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-Good artwork to write about.
-I enjoyed reading your poem
with vivid images describing
what you see and feel from this view.
-Effective nature imagery with the mist
and "outcroppings
rock solid, steel gray."
-I like the conclusions you draw
in the final two stanzas.
-Well done!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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I appreciate you Pam!
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Thanks, Jim! You had a very good poem and deserved the review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Jim, you have hooked the first and last stanzas together very nicely with metaphors of your life's journey. For me, this poem cries out for rhyme.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Jim, you have hooked the first and last stanzas together very nicely with metaphors of your life's journey. For me, this poem cries out for rhyme.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Paul thank you for your input.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This could be taken one of two ways. You could be comparing the phases and passages of life to the craggy, uphill battle of mountain climbing. Or it could be compared to actual mountain climbing. Seeing the view as it changes while climbing. Either way, this was a stirring poem. Great imagery. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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This could be taken one of two ways. You could be comparing the phases and passages of life to the craggy, uphill battle of mountain climbing. Or it could be compared to actual mountain climbing. Seeing the view as it changes while climbing. Either way, this was a stirring poem. Great imagery. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Gretchen yes it could, but rather is a intended as a stirring metaphor about a persons trek through life?s challenges.
Comment from JT traveller
Once again, yet another creative and beautifully composed piece of poetry. A joy to read. Your use of metaphors makes this a stand out for me. Your descriptive abilities are outstanding.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Once again, yet another creative and beautifully composed piece of poetry. A joy to read. Your use of metaphors makes this a stand out for me. Your descriptive abilities are outstanding.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Jacqueline, thank you for seeing this composition through the metaphors intended as a stirring metaphor about life?s challenges.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nailed the poem's picture prompt.
liked the last stanza the best .
As if it were a spiritual guide,
a deep soul-feeling connection
draws me to this solo obelisk.
With a sudden knowing,
I sense a personal dawning.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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nailed the poem's picture prompt.
liked the last stanza the best .
As if it were a spiritual guide,
a deep soul-feeling connection
draws me to this solo obelisk.
With a sudden knowing,
I sense a personal dawning.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Jake, hi friend, thank you, I trust you are well!
Comment from Boogienights
This is a beautifully written poem about having faith and a positive outlook on life. You never know when your perspective will change, it's best to realize it's never too late.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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This is a beautifully written poem about having faith and a positive outlook on life. You never know when your perspective will change, it's best to realize it's never too late.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore this write, there is a yearning to do something before it is too late, there is hope and determination here. You have chosen some wonderful words here to describe your emotions and I was drawn into the scene by your strength to overcome adversity, much enjoyed, a strong and powerful write, one of your best, your talent shines through in this write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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I adore this write, there is a yearning to do something before it is too late, there is hope and determination here. You have chosen some wonderful words here to describe your emotions and I was drawn into the scene by your strength to overcome adversity, much enjoyed, a strong and powerful write, one of your best, your talent shines through in this write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Dolly, you kind words are such a comfort, thank you so very much! 🙏🙏
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You are most welcome x x x
